Commentary on Class IV Social Studies

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1 2nd row of t 1. Blow - The leaves move Remove the double space between the words when the wind blows. 'wind' and 'blow.'

4 3rd p, 3rd s I must wear my gum b_ _ _ s. Gumboots' is one word. In the text, there is a I must wear my gumb_ _ _ s. space between 'gum' and 'b _ _ _ s’ suggesting that they are two words. Close the gap between these words.

4 4th p, 3rd s It is very w _ _ _ today. Need for an extra dash ( _ ) to accommodate 'y' It is very w _ _ _ _ today. for the word w i n d y. As it is in the text, students would write w i n d. They can’t write ‘y.’

4 4th p, 4th s The farmers want more r The letter ‘r’ and the three dashes should not be The farmers want more _ _ _. separated. Place ‘r’ before the three dashes in r _ _ _. the next line. 5 1st p, 4th s On some days the c _ Comma after ‘days.’ Place the letter ‘c’ followed On some days, the _ _ _ s are not dark. by the dash in the second line so that the parts of c _ _ _ _ s are not dark. words are not scattered in different lines.

5 3rd p, 2nd s There is _ _ _ Put all the dashes together in the first line. There is _ _ _ _ on the ground and it looks very _ on the ground and it looks white. very white.

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6 2nd s of t Outside the class There is one extra space before this phrase compared to other phrases in this table.

7 Last p 2. What is average Use of articles. What is the average temperature of a human temperature of human body? body? 3. Does the water always boil Use of first question tag. Does the water always boil at 100ºC? Why? at 100ºC, why?

10 1st p, 2nd s A clean plastic bottle (straight The use of capital A is incorrect because it is after a clean plastic bottle (with straight sides are best), sides are best), a ruler, a a colon and hence, continuation of the first a ruler, a pencil, cellotape... pencil, cello-tape... sentence. The word 'with' is necessary. There is need for uniformity in the spelling of cellotape either as 'cello tape,' 'cellotape' or 'cello-tape.' 10 4th p Make a 100 millimetre scale. Hyphenate the 100 and millimetre and make Make a 100-millimetre scale. (Remember, every (Remember, every centimeter 'millimetre' in the second instance,a plural. centimetre is 10 millimetres) is 10 millitmetre).

11 1st p There are four main directions Space between the dash and 'E.' Use 'in' instead There are four main directions - East, West, North, -East, West, North, and South. of 'from' in the 2nd sentence. Use a colon instead and South. For example, sun rises in the east and For example, sun rises from of a dash after the word 'directions.' Write sets in the west. We have also four cardinal the east and sets in the west. 'Northeast' instead of 'North-East' as on page 27. directions: Northeast, Southeast, Southwest and We have also four Cardinal Northwest. direction - North-East, South East, South-West and North- West.

11 Box story No-one really understood why Remove the hyphen between 'No' and 'one.' No one really understood why compasses pointed compasses pointed north. north.

11 Last para 1. Which direction is your Make the question clearer. 1. In which direction is your house located from house from the school? the school? 12 Last sentence Now the compass is ready Use of the definitive article 'the.' Now the compass is ready and you can read all the and you can read all eight eight directions. directions.

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14 3rd p 6. Make a small hole in the Sequence of the sentence is 5 and not 6. Change 5. Make a small hole in the middle of the compass. middle of the compass others accordingly. No fullstop at the end of the sentence.

16 2nd p, 2nd s Ifleaves and prayer flags are Space between 'If' and 'leaves.' Comma after If leaves and prayer flags are moving, we say there moving we say there is a 'moving.' is a gentle breeze. gentle breeze.

16 3rd p If the twigs and branches of Space between the two sentences. If the twigs and branches of the trees move and the trees move and break off, break off, we say there is a strong wind. It is also we say there is a strong called a gale. wind.It is also called a gale. 16 4th p When big trees fall down, Please note the habit of making fullstops bold When big trees fall down, roofs are blown away roofs are blown away and after every bold words in this page. This need not and there is great damage everywhere; we say there is great damage be done. The emphasis is on the words that are there is a storm. everywhere we call it a storm. printed in bold, not on the fullstop. A fullstop is not a part of the word!

17 1st p, 3rd s You may want to use symbols Remove comma after the word 'words.' You may want to use symbols instead of words to instead of words, to tell what tell what the weather is like. the weather is like.

17 4th p Frost- ice like white power Spaces between i) the word Frost and the dash, Frost: ice-like white power that covers the ground that covers the ground when and ii) between the words 'very' and 'cold'. when the weather is very cold. the weather is verycold. Hyphenate the words 'ice' and ‘like.' Colons maybe better instead of dashes for words listed Flood: overflowing of a river due to heavy rainfall. on this page.

