BAGGINS IS BACK! SURPRISE RETURN of HOBBIT THOUGHT DEAD by Andwise ‘Andy’ Roper
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THE HOBBITON HERALD www.hobbiton-herald.com THE SHIRE’S FAVOURITE NEWSPAPER 6 pennies BAGGINS IS BACK! SURPRISE RETURN OF HOBBIT THOUGHT DEAD By Andwise ‘Andy’ Roper
The quiet village of Hobbiton-on-the- Water was yesterday in uproar due to the unexpected re-appearance of Mr Bilbo Baggins, who left the Shire months ago, accompanied by the wizard Gandalf. Where has he been all Bilbo Baggins this time? Early on, they were captured by trolls; A large crowd of Hobbits had gathered they only avoided being eaten because at Mr Baggins’ home, Bag End, where Gandalf tricked the creatures and his property was being sold off by his turned them to stone. While shelter- cousins, Mr and Mrs Sackville. They ing from a violent storm in the Misty had asked some months ago for Mr Mountains, they were trapped again Baggins to be declared dead and had – this time by hordes of vicious, evil subsequently claimed Bag End as their goblins. Bilbo explained they had got own inheritance. away because Gandalf killed the Great Goblin with magic. Having demonstrated that he was very definitely alive, Mr Baggins demanded Lost and alone underground, Bilbo that everyone should leave his house. next met a strange creature called Mrs Sackville was heard to say, “It’s Gollum, who agreed to help if the outrageous! How can we be sure he’s hobbit could answer a series of riddles. not an imposter?” However, Mr Unfortunately, this individual betrayed Baggins has told his story exclusively Bilbo’s trust. Mr Baggins wouldn’t to the Hobbiton Herald. detail how he managed to escape – he is strangely reluctant to discuss this Bilbo Baggins, Gandalf and a party of particular event… dwarves (led by Thorin Oakenshield) departed some time ago on a quest to In Mirkwood, the adventurers unwisely recover lost treasure, stolen centuries strayed from the path and consequent- before by the fearsome dragon Smaug, ly were imprisoned again. Quick-think- hundreds of miles away beyond ing Bilbo saved them from years in the the Misty Mountains. Their journey dungeons: “I made everyone climb into through foreign territories was barrels and we floated down the river.” perilous and Bilbo claims that their he explained. lives were endangered many times. Y6 Example Text Recount: Newspaper Report Example Text
When they finally reached their Grateful for all his help, the dwarves destination – the Lonely Mountain – rewarded Bilbo with treasure and he they found a scene of such desolation set off home with Gandalf. After a that the dwarves were initially una- less eventful journey back, he arrived ble to find the way into their family in Hobbiton only to find everyone home. Bilbo saved the day. He not only thought he was dead! located the entrance but also devised how to kill the dragon. Following Now that Mr Baggins has recovered Smaug’s death, they were attacked by from his epic adventure, he says he thegoblins and their allies. Although has asked the police to make the the evil creatures were defeated, Sackvilles hand back his property. He Thorin was unfortunately killed. will be staying at Bag End for the fore- seeable future: “No more adventures for me!” said Bilbo, grinning.
The Lonely Mountain Y6 Example Text Recount: Newspaper Report Example Text Annotated Genre Features
1the name of the newspaper THE HOBBITON HERALD1
2a headline that www.hobbiton-herald.com THE SHIRE’S FAVOURITE NEWSPAPER 6 pennies uses pun, rhyme or alliteration
3a sub-headline which gives a bit BAGGINS more information
4a ‘byline’ (the writer’s name) IS BACK!2 SURPRISE RETURN OF 5an introductory 3 paragraph that HOBBIT THOUGHT DEAD 4 includes the 5 W’s By Andwise ‘Andy’ Roper
The quiet village of Hobbiton-on-the- 6 pictures with Water was yesterday in uproar due captions to the unexpected re-appearance of Mr Bilbo Baggins, who left the Shire 7a commentary of months ago, accompanied by the 6 the main events wizard Gandalf. Where has he been all Bilbo Baggins6 this time?5 8third person and 7 past tense A large crowd of Hobbits had gathered Early on, they were captured by trolls ; at Mr Baggins’ home7, Bag End, where they only avoided being eaten because 9 direct and his property was being sold off by his Gandalf tricked the creatures and reported speech cousins, Mr and Mrs Sackville. They turned them to stone. While shelter- 8 ing from a violent storm in the Misty 10 had asked some months ago for Mr a conclusion Baggins to be declared dead and had Mountains, they were trapped again paragraph to subsequently claimed Bag End as their – this time by hordes of vicious, evil explain what 7 own inheritance. goblins . Bilbo explained they had got might happen away because Gandalf killed the Great next 9 Having demonstrated8 that he was Goblin with magic . very definitely alive, Mr Baggins demanded that everyone should leave Lost and alone