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Probe A - WS 1.24 Writing Strategies Objective WS 1.24 Analyze original draft and edit and revise composition to improve meaning and focus of writing through addition, deletion, consolidation, clarification and/or rearrangement of words and sentences and clarification of transitions Directions: Read the report and answer the following questions. The teacher asked the student to write a report about Althea Gibson, the famous tennis player. Althea Gibson Althea Gibson was born the daughter of a sharecropper in 1927. Her family moved to New York when she was only one year old. Althea grew up strong and healthy. Althea did not like to go to her grandmother's because she just wanted to play with her friends. Althea learned to play tennis at the Harlem River Tennis Club. She learned about footwork and sportsmanship. Soon, in 1946, she won the national black girls' championship. At eighteen years of age, Althea met Dr. Eaton and Dr. Johnson. Together the two doctors agreed to give Althea training and education because they wanted her to break down racial barriers for black people in tennis. Dr. Eaton and Dr. Johnson were right. Althea and Dr. Eaton played tennis together. In 1950 Althea Gibson was the first black person to become part of the U.S. Lawn Tennis Association. Even more impressive she won a match at Wimbledon in 1957. 1. Which sentence could the student use to better express the purpose of the report? A. Althea Gibson is a famous black athlete and role model. B. Sharecroppers' daughters grow up strong. C. It is important to get an education if you want to play tennis.

2. Which detail does not belong in Paragraph 1? A. Althea grew up strong and healthy. B. Althea Gibson was born the daughter of a sharecropper in 1927. C. Althea did not like to go to her grandmother's because she just wanted to play with her friends.

3. Which detail could be added to Paragraph 2? A. In 1945 she won local tournaments. B. Althea was friends with Sugar Ray Robinson. C. Dr. Eaton lived in North Carolina.

4. The student needs to edit one sentence out of paragraph 3. Which sentence would you take out of the paragraph? A. Dr. Eaton and Dr. Johnson were right. B. Even more impressive, she won a match at Wimbledon in 1957. C. Althea and Dr. Eaton played tennis together.

5. Which concluding sentence would be best to finish paragraph 3? A. Now we know why Althea did not like school. B. Althea Gibson was a nice person C. Althea Gibson had indeed broken down racial barriers for black people.

Write 1 Common Core Question and FCAT 2.0 Question using “Althea Gibson”. Common Core: 1. a. b. c. d.

FCAT 2.0:

2. a. b. c. d.

Score: __ / 5 (Proficient = 4)