'Overflowing' is one word as is 'overflow' used on Flood - over flowing of a river page 31. 'Rainfall' is a more apt usage here than due to heavy rains. 'rains.'

17 2nd last p, 2nd s The sun rays pass through the Space between the word 'forms' and the article The sun’s rays pass through the drizzle and form a drizzle and formsa rainbow. 'a.' rainbow.

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18 Table headings Date and time Follow the same syntax. In the heading 'Wind Date and Time Direction,' both the letters W and D are in capital Weather symbol letters. Weather Symbol

18 1st column 8am Space between the figure and letters in all the 8 am first three rows.

18 3rd column 30mm Space between the figures and letters. 30 mm

19 No numbering or listing of the Number the questions or use bullets against each questions under all four of the questions. headings.

20 Last p, last s Birds stop singing . Remove space between the fullstop and the word Birds stop singing. 'singing.' 21 1st, 2nd, 3rd and During the summer,... Remove the article 'the' in these phrases since During summer,... 4th p During the winter,... they are not in reference to any particular During winter,... In the summer,... summer or winter. In summer,... In the winter,... In winter,...

21 1st p, 3rd s They also sow potatoes, Some vegetables are spelt in singular and some They also sow potatoes, cauliflowers, chillies, cauliflowers, chilli, cabbage in plural. cabbages and many others. and many others. Block 2

24 2nd p, 2nd s Bhutan lies in the mountain Add the new sentence highlighted in bold in the Bhutan lies in the mountain range called the range called the Himalaya. next column. It makes a logical transition to the Himalaya. There are many other mountain The Black Mountain Range is next sentence. In its absence, the introduction of ranges within the Himalaya. One such range, in Trongsa Dzongkhag. Black Mountain Range is too abrupt. the Black Mountain Range, is in Trongsa Dzongkhag.

24 3rd p, 2nd s Gangkarpuensum Spacing of names with four syllables. Same as Gangkar Puensum Pema Gatshel for Pemagatshel (p. 25) and Samdrup Jongkhar for Samdrupjongkhar. 4 of 21 Page Paragraph (p), Errors/Observations Remarks/ comments Suggested Corrections Nos. Sentence(s), Tables (t), Questions (q)

25 3rd p, 1st s Land between mountains is Usage of singular and plural words. Lands between mountains are called valleys. called valleys.

26 Page header 2.3 The Land around US US is Us as in other pages of the same. 2.3 The Land around Us

26 7th p After you have finish writings, Tense. Make 'finish' into 'finished.' Remove 's' After you have finished writing, show your work to show to your teachers and from 'writings.' your teachers and parents for more help. parents about your work for more help.

28 3rd p 2. Make mountains, valleys Make 'river' into a plural like the words 2. Make mountains, valleys and rivers... and river... 'mountains' and 'valleys' in the same sentence.

29 1st p, 3rd s At sea level the height of a Use of comma. At sea level, the altitude is zero. Or, place is 0 meter. The altitude at sea level is zero. 29 2nd p, 1st s A few places in Bhutan, such Use of comma after Phuentsholing. Make it A few places in Bhutan, such as Gelephu and as Gelephu and uniform with similar sentence in the 3rd Phuentsholing, are only about 250 meters above Phuentsholing are only about paragraph, which reads, "Other places, such as the sea level. 250 meters above the sea Gasa, are 3000 to 4000 meters above sea level." level. Note comma after 'such as Gasa'.

'Phuentsholing' is spelt sometimes without 'e' as 'Phuntsholing' on page 58.

29 2nd p, 4th s Tigers and elephants are Use of singular and plural. Tigers and elephants are some of the animals seen some of the animal seen here. here.

29 Last p Jomolhari Similar with 'Gangkar Puensum' for Jomo Lhari 'Gangkarpuensum.'

30 1st p Pa Chhu Please refer my comments for Class V Social Pachhu Studies on spelling of names of rivers. Drange Chhu Drangmechhu 30 5th p, 3rd s During the winter, the level of No need to use the definitive article 'the' in this During winter, the level of water... water... case. 5 of 21 Page Paragraph (p), Errors/Observations Remarks/ comments Suggested Corrections Nos. Sentence(s), Tables (t), Questions (q)

31 1st p, 1st s When the river carries stone, Space between the letters 'rub' and ‘against.' When the river carries stones, they rub against they rubagainst each other,... ‘Stone’ here has to be in the plural. each other,...

31 2nd p, 2nd s When the water washes away Use 'a' instead of 'the' as highlighted or remove When the water washes away the rocks and sands the rocks and sands from the 'the' as in the second example. from a river bank, we call this erosion. Or river banks, we call this erosion. When the water washes away the rocks and sands from river banks, we call this erosion.

