A Screenplay Adaptation of Francis Brooke's the Excursion
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East Tennessee State University Digital Commons @ East Tennessee State University Electronic Theses and Dissertations Student Works 5-2011 The Excursion: A Screenplay Adaptation of Francis Brooke’s The Excursion. Jennifer Sim Daniel East Tennessee State University Follow this and additional works at: https://dc.etsu.edu/etd Part of the English Language and Literature Commons Recommended Citation Daniel, Jennifer Sim, "The Excursion: A Screenplay Adaptation of Francis Brooke’s The Excursion." (2011). Electronic Theses and Dissertations. Paper 2254. https://dc.etsu.edu/etd/2254 This Thesis - Open Access is brought to you for free and open access by the Student Works at Digital Commons @ East Tennessee State University. It has been accepted for inclusion in Electronic Theses and Dissertations by an authorized administrator of Digital Commons @ East Tennessee State University. For more information, please contact [email protected]. The Excursion: A Screenplay Adaptation of Francis Brooke’s The Excursion ___________________________________ A thesis presented to the faculty of the Department of Literature and Language East Tennessee State University In partial fulfillment of the requirements for the degree Master of Arts ___________________________________ by Jennifer Sim Daniel May 2011 ___________________________________ Dr. Jennifer Barker, Chair Dr. Judith Slagle Dr. Frederick Waage Keywords: Brooke, The Excursion, Screenplay Adaptation, Eighteenth Century Theatre ABSTRACT The Excursion: A Screenplay Adaptation of Francis Brooke’s The Excursion by Jennifer Sim Daniel My master’s thesis consists of a screenplay adaptation of the Eighteenth Century novel The Excursion by Francis Brooke, as well as an Introduction that details the writing process of the main text. In order to prepare this manuscript, I began with a study of both Francis Brooke and her novel as part of Dr. Judith Slagle’s Eighteenth Century British Novel course and developed my work to completion through independent research on and application of my findings on the screenwriting genre. The concluding product is a three- act screenplay which maintains the original period setting, speech, and costuming while adding such contemporary elements as 20th century music. Such a combination of time periods enables the stillness of the page to become the action of the screen even as it highlights the universal themes of Brooke’s original text. 2 Copyright 2011 by Jennifer Sim Daniel, All Rights Reserved. 3 ACKNOWLEDGEMENTS I would first like to offer my sincere thankfulness to my Lord and Savior, Jesus Christ. It is only through His unfailing answer to prayer that all the pieces of this project could have come to together and continued to a successful fruition. I would also like to thank my family and friends for their constant support and encouragement. I would especially like to acknowledge the help of my parents, Don and Donna Daniel, who have always encouraged me to pursue advanced education and have continuously offered me advice, financial support, and a safe place to rest and work. Finally, I would like to acknowledge Dr. Jennifer Barker and Dr. Judith Slagle for their help and advice as part of my incredibly supportive thesis committee. Both of these ladies were always willing to answer my endless email questions and meet with me to review my thesis at all stages of development. Their input was priceless, and I am so thankful to them for their hard work on this project. 4 CONTENTS Page ABSTRACT ………………………………………………………………………... 2 ACKNOWLEDGEMENTS …………………………………………………………. 4 Chapter 1. INTRODUCTION ………………………………………………………. 6 How Hard Can It Be? A Journey in Screenwriting: The Adaptation of Francis Brooke’s The Excursion ……………………………………. 6 2. SCREENPLAY ADAPTATION ……………………………………….. 24 Act I …………………………………………………………………. 24 Act II ………………………………………………………………… 41 Act III ……………………………………………………………….. 94 WORKS CITED …………………………………………………………………….. 141 VITA ………………………………………………………………………………… 144 5 CHAPTER 1 INTRODUCTION How Hard Can It Be? A Journey in Screenwriting: The Adaptation of Francis Brooke’s The Excursion In the Fall Semester of 2008, I was in the midst of studying the evolution of the British novel in Dr. Judith Slagle’s Eighteenth Century Novels course. After taking inventory with Moll Flanders, trudging through Pamela, and being disconcerted (to say the least) by Tristam Shandy, I found myself spending a pleasant Saturday afternoon with a slim text that I could not seem to put down. Having planned to read about a half of the novel that day and to finish the next, I assumed this work would be much like the other texts I studied throughout the course. However, with its neat, concise chapters and engaging coming-of-age tale, Francis Brooke’s The Excursion is something all together different from its predecessors. Through the delightful story