underground, Bilbo his house7. Mrs Sackville was heard to next met a strange creature called 7 say8, “It’s outrageous! How can we be Gollum , who agreed to help if the sure he’s not an imposter?”9 However, hobbit could answer a series of riddles. Mr Baggins has told his story exclu- Unfortunately, this individual betrayed sively to the Hobbiton Herald. Bilbo’s trust. Mr Baggins wouldn’t detail8 how he managed to escape – he Bilbo Baggins, Gandalf and a party of is strangely reluctant to discuss this dwarves (led by Thorin Oakenshield) particular event… departed some time ago on a quest to recover lost treasure7, stolen centuries In Mirkwood, the adventurers un- before by the fearsome dragon Smaug, wisely strayed8 from the path and hundreds of miles away beyond the consequently were imprisoned again7. Misty Mountains. Their journey8 Quick-thinking Bilbo saved them from through foreign territories was years in the dungeons: “I made every- perilous and Bilbo claims that their one climb into barrels and we floated lives were endangered many times. down the river.” he explained.9 Y6 Example Text Recount: Newspaper Report Example Text Annotated Genre Features
When they finally reached their Grateful for all his help, the dwarves 1the name of the destination – the Lonely Mountain – rewarded Bilbo with treasure and he newspaper they found a scene of such desolation set off home with Gandalf.7 After a that the dwarves were initially una- less eventful journey back, he arrived ble to find8 the way into their family in Hobbiton only to find everyone 2 a headline that home. Bilbo saved the day7. He not thought he was dead!7 uses pun, rhyme only located the entrance but also de- or alliteration vised how to kill the dragon. Following Now that Mr Baggins has recovered Smaug’s death, they were attacked by from his epic adventure, he says he 3a sub-headline thegoblins and their allies. Although has asked the police to make the which gives a bit the evil creatures were defeated, Sackvilles hand back his property. He more information Thorin was unfortunately killed.7 will be staying at Bag End for the fore- seeable future: “No more adventures 4 a ‘byline’ (the for me!” said Bilbo, grinning.10 writer’s name)
5an introductory paragraph that includes the 5 W’s
6pictures with captions
7a commentary of the main events
8third person and past tense
9direct and reported speech
10a conclusion paragraph to explain what might happen next The Lonely Mountain7 Y6 Example Text Recount: Newspaper Report Example Text Annotated Grammar, Punctuation
1 Accurate and Spelling Features 8relative clauses spelling, within sentences punctuation starting with and grammar THE HOBBITON HERALD who, which, taught in where, when, previous years www.hobbiton-herald.com THE SHIRE’S FAVOURITE NEWSPAPER 6 pennies whose and that. is demonstrated (e.g. My mum, throughout the who is a great text chef, cooked dinner for me.) 2formal vocabulary BAGGINS 9preposition and sentence structure that phrases to matches the add detail formality of the and clarity text IS BACK! (e.g. under the floorboards, SURPRISE RETURN OF across the room) 3a range of linking words/ HOBBIT THOUGHT DEAD 10adverbs and phrases, By Andwise ‘Andy’12 Roper including adverbials to add detail and clarity adverbials, to The quiet village of Hobbiton-on-the- (e.g. bravely, join sentences Water was yesterday in uproar2 due often, repeatedly, and paragraphs to the unexpected re-appearance17 of in the blink of an together (e.g. Mr Bilbo Baggins,13 who left the Shire eye) first, then, months ago8, accompanied18 by the after, while, 11expanded wizard Gandalf.8 Where has he been Bilbo Baggins significantly, noun phrases to 3 likewise, for all this time? perilous2 and Bilbo claims that their add detail and instance) as well lives were endangered4 many times. clarity (e. g. a as repetition A large crowd of Hobbits had gath- state-of-the-art and ellipsis ered2 at Mr Baggins’14 home, Bag End, Early on3, they were captured by computer or a where his property was being sold off trolls;16 they only10 avoided being eaten hideous, green 4passive verbs by his cousins, Mr and Mrs Sackville4. 8 because Gandalf tricked the crea- alien with a 10 pointy nose.) (e.g. The They had asked some months ago for tures and turned them to stone. While Spanish team 2 Mr Baggins to be declared dead and sheltering from a violent storm in the 12 were beaten by 10 inverted had subsequently claimed Bag End Misty Mountains11, they were trapped4 France or The commas as their own9 inheritance. 