31 3rd p, 3rd s This river is flowing through a The original sentence is wrongly constructed. This river is flowing through a deep narrow valley deep narrow valley cut the and cutting the valley deeper and deeper. Or, valley deeper and deeper. This river is flowing through a deep narrow valley. It cuts the valley deeper and deeper. 33 2nd p Some rivers have its source in Problem of singular and plural. 'Rivers' and Some rivers have their source in the snow fields. the snow fields. A snow field ‘theirs' not 'its.' A snow field is a large area of permanent snow. In isa large area of permanent No space between 'is' and 'a' in the second spring and summer, the weather becomes warmer. snow. In the spring and sentence. No need for 'the' in the third sentence. summer the weather becomes Rather, add a comma after 'summer.' warmer.

35 1st p All rivers have a beginning Change in third sentence. The 'river' has to be All rivers have a beginning and an end. The smaller and an end. The smaller rivers plural because it is referring to the 'bigger rivers' rivers flow into bigger rivers. Then the rivers keep flow into bigger rivers. Then in the second sentence. Hence, the change. flowing until they reach the seas or ocean. the river keeps flowing until it Accordingly, change the rest of the sentence. reaches the seas or ocean.

35 2nd p The place where a river ends Use of articles. The place where a river ends is called a river is called river mouth. A river mouth. A river mouth can end at a sea or an ocean. mouth can end at a sea or ocean.

Block Three

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38 2nd p We have wild animals such Use ‘wild boar' instead of 'wild pig.' Pig is used We have wild animals such as...wild boars and as...wild pigs and bears. more for domestic breed of this animal. bears.

38 3rd p, 2nd s They are sparrows, Hyphenate 'black' and 'necked' as 'black-necked' They are sparrows, crows...black-necked cranes... crows...black necked cranes... cranes.

38 4th p, 1 s Forestprovides fodder to our Space between the first two words. Change the Forest provides fodder for our animals. animals. preposition ‘to’ with ‘for.’ 38 4th p, 2nd s They give us food, shelter, Either insert 'us' or delete the phrase 'they also They give us food, shelter, medicines, vegetables, medicines, vegetables, and give' since the act of giving is repeated in the and they also give us clean air to breathe. Or, they also give clean air to same sentence. breathe. They give us food, shelter, medicines, vegetables and clean air to breathe.

38 5th p Trees give us oxygen and Although trees are plants, this paragraph is about Trees give us oxygen and make the air clean. make the air clean. The roots trees as supported by a photograph as well. Here Roots of the trees hold soil and water together. of the plants hold soil and the trees in the first sentence switches to plants Without water and topsoil, the trees cannot grow. water together. Without water in the second and third sentences. It may be We must protect our forests. and top soil, the plants cannot better to stick with usage of 'trees.' Note the grow. We must protect our deletion of 'the' in the second sentence and forest. addition of 's' in the last word ‘forest.' ‘Top soil’ is one word ‘topsoil.’

41 2nd p, 3rd s They carry the tree seeds from Sentence corretion. They carry seeds from one place to another. one place to other places.

41 4th q What could happen to the soil Remove the comma in the sentence. What could happen to the soil on the mountains if on the mountains, if there there were no forest? were no forest?

42 1st p, 2nd s Forest is the homes and Usage of singular nouns. Removal of Forest is home and source of food for the animals sources of food for the unnecessary use of 'the.' and birds. animals and the birds.

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42 4th p The person who knows many Forestry Officer' and not 'Forest Officer.' Make The person who knows many things about the things about the forests is the similar changes in the label of the photograph on forests is the Forestry Officer. Forest Officer. this page, first paragraph of page 43 and in the 4th paragraph of page 44.

42 4th q What rules are there against Use 'wild animals' instead of 'forest animals.' What rules are there against killing wild animals? killing forest animals?

43 Label of 1st "Forest is our homes. We Make 'homes' singular and insert a fullstop at the "Forest is our home. We should not destroy it." photograph should not destroy it" end of the slogan. 44 1st p, 4th s People even start forest-fires. Remove hyphen. People even start forest fires.

44 2nd p, 1st s Land with forests is now Change into plural. The sentence can be Lands with forest covers are now barren. without forest. improved. 44 4th p Villagers and Dzongkhag Change the letters 'F' and 'O' into small letters Villagers and dzongkhag forestry officers identify Forest Officers identify the since the reference here is not to a particular the location of the community forest. location of the community person. It is generic. Note the change into forest. 'forestry officers' instead of 'forest officers.' Make similar changes in this paragraph.

44 4th p, 3rd s Tree sapling are supplied by Use the actual name of the department. Pluralize Tree saplings are supplied by the Department of the Forest Department free of ‘sapling.’ Forest and Park Services free of cost. cost.

