Have Fun with the Persona

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Have Fun With The Persona It is vital you have fun with your expression, playing with imagery, vocabulary, structure, and any other aspect of your language you can modify to be more in keeping with your persona. Here are some examples:

This: Formal is the best night of your life. I would know; I have been to nine school formals, six socials and two balls. could be this: The formal is your life’s pinnacle. I know; I have flirted and weaseled my way in to nine school formals, six socials and two balls. Interesting action processes added that convey manipulation by a popular person.

This: What we prefer is something different, mostly comedy and completely independent like these few gems; could be this: We avoid these intolerably formulaic bores, favouring intelligently humorous critiques of culture such as these gems; A more ‘snobby’ and ‘hipster’ tone.

This: Fish. Those slimy creatures swimming along, trying to ruin your enjoyment, could be this: Fish. Slithery, slimy creatures ruining your enjoyment More concise, used sibilance more deliberately, the ruining works with the biting that follows to create a rhythm, slithery and slimy rhyme to also add rhythm, slithery is more ‘evil’ sounding than swimming, the quality slithery becomes the focus of the 2nd sentence instead of fish (those).

This: Preparing for the worst is the first step to take. Ironically thinking about the worst case scenario might be the trigger of your plane crash anxiety, so it’s a step that is both helpful and unhelpful. could be this: Preparation for the worst case scenario is a double edged sword; while the information is reassuring the act of preparing can trigger anxiety. It’s 13 words less, has a metaphor, uses nominalisation.

Conciseness Attack this enemy!

This: We like films that are different and try to stray from the average Summer Blockbuster as well as complicated and deep films that if you pretended you understood them, you could seem intelligent. could be this: Our film preferences must shun summer blockbusters and include complicated, deep films we pretend to understand to seem intelligent. 33 to 19 words – 57% of what it was!

This: it is a negative sign of laziness that is never acceptable at all costs. could be this: it is an unacceptable sign of laziness. 14 to 7 words – 50% of original.

Headings Make sure there’s a clear heading for each page.

Make the wording of your headings brief and catchy.

This: What to wear / the classic nerd look could be this: Nerdify Your Wardrobe

Narrative Voice Make sure you keep your narrative voice consistent.

Slithery, slimy creatures ruining our You haven’t used any 2nd person pronouns until this point. You either start with them, or don’t use them. enjoyment,

The way one You have been using you until this point, so this is a switch in narrative tone. You can be one or the other, but you need to be consistent. grooms and dresses determines the amount of effort invested into self-discipline. The films a hipster likes are similar to the tastes of the basic human, however, unlike their uneducated minds we You’ve switched narrative voice (been using you until now). You need to pick which narrative voice you prefer and keep it consistent throughout the text.

Bibliography References in a bibliography must be set out properly, not simply a copy and past of web addresses. There is a PDF about referencing on the Miscellaneous page on the wiki.

Conjunctions

As this is a more factual writing style, there has been a tendency to write with less conjunctions. Remember you need them for the fluency of your writing.

This: You’re a teenager now, you should be cooking three course meals. With all those countless hours in the kitchen with mum you have mastered the family recipes. It’s now time to use them to your advantage. could be this: You’re a teenager now, therefore (conjunction within a sentence) you should be cooking three course meals. With all those countless hours in the kitchen with mum you have mastered the family recipes. Consequently (conjunction between sentences) you have an arsenal you can use to your advantage.

When the time comes that you’ve finished your small meal, the children may again insist you play with them. This is not an unreasonable request could be this: When the time comes that you’ve finished your small meal, the children may again insist you play with them. Even though (conjunction linking the two sentences) this is not an unreasonable request…

Action Processes Choose more interesting ones.

This: For all those young girls entering the teenage years, could be this: For all those young girls bursting into adolescence, Notice I also strengthened the subtle metaphor.

This: For the woman who wants to enjoy the bliss of spending a day at the beach without going in the water. could be this: For the woman who wants to enjoy the bliss of spending a day at the beach without suffering in the water. Carries the disdain of the character.