16 sweets were again – this time by hordes of 11 13 eaten by the vicious, evil goblins . Bilbo explained commas for children.) Having demonstrated that he was they had got away because Gandalf clarity very definitely alive3, Mr Baggins killed the Great Goblin with magic. demanded that everyone should5 leave 14apostrophes for 5 modal verbs 4 9 possession (e.g. can, could, his house. Mrs Sackville was heard to Lost and alone underground , Bilbo say, “12It’s outrageous!7 How can5 we next met a strange creature called should, would) 15 be sure he’s not an imposter?”12 Gollum, who agreed to help if the brackets, 10 dashes and 6multi-clause However , Mr Baggins has told his hobbit8 could answer a series of rid- 10 commas for story exclusively to the Hobbiton dles5. Unfortunately10, this individual18 sentences parenthesis Herald.9 betrayed Bilbo’s trust14. Mr Baggins 7 single clause 5 wouldn’t detail how he managed to 16 semi-colons, sentence for Bilbo Baggins,13 Gandalf and a party of 16 escape – he is strangely reluctant to dashes and effect - short dwarves (led by Thorin Oakenshield)15 and snappy discuss this particular event… colons to departed some time ago on a quest2 to sentence separate clauses recover lost treasure,15 which was sto- In Mirkwood9, the adventurers un- len centuries before4 by the fearsome 17hyphens to wisely strayed2 from the path and dragon Smaug9,15 hundreds of miles avoid ambiguity consequently were imprisoned again. away beyond the Misty Mountains. Quick-thinking Bilbo11 saved them 18 Their journey through foreign territo- Y5/Y6 from years in the dungeons:16 “12I made statutory ries9 was spelling words Y6 Example Text Recount: Newspaper Report Example Text Annotated Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling Features
1 Accurate everyone climb into barrels and we rewarded Bilbo with treasure and he 8relative clauses spelling, 12 within sentences punctuation floated down the river.” he explained. set off home with Gandalf.After a When they finally10 reached their less eventful journey back9, he arrived starting with and grammar who, which, destination – the Lonely Mountain –15 in Hobbiton only to find2 everyone taught in where, when, previous years they found a scene of such desolation thought he was dead! whose and that. is demonstrated that the dwarves were initially unable (e.g. My mum, throughout the to find the wayinto their family home Now that3 Mr Baggins has recovered who is a great text 9. Bilbo saved the day7. He not only from his epic adventure11, he says chef, cooked located the entrance but also devised he has asked the police to make the dinner for me.) 2 formal how to kill the dragon. Following Sackvilles hand back his property. vocabulary 3,14 4 Smaug’s death , they were attacked He will be staying at Bag End for the 9preposition and sentence 2 12 structure that by thegoblins and their allies. Al- foreseeable future . “ No more adven- phrases to 12 13 matches the though the evil creatures were defeat- tures for me!” said Bilbo, grinning. add detail formality of the ed, Thorin was unfortunately10 killed. and clarity text Grateful for all his help2, the dwarves (e.g. under the floorboards, across the room) 3a range of linking words/ 10 phrases, adverbs and including adverbials to add detail and clarity adverbials, to (e.g. bravely, join sentences often, repeatedly, and paragraphs in the blink of an together (e.g. eye) first, then, after, while, 11expanded significantly, noun phrases to likewise, for add detail and instance) as well clarity (e. g. a as repetition state-of-the-art and ellipsis computer or a hideous, green 4passive verbs alien with a (e.g. The pointy nose.) Spanish team were beaten by 12inverted France or The commas
sweets were 13 eaten by the commas for children.) clarity
14 5 apostrophes for modal verbs possession (e.g. can, could, should, would) The Lonely Mountain 15brackets,
6 dashes and multi-clause commas for sentences parenthesis 7single clause sentence for 16 semi-colons, effect - short dashes and and snappy colons to sentence separate clauses
17hyphens to avoid ambiguity
18 Y5/Y6 statutory spelling words Y6 Example Text Recount: Newspaper Report Example Text Annotated Grammar, Punctuation
1Accurate and Spelling Features 8relative clauses spelling, within sentences punctuation starting with and grammar THE HOBBITON HERALD who, which, taught in where, when, previous years www.hobbiton-herald.com THE SHIRE’S FAVOURITE NEWSPAPER 6 pennies whose and that. is demonstrated (e.g. My mum, throughout the who is a great text chef, cooked dinner for me.) 2formal vocabulary BAGGINS 9preposition and sentence phrases to structure that add detail matches the and clarity formality of the IS BACK! (e.g. under the text floorboards, SURPRISE RETURN OF across the room) 3a range of HOBBIT THOUGHT DEAD linking words/ 10adverbs and By Andwise ‘Andy’12 Roper phrases, adverbials to add including detail and clarity The quiet village of Hobbiton-on-the- (e.g. bravely, adverbials, to 2 join sentences Water was yesterday in uproar due often, repeatedly, 17 and paragraphs to the unexpected re-appearance of in the blink of an together (e.g. Mr Bilbo Baggins,13 who left the Shire eye) first, then, months ago8, accompanied18 by the 11expanded after, while, wizard Gandalf.8 Where has he been Bilbo Baggins noun phrases to significantly, 3 2 all this time? perilous and Bilbo claims that their add detail and likewise, for 4 lives were endangered many times. clarity (e. g. a instance) as well A large crowd of Hobbits had gath- state-of-the-art as repetition ered2 at Mr Baggins’14 home, Bag End, 3 computer or a and ellipsis Early on , they were captured by where his property was being sold off trolls;16 they only10 avoided being eaten hideous, green by his cousins, Mr and Mrs Sackville4. 