44 7th p, 2nd s In 2008, the Department of Use of correct name of department, italicizing In 2008, the Department of Forests and Park Forests established 100 Dzongkha word (when it is not a proper noun), Services established 100 community forests across Community Forests across change in tense from 'are' to 'were' and twenty dzongkhags which were handed over to twenty Dzongkhags which are improvement in the sentence. local communities so that they can take care and handed over to local protect them. communities to take care and protect.

46 2nd q Names some crops that are Remove 's' from the word 'Names.' Name some crops that are sold by the people in sold by the people in your your locality. locality. 8 of 21 Page Paragraph (p), Errors/Observations Remarks/ comments Suggested Corrections Nos. Sentence(s), Tables (t), Questions (q)

47 3rd picture lychee lychee' is spelt with a small 'L' whereas Lychee photographs of all other fruits on this page are labeled with capital letters.

48 1st s These are some of the Add 'our.' Similar sentence in the previous page These are some of the vegetables grown by our vegetables grown by farmers. uses 'our.' "These are some of the fruits grown by farmers. our farmers." Consistency of sentences.

49 1st t Pine-apple Pineapple is one word. Pineapple

50 Questions Repetition in number. Two Correct sequencing of questions. number 4s.

50 Q 6 He grows vegetables such as Change the last word 'it' to 'them' as the He grows vegetables such as spinach, radish, spinach, radish, cabbage reference is not to one vegetable but to all those cabbage and cauliflower in his garden. His family and cauliflower in his garden. listed in this question. eats all of them. His family eats all of it. He also has many banana trees. He sells most of He also has many banana Banana 'trees' may be more apt than 'plants.' the bananas. He also has a field of cardamom. He plants. He sells most of the The last sentence sounds as if he sells all of the sells all of his cardamom. bananas. He also has a field field rather than the cardamoms. Hence the of cardamom. He sells all of it. suggested change. Block Four

52 3rd p, 2nd s They grow different crops in Crops (plural) = them (not 'it') They grow different crops in fields and sell them in fields and sell it in the market. the market.

52 4th p Some of our farmers make Bhutanese words or names for things are not 2nd sentence. "With the money they earn from and sell things like bamboo pluralized following English style. This is fine but selling these things, they buy other things which baskets, bangchung, palang, the same style must be adopted. For example, they cannot make." dapa, gho and kira. With this ghos and kiras are pluralized and spelt thus on money, they buy things that page 54. they cannot make.

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53 1st p For many years, most people Farmers may have switched to other professions For many years, most people in Bhutan were in Bhutan were farmers. but the majority of Bhutanese still live in villages farmers. Today, they have started doing other Today, the people have started and farm their fields. Thus the suggestion to add works besides farming. However, farmers still doing other works besides the third sentence. constitute the majority of our population. farming.

53 3rd p, 2nd s They give their services to the Replace 'give' with 'provide.' Although 'give' is not They provide their services to the people. people. wrong, the idea of 'service providers' is indicted in the last paragraph.

53 Last p Electricians, plumbers and All professions are mentioned in their plurals in Electricians, plumbers and mechanics are all mechanics are all service the first sentence. Suddenly, 'an engineer' is service providers. Electricians connect electric providers. An electrician singularized in the second sentence although wire in houses and buildings. Plumbers fix water connects electric wire in 'plumbers' in the third sentence is still plural. pipes and mechanics repair damaged machines houses and buildings. There is thus inconsistency of syntax. Pluralize and equipment. Plumbers fix water pipes and 'an engineer' into 'engineers.' Besides, mechanics repair engines. mechanics repair not just engines but any mechanical equipment. Thus the suggestion for change in the third sentence. 54 2nd picture Stitching cloths Change spelling into 'clothes' on page 89 as well. Stitching clothes There are four instances of the word 'cloths.'

55 1st and 3rd Koma The label of the second picture 'tools' is written in Komas picture plural form. Do the same for the other two. Bread Breads

55 7th question What service-workers do you Replace 'workers' with 'providers' for the reason What service-providers do you have in your have in your locality? mentioned above. locality?

56 2nd p If you are interested in writing Use of comma. If you are interested in writing, you can be a writer. you can be a writer. 56 3rd p There are so many things that Students obviously don't want to become ‘things!’ There are so many things that you can do. you can be. They want to be become somebody or want to do something.

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57 Number each set of questions properly. For example, the first question can be 1.1 followed by 1.2 and 1.3. The next would then be 2.1, 2.2 and 2.3.

58 2nd p They sell food items,papers, Space needed between the words 'items,' and They sell food items, paper, pens, tools and paints. pens, tools and paints. ‘papers,’ which should be spelt ‘paper.’