of the very naive Miss Maria Villiers, Brooke introduces her own blend of social commentary and reflections on the practices of her brand of business—the theatre (Backsheider and Cotton xxix-xxxvi). Brooke’s novel is, as Dr. Slagle often says, a wonderful blend of a Fielding satire and an Austen novel of manners. Given the film success of adaptations of both Fielding’s and Austin’s works (“Henry,” “Jane”), it is surprising that no one has adapted The Excursion. But perhaps, this lack of adaptation is due to a sad lack of knowledge about Brooke’s novels. Dr. Slagle recently mentioned to me that her predecessor in Eighteenth Century studies at East Tennessee State University had never read The Excursion until Slagle introduced it to him. Known primarily as a playwright and a highly successful theatre manager in an 6 era when women simply did not do such things (Backscheider and Cotton xxxi, xxxvi- xxxviii) , Brooke’s talent as a novelist appears to be lost somewhere inside the long Eighteenth Century, at least that is, from the perspective of the silver screen. Ironically, it is in the world of acting that Brooke made such a mark, and it is this background knowledge that causes The Excursion to read fairly cinematically, with her chapter divisions forming scenes of sorts (Slagle). After finishing my first reading of her work, I spent the following class session discussing much of the above information with Dr. Slagle and my classmates. Slagle mentioned jokingly that someone should write a screenplay adaptation of the text, and we all laughed and went on with our scholarly commentary. However, a seed had been planted. As a part-time, commuting graduate student and full-time high school English teacher, I needed an independent study for the coming summer. I had already exhausted my on-site summer course options the previous summer term and was looking for a way to earn at least six credit hours while also saving on fuel expenses. It struck me then that perhaps I needed to write a screenplay adaptation of The Excursion; after all, I said to myself, “Sylvester Stallone wrote a screenplay. Ben Affleck wrote a screenplay. How hard can it be?” Having come to the conclusion of this project, I can only say that I have an immense amount of respect for those two gentlemen and apologize for any superiority complex I apparently suffered from at the onset of my experience. But, I digress. Planning to write the screenplay as an independent study, I approached Dr. Slagle and Dr. Robert Sawyer, the Graduate Coordinator at that time, with my idea. They responded that while I could not expect to earn six hours of credit for an independent study, I could do this project as a master’s thesis. I would only earn three hours of credit, 7 but since I would be writing a thesis, I would only need 30 total credit hours toward graduation and only have to complete three of the four sections of the MA exam. The logic of this solution could not be denied, and I jumped wholeheartedly at the opportunity. Having engaging source material from the start made it a little easier to imagine writing a piece in an unfamiliar genre. However, before I could really proceed, I had to teach myself how to write a screenplay. It was at this point that I truly realized the scope of what I had undertaken. In order to move forward with the project, I worked with three main texts on the art of screenplay writing: Robert McFee’s Story: Substance, Structure, Style, and the Principles of Screenwriting, Linda Seger’s The Art of Adaptation: Turning Fact and Fiction into Film, and William M. Akers’s Your Screenplay Sucks! 100 Ways to Make It Great. Based on the recommendation of a friend involved in both theatre and cinematography, I began with McFee’s work. Story is exactly what its name implies—a text devoted to explaining how to tell a story via the screen. Its “Introduction” is filled with a collection of screenplay aphorisms that divide up McPhee’s advice on how to discover and mine a successful idea into a full-fledged play (3-10). Such headers as “Story is about archetypes, not stereotypes” introduced me to the concept that my task was to find the universal appeal in Brooke’ story while simultaneously centering the tale in its own “unique, culture-specific expression” (McPhee 4). Essentially, how did Brooke’s heroine Maria capture something worth saying across centuries and cultures? For me, the answer was simple—Maria appeals to women in the same way the gals of Sex and the City do. She is our naïve sister, chasing a dream of glitz and love that she does not even fully understand. And, of course, once she does, 8 she realizes it was not at all the “fairytale” she saw in her head. I do not know a woman who has lived through her twenties who has not had “Maria moments” or, at the very least, counseled her girlfriends through a few. Yet, what about the second part of McPhee’s equation? Maria’s “culture- specific” is late Eighteenth Century London.