8 alien with a 4 because Gandalf tricked the crea- passive verbs 10 pointy nose.) They had asked some months ago for tures and turned them to stone. While (e.g. The Mr Baggins to be declared dead2 and Spanish team sheltering from a violent storm in the 12inverted 10 11 4 were beaten by had subsequently claimed Bag End Misty Mountains , they were trapped commas 9 France or The as their own inheritance. again –16 this time by hordes of sweets were vicious, evil goblins11. Bilbo explained 13commas for eaten by the Having demonstrated that he was they had got away because Gandalf clarity children.) very definitely alive3, Mr Baggins killed the Great Goblin with magic. demanded that everyone should5 leave 14apostrophes for 5 modal verbs his house. Mrs Sackville was heard4 to Lost and alone underground9, Bilbo possession (e.g. can, could, say, “12It’s outrageous!7 How can5 we next met a strange creature called 15 should, would) be sure he’s not an imposter?”12 Gollum, who agreed to help if the brackets, However10, Mr Baggins has told his hobbit8 could5 answer a series of rid- dashes and 10 commas for 6multi-clause story exclusively to the Hobbiton dles8. Unfortunately10, this individual18 parenthesis sentences Herald.9 betrayed Bilbo’s trust14. Mr Baggins 5 7single clause wouldn’t detail how he managed to 16 semi-colons, Bilbo Baggins,13 Gandalf and a party of escape –16 he is strangely reluctant to sentence for 15 dashes and effect - short dwarves (led by Thorin Oakenshield) discuss this particular event… colons to 2 and snappy departed some time ago on a quest to separate clauses recover lost treasure,15 which was sto- sentence In Mirkwood9, the adventurers un- len centuries before4 by the fearsome 17hyphens to wisely strayed2 from the path and dragon Smaug9,15 hundreds of miles avoid ambiguity consequently were imprisoned again. away beyond the Misty Mountains. Quick-thinking Bilbo11 saved them 18 Their journey through foreign territo- Y5/Y6 from years in the dungeons:16 “12I made statutory ries9 was spelling words Y6 Example Text Recount: Newspaper Report Example Text Annotated Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling Features
1Accurate everyone climb into barrels and we rewarded Bilbo with treasure and he 8relative clauses spelling, floated down the river.”12 he explained. set off home with Gandalf.After a within sentences punctuation When they finally10 reached their less eventful journey back9, he arrived starting with and grammar who, which, destination – the Lonely Mountain –15 in Hobbiton only to find2 everyone taught in where, when, previous years they found a scene of such desolation thought he was dead! whose and that. is demonstrated that the dwarves were initially unable (e.g. My mum, throughout the to find the wayinto their family home Now that3 Mr Baggins has recovered who is a great text 9. Bilbo saved the day7. He not only from his epic adventure11, he says chef, cooked located the entrance but also devised he has asked the police to make the dinner for me.) 2formal how to kill the dragon. Following Sackvilles hand back his property. 3,14 4 vocabulary Smaug’s death , they were attacked He will be staying at Bag End for the 9preposition and sentence by thegoblins and their allies. Al- foreseeable future2. “12No more adven- phrases to structure that though the evil creatures were defeat- tures for me!”12 said Bilbo,13 grinning. add detail matches the ed, Thorin was unfortunately10 killed. and clarity formality of the Grateful for all his help2, the dwarves (e.g. under the text floorboards, across the room) 3a range of linking words/ 10adverbs and phrases, adverbials to add including detail and clarity adverbials, to (e.g. bravely, join sentences often, repeatedly, and paragraphs in the blink of an together (e.g. eye) first, then, 11expanded after, while, noun phrases to significantly, add detail and likewise, for clarity (e. g. a instance) as well state-of-the-art as repetition computer or a and ellipsis hideous, green alien with a 4passive verbs pointy nose.) (e.g. The Spanish team 12inverted were beaten by commas France or The sweets were 13commas for eaten by the clarity children.) 14apostrophes for 5 modal verbs The Lonely Mountain possession (e.g. can, could, should, would) 15brackets, dashes and 6multi-clause commas for sentences parenthesis
7single clause 16 semi-colons, sentence for dashes and effect - short colons to and snappy separate clauses sentence 17hyphens to avoid ambiguity
18 Y5/Y6 statutory spelling words