58 3rd p A shop that sells tools like Like all other plural words in this sentence, A shop that sells tools like hammers, nails, sickles, hammers, nails, sickle, wires 'sickle' has to be 'sickles.' wires and paints is called a hardware shop. and paints is called a hardware shop. 58 5th p A shop that sells paper, pens, First sentence. Insert a gap between 'stationery' A shop that sells paper, pens, pencils and pencils and notebooks for and 'shop'. Second sentence. The first two letters notebooks for schools and offices is called schools and offices is called of the words 'Book Shop' has to be with small stationery shop.A shop that sells books is called a stationeryshop.A shop that letters 'book shop' as all other shops are spelt book shop. sells books is called a Book thus in this page. Examples: general store, Shop. hardware shop, medical shops, stationery shop.

59 1st p When you go to the town with Remove the article 'the' and insert a comma after When you go to town with your parents, do a your parents do a survey of 'parents.' survey of the shops there. the shops there.

59 2nd p When you visit the shops with Insert a comma after 'parents' in the first When you visit the shops with your parents, do a your parents do a customer sentence but remove the comma after customer survey...During the visit, you will count survey...During the visit, you 'customers' in the last sentence. and record the number of customers (male, female will count and record the and children) visiting a particular shop. number of customers, (male, female and children) visiting a particular shop.

61 Table, 3rd People who helps by giving Providing' instead of 'giving' for reasons People who help by providing their services column their services mentioned above. ‘helps’ has to be ‘help.’

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61 q 3 b. A stationery shop sells Remove comma after 'pencils' and put a fullstop b. A stationery shop sells (exercise books, pens, (exercise books, pens, at the end of the sentence. pencils and shoes). pencils, and shoes) Block 5

62 Contents 5.1Our Government Insert spaces between the figures and the letters 5.1 Our Government 5.2Dzongkhag Administration in both instances. 5.2 Dzongkhag Administration

63 3rd p, 3rd s Our King has his office in Since the Dzongkha word of Prime Minister is Our King (Druk Gyalpo) has his office in Trashichho Trashichho Dzong in Thimphu. given, it would be good to write down the Dzong in Thimphu. The head of the country is the The head of the country is the Dzongkha word for King. This is the first time in King and the head of the government is the Prime King and the head of the this book that the 'King' is being mentioned. Minister (Lyonchhen). government is the Prime Minister (Lyonchen).

64 2nd p Each Gewog is divided into Since the number of dzongkhags, drungkhags Each gewog is divided into chiwogs. There are Chiwogs. and gewogs are given, why shouldn't the number 1044 chiwogs in the country. of chiwogs be given as well? Please note the use of small letters for Dzongkha names (common nouns). 65 1st p, 2nd s The Dzongda is the head of Legally, the Dzongkhag Tshogdu Chairperson is The dzongda is the head of the dzongkhag the Dzongkhag. the head of the dzongkhag. Dzongda is the chief administration. executive. Hence, it is better to qualify Dzongda as head of administration.

65 1st p, 4ths The first lady Dzongda was Update information. While use of 'first lady' isn't A woman was appointed as the dzongda for the appointed in 2012. wrong, the words have different meanings as first time in 2012 followed by the second one in well. Thus the suggestion to re-write as 2016. proposed.

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66 3rd p The male Dzongda wears a Kabney is the same for both male and female Dzongdas wear a red kabney with a white stripe in Patang and red Kabney with a dzongdas. Update information based on the the middle. Men wear a ceremonial sword called white stripe in the middle. award of gyentag recently. patang and women a ceremonial insignia called gyentag. Please note that kabney and patang are both spelt with small 'k' and 'p' as well as capital 'k' and 'p' in this page. Standard style needs to be adopted.

65 4th p The next important person the Note the changes highlighted in bold. The next important person in the dzongkhag is the Dzongkhag is Dzongrab. His dzongrab. His work is to support the dzongda in or her work is to support Since there are no women dzongrab at the looking after the administration. He wears a patang Dzongda in looking after the moment, the reference to masculine gender is and a white kabney with a red stripe in the middle. administration. The male retained. It can be changed as in the case with Dzongrab wears a Patang and dzongda above as and when women dzongrabs a white kabney with a red are appointed. If we look at the judiciary, lady stripe in the middle. drangpons were awarded gyentag but not lady rabjams. So even if there were a lady dzongrab today, the gyentags may not have been awarded. For this reason, no mention is being made about gyentag for future lady dzongrab at the moment.

66 5th p Drangpon is a judge in the It is incorrect to say drangpons are only those Drangpon is a judge, who works in a court...He or Dzongkhag court...The male who work in dzongkhag courts and not in other she wears a green kabney without fringes. Like Drangpon wears a patang and courts. dzongdags, men wear patang and women wear green without fringes. gyentag.

