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In this issue Legislative drafting Master class in English, for Clarity’s conference in Boulogne: writing the law in plain language— three versions 4 Conrad Dehn Clarity Instructions for Queues Bill 4 Number 55 May 2006 Version 1—by Don Macpherson Queues Bill 2005 6 Version 2—by Robin Dormer Journal of the Commentary and Queues Bill 2005 9 international association Version 3—by Ben Piper promoting plain legal language Queues Bill 2005 12 Vicki Schmolka Drafting master classes: plain language styles are not consistent 15 Other articles Introduction to the international roundtable at the Fifth Plain Language Association INternational (PLAIN) Conference 19 Neil James Plain language developments in Australia 19 Claudia Poblete Olmedo Plain language in the Senate of Chili 22 Cristina Gelpi Plain language in Spain 23 Anne-Marie Hasselrot What’s on in plain Swedish 26 Sarah Carr Recent plain-language progress in the U.K. 27 Annetta Cheek Plain language in the United States government 30 More from the PLAIN Conference Removing barriers to food stamp assistance— one complex form at a time 32 Health literacy: the importance of clear communication for better health 39 Making things clear: how we are winning— 6 strategies and themes to our work 43 Catherine Rawson You can fix your own English 50 Sarah Carr Editor in chief: Technical jargon: an approach, an idea and Julie Clement an offering 55 Mark Adler Guest editor for this issue: Taking an overview: three rules of thumb 60 Annetta Cheek Clarity and general news 62–63 Patrons The Rt Hon Sir Christopher Staughton, The Hon Justice Michael Kirby, and H.E. Judge Kenneth Keith Founder John Walton Committee President: Professor Joseph Kimble ([email protected]) Members: Country Representatives plus Simon Adamyk, Mark Adler, Michèle Asprey, Peter Butt, Sir Edward Caldwell, Annetta Cheek, Robert Eagleson, Jenny Gracie, Philip Knight, Robert Lowe, John Pare, John Walton, Richard Woof. Country representatives Australia Italy Singapore Christopher Balmford Christopher Williams Lei-Theng Lim Cleardocs.com Via Taranto 33 Faculty of Law PO Box 2225 70031 Andria (BA) National University of Singapore Hawthorn VIC 3122 0883 554171 13 Law Link, 117590 02 9555 4849 (fax 03 9818 0599) [email protected] 6874 6464 (fax 6779 0979) [email protected] [email protected] Japan Bangladesh Kyal Hill South Africa A.K. 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Rent pa forthwith Most of the issue is devoted to reports from the 5th conference of the Plain Language Association INter- pay to difference national (http://www.plainlanguagenetwork.org/). betwee f Rent in The conference, co-hosted by the Center for Plain respect C l a r i t y e relevant Language (www.centerforplainlanguage.org) and Review ceeding the the group of federal employees devoted to plain Rent Date attainment language, PLAIN (www.plainlanguage.gov), was and rent pa spect of held in Washington, DC, in early November 2005. such period tog lated Two major conferences in one year! About 160 Rate on each installment of such diffe e people from almost 30 countries attended the confer- ence in France. Washington hosted 300 people from 16 countries. The topics addressed by the plain language An international association community and by Clarity continue to expand. In promoting plain legal language addition to the updates from various countries and Christopher Balmford’s excellent round-up of the www.clarity-international.net second conference, you’ll see articles on health literacy—a major growth area for plain language— President and on a United States-wide program to improve the Professor Joseph Kimble forms used by citizens to apply for food stamps. [email protected] The guest editor for the next issue is Peter Butt. In the following issue, Christopher Balmford Clarity … the journal ([email protected]) will be ex- ploring 2 themes. First, “the writer’s headspace”— Published in May and November in particular, why is it that some people’s writing ends up awkward and unnecessarily formal even Editor in chief when they genuinely want to write clearly? Second, Julie Clement how do grammar, punctuation, and usage affect PO Box 13038 clarity? If you have a contribution to make, please Lansing, Michigan 48909 contact the guest editor directly. Fax: 1 517 334 5781 [email protected] Annetta L. Cheek [email protected] Guest editor for next issue Dr. Cheek is an anthropologist by Peter Butt training, earning a PhD from the University of Sydney University of Arizona in 1974. 173–175 Phillip Street Most of her Federal career has Sydney, NSW 2000 Australia been in writing and implementing [email protected] regulations. She became inter- ested in the Plain Language Advertising rates movement ten years ago, and since then has worked to spread the use Full page: £150 of plain language across the gov- Smaller area: pro rata ernment. She spent four years as Minimum charge: £20 the chief plain language expert on Contact Joe Kimble, [email protected] Vice President Gore’s National Partnership for Reinventing Government. She has been the Copyright policy chair of the interagency plain language advocacy group for ten years, since it was founded, and administers the group’s Authors retain copyright in their articles. website, www.plainlanguage.gov. Currently she is an Execu- Anyone wanting to reproduce an article in whole tive Assistant to the Administrator of the Federal Aviation or in part should first obtain the permission of the Administration, where she continues to focus on plain lan- author and should acknowledge Clarity as the guage projects and serves on the Web Council. She is also source of the original. vice-chair of the board of the private sector Center for Plain Language, a federally tax-exempt organization. Clarity 55 May 2006 3 Master class in English, from Clarity’s conference in Boulogne: writing the law in plain language—three versions enter a particular place or vehicle owned by a third party (hereinafter called “the goal”)) Instructions for Queues Bill (ii) how this rule should apply where, as with bendybuses and tube trains, there is more than one goal and there may until a late stage be uncertainty where in relation to the head of the queue the goal may turn out to be Conrad Dehn, QC, Chairman [eg that as soon as this becomes apparent the head of the queue should move to the A. It is proposed that we consider how to attempt nearest goal and the rest of the queue should to write in plain English a statute for the follow him in the same order) governance of queues in public places or places to which the public has access. (iii) the commission of a criminal offence if any person not in the queue attempts to force his Theoretical background: way into a queue or to get to the goal ahead 1.