Book 9 Example Answers and Commentary

Book 9 Example answers and commentary

The epic simile in this passage is when Odysseus stabbed the eye. “As a shipwright turns a drill” is Odysseus turning the sword as it enters the Cyclopes eyeball. This shows how he turned the sword like a screw to make sure it blinded the beast completely and painfully. Then, the sound imagery in this passage is the noise the eyeball makes when burned. The sound of cooking flesh, “hissing” is onomatopoeia. The imagery from this passage strongly illustrates how Odysseus was talking up the men making them fearless while running top speed to assure the sword went deep into the Cyclopes. The detail of the descriptions, epic similes and onomatopoeia show a clear story. Not only does it illustrate what’s happening, but it brings you deeper in realizing how Odysseus had to calm and inspire the men. Making him a better leader who truly cared for his men and how they fought. He taught them to be brave and courageous and to put trust in their noble leader, Lord Odysseus. Very clear on identification and analysis of how it tells plot. Lacks a more thoughtful final inference. It is logical, but not a deeper look at details of language. 27/30 Category Below Standard Near Standard Standard Above Standard 10-13 14-15 16-17 18-20 Ideas &  Identifies few  Correctly identifies  Correctly identifies  Correctly identifies Content literary techniques, some literary most literary literary techniques of 20 points or has basic errors techniques techniques imagery, figurative in identification language & sound  Shows little  Shows some analysis  Shows good analysis  Shows detailed analysis of of connection of connection analysis of connection between between language and between language connection between language and meaning and meaning language and meaning meaning  Makes few or  Makes inferences  Makes logical  Makes thoughtful unsupported with some support by inferences supported inferences supported inferences that do text that show by text that show by details in text that not show adequate adequate good understanding show complex understanding of understanding of plot, of plot, character & understanding of plot, character & character & themes themes plot, character & themes themes Organization  Unclear  Somewhat confusing  Clearly organizes  Clearly organizes & organization organization answer into answer into Conventions sentences and sentences and 10 points paragraph paragraph  Many basic  Sentence or  Uses correct  Uses correct sentence or convention errors sentences and sentences and convention errors distract from meaning conventions with conventions with few make this hard to sometimes some errors to errors to understand communicate clearly communicate clearly This passage has many literary techniques. One of them is a simple simile. In the passage, Odysseus compares shoving the stick into the Cyclops’ eye to a shipwright using a drill. This means that Odysseus viewed using the stick to blind the Cyclops eye as a necessary evil. A shipwright must drill to keep his job, Odysseus must gouge the Cyclops to keep his life. Additionally, this scene has some intense imagery. This means that the scene of blinding the Cyclops stuck with Odysseus. To be able to recall a scene in such detail, it must have really affected Odysseus. The last literary element supports the second one, the onomatopoeia proves that Odysseus has had an intense reason to remember even more of this event. This shows that in this section, Odysseus must have been scared witless. By being forced to gouge the Cyclops and witness the bloody scene, it showed Odysseus that even though his action was a necessary evil, it still wasn’t a good choice. It’s not a simple simile; it’s an epic simile. Excellent analysis that goes beyond the obvious. Excellent inference. This shows thought, and it is very clearly written. 29/30 Category Below Standard Near Standard Standard Above Standard 10-13 14-15 16-17 18-20 Ideas &  Identifies few  Correctly identifies  Correctly identifies  Correctly identifies Content literary techniques, some literary most literary literary techniques of 20 points or has basic errors techniques techniques imagery, figurative in identification language & sound  Shows little  Shows some analysis  Shows good analysis  Shows detailed analysis of of connection of connection analysis of connection between between language and between language connection between language and meaning and meaning language and meaning meaning  Makes few or  Makes inferences  Makes logical  Makes thoughtful unsupported with some support by inferences supported inferences supported inferences that do text that show by text that show by details in text that not show adequate adequate good understanding show complex understanding of understanding of plot, of plot, character & understanding of plot, character & character & themes themes plot, character & themes themes Organization  Unclear  Somewhat confusing  Clearly organizes  Clearly organizes & organization organization answer into answer into Conventions sentences and sentences and 10 points paragraph paragraph  Many basic  Sentence or  Uses correct  Uses correct sentence or convention errors sentences and sentences and convention errors distract from meaning conventions with conventions with few make this hard to sometimes some errors to errors to understand communicate clearly communicate clearly

An epic simile is used to describe the motion of a huge spike stabbing the eye of a Cyclops. The brand that was used to impale the eye is being compared to a shipwright turning a drill in planking. This shows how Odysseus and his men ram it into the eye, turning it to make the injury worse. This language shows how cunning and courageous Odysseus and his men are. Odysseus got himself and his men into a very dangerous situation, but he used his wits, and came up with a plan to damage the Cyclops in a unrepairable way. This shows he can be depended on in a sticky situation even if he was the one who got them into it in the first place. This only identifies one language technique and there are several more. The conclusions are logical and well supported, but lack more thoughtful or detailed analysis of the text. 26/30

Category Below Standard Near Standard Standard Above Standard 10-13 14-15 16-17 18-20 Ideas &  Identifies few  Correctly identifies  Correctly identifies  Correctly identifies Content literary techniques, some literary most literary literary techniques of 20 points or has basic errors techniques techniques imagery, figurative in identification language & sound  Shows little  Shows some analysis  Shows good analysis  Shows detailed analysis of of connection of connection analysis of connection between between language and between language connection between language and meaning and meaning language and meaning meaning  Makes few or  Makes inferences  Makes logical  Makes thoughtful unsupported with some support by inferences supported inferences supported inferences that do text that show by text that show by details in text that not show adequate adequate good understanding show complex understanding of understanding of plot, of plot, character & understanding of plot, character & character & themes themes plot, character & themes themes Organization  Unclear  Somewhat confusing  Clearly organizes  Clearly organizes & organization organization answer into answer into Conventions sentences and sentences and 10 points paragraph paragraph  Many basic  Sentence or  Uses correct  Uses correct sentence or convention errors sentences and sentences and convention errors distract from meaning conventions with conventions with few make this hard to sometimes some errors to errors to understand communicate clearly communicate clearly