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66 1st p The Dzongda holds important Dzongda does not hold DT meetings. It is the DT Dzongdas implement the decisions of dzongkhag meetings called Dzongkhag Chairperson. Chairperson is not elected amongst tshogdus (DT). Gups, mangmis and Tshogdu (DT) to discuss the gups but amongst all members which also representatives from dzongkhag thromdes matters in the Dzongkhag. include mangmis and thromde thuemis. The last constitute the members of a dzongkhag tshogdu. The Chairperson of sentence makes it sound as if the officers are the One member is elected as the Chairperson. Dzongkhag Tshogdu is elected main participants whereas they are not. It is the Chairpersons of dzongkhag tshogdus hold the amongst the Gups. Besides, gups and mangmis who are the main participants meetings. Besides the members, officers in a the officers in the Dzongkhag, as members. The comma after 'besides' is dzongkhag also take part in dzongkhag tshogdu Gups and Mangmis take part misplaced. meetings. in this meeting.

66 Q 2 How many times is Singular and plural usage. How many times are dzongkhag tshogdus held in a Dzongkhag Tshogdu held in a year? year?

67 1st p, 1st s Some Dzongkhags are divided Note the highlighted changes. The reason for Some dzongkhags are divided into drungkhags into Drungkhags because of creating drungkhags is their larger sizes which because of their huge sizes. their size. needs to be mentioned. 67 2nd p 4. Nganglam Drungkhag in Four-syllable names of places need to be written 4. Nganglam Drungkhag in Pema Gatshel Pemagatshel separately as two two-syllable names. In Jomo 7. Lhamoi Zingkha Drungkhag in Dagana 7. Lhamoizingkha Drungkhag Tsangkha, note the removal of 'h' from the 11. Samdrup Choling Drungkhag in Samdrup in Dagana original Tshangkha. 'Drungkhag' are not italicized Jongkhar 11. Samdrupcholing because they are part of proper noun. 12. Jomo Tsangkha Drungkhag in Samdrup Drungkhag in Jongkhar Samdrupjongkhar 12. Jomotshangkha Drungkhag in Samdrupjongkhar

67 3rd p, last The male Drungpa wears Note that 'Drungpa' is italicized where as The drungpa wears the same kabney and patang sentence same kabney and Patang as 'Dzongrab' is not. The letter 'k' is small in the as a dzongrab does. that of Dzongrab. word 'kabney' where as 'P' is capital in 'Patang.' Inconsistencies need to be addressed throughout the text.

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68 2nd p, 5th s If the Gup cannot help them, Syntax error. If 'gup' is to be used in the If the gup cannot help them, most people go to the most people go to the sentence, the equivalent has to be 'drungpa' and dzongdas or drungpas. Or, Drunkghags or Dzongkhags. 'dzongda.' Likewise, if 'gewog' is to be used, the equivalent has to be 'drungkhag' and If the gewog cannot help them, most people go to 'dzongkhag.' the drunkghags or dzongkhags.

68 3rd p In the Gewog office Gup is Note the highlighted changes as well as changes In a gewog office, a gup is supported by a mangmi supported by Mangmis and in punctuations. and tshogpas, who are also elected by the people. Tshogpas who are also Or, elected by the people. In gewog offices, gups are supported by mangmis and tshogpas, who are also elected by the people.

68 4th p There are other people There are other staff like Gewog Administrative helping the Gup like Gewog Officer, Accountant and clerks, who help the gups. Administrative Officer, Accountant and Clerks. 68 6th p, 3rd s Besides the Gup, Mangaps, Although different customary names are used for Besides the gup, mangmis, tshogpas and one Tshogpas and one person mangmis such as mangaps and mangthues, it is person from every house in the village take part in from every house in the village better to stick with mangmis as appears in the the meeting. take part in the meeting. constitution and other laws.

70 1st s In this lesson we will learn Use of comma and highlighted changes. In this lesson, we will learn about different officers about the officers in the in a dzongkhag. Dzongkhag.

70 2nd p, last s The DEO make sure that all Add 's' to 'make' and remove the article 'the.' The DEO makes sure that all the children are the children are admitted in admitted in schools. the schools.

71 Q 2 1. DzongkhagTshogdu. Space between Dzongkhag and Tshodgu. 1. Dzongkhag Tshogdu 2. the head of a Drungkhag. Remove fullstops in all listed phrases in this 2. is the head of a drungkhag question. Note highlighted changes.

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71 Q 3.1. What does Gewog Tshode 'g' missing in Tshode. What does Gewog Tshogde stand for? stand for? Block 6

73 2nd p, 1st s Most of the holidays are in Note highlighted changes. Remove comma after Most of the holidays are in connection with Lord connection to Lord Buddha, 'Zhabdrung Rinpoche.' Buddha, Guru Rinpoche, Zhabdrung Rinpoche and Guru Rinpoche, Zhabdrung the kings of Bhutan. Rinpoche, and the Kings of Bhutan.

73 1st photograph Tshechu Wrongly placed title 'Tshechu.' Place the tile 'Tshechu' below the photograph.

