From: Jones, Allen To: Hall, Vince; Shepard, Tom; McCormack, Irene; DRBOB Subject: AJ"s edits to first draft of State of the City address Date: Saturday, January 05, 2013 4:29:20 PM Attachments: Attached are my revised additions to the SoC in response to our discussion today. Allen ---------- Forwarded message ---------- From: Tom Shepard <
[email protected]> Date: Sat, Dec 29, 2012 at 9:43 AM Subject: First draft of State of the City speech To: Vince Hall < > Attached is a first draft of the State of the City speech. As I mentioned when we first discussed this, the draft should be viewed as a framework, not a completed document. I’ve highlighted in yellow paragraphs that are still needed but that are outside my areas of expertise. Among these, I’ve already asked Chris Frahm to give us a paragraph on water policy, which she has promised by next week. Also, please note that it has been a custom in some previous SoCs to solicit suggestions from the council members about specific initiatives they would like the mayor to call out and for which they would like to be recognized. Not sure if you want to do this, but if so the appropriate place would be right after Bob’s recognition of them in the current draft. To expedite the process of completing this, I suggest we schedule a meeting with Bob sometime this next week to go over the draft, get his feedback, and make assignments for additional items that need to be added. I stand ready to revise, add, delete (or in any other way you direct) take responsibility for ensuring Bob ends up with a final product with which he is satisfied.