75 1st p, 3rd s To understand the importance Note comma usage. To understand the importance of the day, we will of the day we will now study now study the life story of the Buddha. the life story of the Buddha.

75 2nd p Lord Buddha was a prince The letter 'k' is small for king and 'Q' capital for Lord Buddha was a prince born to King born to king Suddhodhana Queen. Both are part of proper names. Hence, Suddhodhana and Queen Mahamaya... and Queen Maha Maya... use capital letters.

Both the King's and Queen's names have four syllables. But the King's name is spelt in one word whereas the Queen's name has two words. These are not Bhutanese names. Although the temptation is to break them into two words of two syllables each, the general usage of such names in other literature is to use them as one word. Set up a standard style. 75 Photograph Lord Buddha Remove the source’ mentioned in the label of the Lord Buddha (Source:jutier.net) photograph since no other photographs in the text mention their sources.

76 Photograph Label This photograph has no label. Guru Rinpoche

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76 1st p, 2nd s Today, the country of Ugyen The second information given in the next column Some say that the country of Ugyen lies in the lies in the Swat valley in is a later academic and historical finding. It is ok Swat valley in Pakistan whereas some others say it Pakistan. to mention this since the certainty of Swat valley is in Odisha in India. as the birth place of Guru Rinpoche is contested now.

76 3rd p Indrabuti was the King of In both sentences, the comma after the word 'so' Indrabuti was the King of Ugyen...his own, so he Ugyen...his own so, he has to be removed and inserted before it. adopted... adopted... When Padma Savbhava grew up...a king, so he... When Padma Savbhava grew up...a king so, he...

76 5th p Every year, usually in June, It is ok to give specific date of Guru's birth since Every year, on the tenth day of the fifth month, we celebrate the Birth the date of Zhabdrung Kuchoe is also specifically we celebrate the Birth Anniversary of Guru Anniversary of Guru mentioned thus in the next chapter. Rinpoche. Rinpoche. 76 Q 2 With the help of friends or Insert comma after the word 'family.' With the help of friends or family, find one more... family find one more...

77 2nd p Zhabdrung Ngawang Namgyal Split into two sentences. Incorrect sentence and Zhabdrung Ngawang Namgyal died on this day. dies on this day that is why it tense usage. That is why it is known as Zhabdrung Kuchoe. is known as Zhabdrung Kuchoe.

77 3rd p, 2nd s When he was twelve years Age is usually written in figures. Continue use of When he was 12 years old, he became head of old, Ngawang Namgyal pronoun instead of 'Ngawang Namgyal.' Remove Ralung monastery. became head of the Ralung 'the' before ' Ralung.' monastery.

77 4th p He had powerful enemies in Use of comma. He had powerful enemies in Tibet who tried to kill Tibet who tried to kill him so him, so he fled to Bhutan. he fled to Bhutan.

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78 2nd p Zhabdrung named it Sanga Please note that Semtokha is spelt Simtokha in Zhabdrung named it Sanga Zapden Phodrang. Zapden Dzong. Class V Social Studies.

79 3rd and 4th p PunakhaDzong Space between the two words. Punakha Dzong headings Wangduephodrang Dzong Spelling of Wangdi Phodrang needs to be Wangdue Phodrang Dzong harmonized as mentioned in my commentary on Class V Social Studies.

80 3rd par Bhutan did not have .....finally No need to italicize the word 'finally.' Bhutan did not have .....finally came out... came out... 81 1st p His father Jigme Namgyel Remove double space between 'father' and His father Jigme Namgyel was the Trongsa Penlop. was the Trongsa Penlop. 'Jigme.'

81 3rd p On December 17, 1907 the Insert comma after '1907.' On December 17, 1907, the people of Bhutan people of Bhutan appointed The king is not appointed like civil servants. He is enthroned him as the first King. him as the first King. enthroned!

81 Q 2 When and why did people Wrong use of tense. When and why did the people enthrone him as the appointed him as the first King first King of Bhutan? of Bhutan?

82 3rd p, 3rd s He opened more schools...and Missing preposition 'to.' He opened more schools...and nurses to take care nurses take care of the of the people. people. 82 1st p, 2nd s He was born in the Thruepang Remove the article 'the.' He was born in Thruepang Palace in Trongsa. Palace in Trongsa.

82 2nd p In 1952, when he was 24 Spell the name of Her Majesty correctly. In 1952, when he was 24 years old, he married years old, he married Ashi Azhi Kesang Choden Wangchuck. Kezang Choeden.

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82 4th p In the Tshogdu, people from Not all the people sat in the Tshogdu. Their In the Tshogdu, representatives of people called all over country helped the representatives or chimis did. Initially, chimis chimis from all over country came together to King to make good plans and helped to make laws but later it was done by make laws for the country. rules for the country. chimis on their own.

83 6th p, 2nd s People built a special chorten Factual error. Her Majesty Azhi Kesang Choden Wangchuck in Thimphu to help us built a special chorten in Thimphu in memory of remember him. our late King.

84 4th p, 3rd s In May, 1972, his father made Refrain from using words like 'appoint' or 'made' In May 1972, his father enthroned him as the him the Trongsa Penlop. in reference to enthronement of kings. Remove Trongsa Penlop. the comma after 'May.' 84 5th p King Jigme Singye His Majesty was 15 years 8 months and 10 days King Jigme Singye Wangchuck began his reign in Wangchuck began to rule old when his royal father passed away. 1972 when he was barely sixteen years old. Bhutan in 1972 when he was only seventeen years old.

85 1st p King, Jigme Khesar Namgyel Remove comma after King. Reorder listing of King Jigme Khesar Namgyel Wangchuck was born Wangchuck was born on parents. on February 21, 1980 to the fourth king His February 21, 1980 to Ashi Majesty Jigme Singye Wangchuck and Azhi Tshering Yangdon Wangchuck Tshering Yangdon Wangchuck. and the fourth king Jigme Singye Wangchuck.

85 2nd p He began his early education Lungtenzampa is four-syllable word. Change as He began his early education in Lungten Zampa... in Lungtenzampa... suggested earlier for other such names.

85 2nd, 3rd, 4th, 5th Prince, prince Prince is spelt with both small and capital letters Prince and 6th p 'p.' In this case, use capital 'P.' 85 4th p The prince then received... Use pronoun. He then received...

85 6th p The establishment of Jigme The official name of the college is ‘Gedu College The establishment of Gedu College of Business Singye Wangchuck College of of Business Studies. Studies... Business Studies...

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85 6th p ...the revision of the 1949 These were done when His Majesty was already ...the revision of the 1949 Indo-Bhutan Treaty on Indo-Bhutan Treaty on enthroned as the Fifth Druk Gyalpo, not when he February 8, 2007 and the signing of the February 8, 2007 and the was the Crown Prince. Constitution of Bhutan on July 18, 2008 are other signing of the Constitution of remarkable highlights of His Majesty’s reign. Bhutan on July 18, 2008 are other remarkable contributions of the Prince.

85 7th p He was declared as the Crown Factual error. Use comma after the figure '2004,' He was declared as the Crown Prince of Bhutan at Prince of Bhutan at the age of and replace 'installed' with 'enthroned.' 8 years of age. On October 21, 2004, the Crown 17. On October 21, 2004 the Prince Jigme Khesar Namgyel Wangchuck was Crown Prince Jigme Khesar enthroned as the 16th Trongsa Penlop. Namgyel Wangchuck was installed as the 16th Trongsa Penlop.

85 Q 2 Write names and the dates of Simplify sentence. Write the names and dates of national holidays national holidays that are in associated with our kings. connection to our kings. 86 5th p Ram with the help of Re-write sentence. Ram killed Ravana with the help of Hanuman. Hanuman killed Ravana.

86 Activity 1. Who wrote the story of Students can't answer this question as it is not Ramayana? mentioned in the chapter. Ramayana is also not defined as the story of life and deeds of Rama in the main text. So students will be confused between Rama and Ramayana when the difference is not explained.

87 3rd p Text of National Anthem Use the text of national anthem in the Change it Constitution. And remove the box story as there is controversy about the role of Gyaldon Dasho Thinley Dorji in the composition of the national anthem.

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88 3rd p The dragon symbolizes the Drukyul is proper noun. Don't italicize. It's a two- The dragon symbolizes the name of our country, name of our country, DrukYul. syllable word. Spell as one word. Drukyul.

89 1st p Our national dresses are ghos Ghos and kiras are officially not the 'national In our country, men wear ghos and women wear and kiras. Men wear ghos and dress.' The words and idea of 'national dress' kiras. women wear kiras. A gho is a have lots of nuances. longish robe tied around a waist by a cloth-belt called Don't need to define gho and kira to Class IV kera. A kira is the ankle-length Bhutanese students as if they are foreigners. dress which is made up of Even non-Bhutanese students who study in bright colored fabric with Bhutan know what a gho and kira is. traditional patterns.

90 2nd and 3rd p, q cloths Plural of 'cloth.' clothes 1 90 4th p People who watch the tshechu You don't watch a tshechu. You watch People who go to tshechu to watch folk and mask wear their beautiful kiras and performances staged during a tshechu. dances wear their beautiful kiras and ghos. ghos.

91 Q 4 c Buddhism was brought to n' missing in the word Rinpoche. Buddhism was brought to Bhutan by Guru Bhutan by Guru Ripoche/... Rinpoche/...

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