Name: Zainab Abdullah AlShafai Student ID: 70679440 P.O. Box 633 Sihat City – Eastern Province Zip Code 31972 Saudi Arabia Email: [email protected] Exam No: 500503 Essay Literary Analysis REQUIRED RETAKE INSTRUCTIONS ENG300: 500503 Literary Analysis Essay Student name: Zainab Abdullah AlShafai Student number: 70679440 Grade: 58% Date: 6/12/17 Evaluator: AF Dear Student, Unfortunately, you earned a failing grade on this first-attempt submission. According to the Academic Policies in the Penn Foster Student Handbook, you must prepare a retake submission. Since the goal of this course is to help you improve your writing, you will continue working with your current submission, completely revising and editing it at all levels. Merely applying the instructor’s corrections in grammar, spelling, or format will not show sufficient evidence that you have improved your skill level and therefore will not result in a change to your grade. Review the textbook and assignment directions. Following are key revisions you must make to ensure a passing grade on your retake. If you do not understand how to rewrite your paper in order to accomplish these goals, please contact the school. Purpose: analyze the impact and influence a song has in a contemporary context based on its literary devices and cultural references. Strong thesis: State a specific thesis in your introduction which states the song’s title and author/performer as well as an opinion that reflects the purpose. Development: Using the thesis as the guide, prove to the reader, through research opinions, and/or personal details how the song offers impact beyond just the reader. A combination of all three is most helpful. Satisfying conclusion: Provide a satisfying conclusion to close your discussion, reinforcing your thesis, and closing with a final thought. MLA Citations: Using MLA, offer internal citations and a properly formatted Works Cited page to avoid plagiarism accusations. Editing and proofreading: Read papers aloud to check for clear sentence structure and conventions. Name: Zainab Abdullah AlShafai Student ID: 70679440 P.O. Box 633 Sihat City – Eastern Province Zip Code 31972 Saudi Arabia Email: [email protected] Exam No: 500503 Essay Literary Analysis Include this set of instructions with your retake submission, or there may be a problem completing your evaluation. For electronic submissions, copy and paste just the first four lines of text (from "Required Retake" through the evaluator's initials) at the beginning of your retake document. As part of your file name, include “Retake” after your last name. Then submit your retake essay for grading. Best wishes on your retake, Education Department Penn Foster College ENG300: ADVANCED COMPOSITION Literary Analysis: Figurative Language in Music and Song ENG300: Advanced Composition Open Office Hours occurs several times. Please register for the date and time that works best for you: https://attendee.gotowebinar.com/rt/5628365219371211777. This is not a required webinar for the Advanced Composition course. It is also not a presentation. English instructor Rianna Karalunas will be available from 3:00 - 4:00 p.m. EST to answer questions about your Advanced Composition writing course. If you're enrolled in Advanced Composition and have questions about an assignment, please join us during our open office hours. After registering, you will receive a confirmation email containing information about joining the webinar. Skill Skill Skill Not Evaluation for exam number: Realized Developing Emerging Shown Thesis: Audience, Purpose, and Topic Does the thesis make a claim about the significance of the 10 9 8 7.5 7 5 0 song that alludes to both the figurative language it employs and its impact on its audience? There is not a clear thesis Name: Zainab Abdullah AlShafai Student ID: 70679440 P.O. Box 633 Sihat City – Eastern Province Zip Code 31972 Saudi Arabia Email: [email protected] Exam No: 500503 Essay Literary Analysis statement in the introduction. Development How insightfully and convincingly does the writer analyze each example of the song's poetic devices in terms of correct identification and explanation of terms for given line(s), tying the use of each to the song's theme? The essay should focus on approx. three main literary devices used in the song to convey a particular message or meaning. These devices should be introduced in the introduction and stated in the thesis. Each body paragraph should address ONE of these literary devices – with examples from the song and analysis of the device, how it is used in the song, and how it helps convey 20 19 18 17 10 8 0 the song’s overall meaning or message. Your essay does not organize the content in this way, and the analysis is weak. Although your essay identifies many and varied possible examples of literary devices in the song, it does not include deep analysis of any one example. The cultural impact of the song also needs further development. It begins to address how and why the song appeals to a certain audience (those who have experienced similar relationship problems) but then gets off track by stating other examples of its popularity (mainly because of its catchy sound). Incorporation of Source Material How logically and effectively are paraphrases, summaries, and direct quotations from varied, relevant, and reliable sources employed to support the thesis statement and illustrate the assertions made about the song itself? 10 9 8 7.5 7 5 0 The main source you seem to have incorporated is the one that identifies literary devices and their definitions. The essay does not incorporate sources that are relevant to the song itself and could help support the analysis you try to convey. Organization How gracefully does the writer incorporate transitional 15 14 13 12 10 5 0 words and connective phrasing with appropriate paragraphing to guide the reader through the presentation? Name: Zainab Abdullah AlShafai Student ID: 70679440 P.O. Box 633 Sihat City – Eastern Province Zip Code 31972 Saudi Arabia Email: [email protected] Exam No: 500503 Essay Literary Analysis As noted in your outline, the essay should be organized according to approx three literary devices used. Your essay presents many different devices, many without sufficient analysis. It is not enough to simply identify the use of a particular device in the song. Each one should be analyzed in terms of the device you identify and how it contributes to the song’s overall meaning. Style and Voice How energetically and consistently does the writer interact with both the topic and audience while using varied, 10 9 8 7.5 7 4 0 concrete, active diction? To what extent does the writer achieve a natural, pleasant rhythm, particularly through sentence fluency? MLA Citation Did the writer accurately and correctly document at least 10 9 8 7.5 7 3 0 three required sources using the MLA citation style both in-text and on the list of Works Cited? Annotated Bibliography Did the writer give five sources, including the two cited in the paper? Was each annotation at least three sentences 10 9 8 7.5 7 4 0 long? How well did the writer summarize the source's purpose, analyze its usefulness for the paper, and reflect on a unique aspect of the source? Conventions At what level does the writer demonstrate correct and 10 9 8 7.5 7 4 0 effective standard written American English? Format and Length Did the paper meet the required length (1200-1500 words) 5 4.5 4 3 1 0 and formatting requirements? Exam grade: 58% Date of evaluation: 6/12/17 Evaluated by: AF IMPORTANT NOTICE Name: Zainab Abdullah AlShafai Student ID: 70679440 P.O. Box 633 Sihat City – Eastern Province Zip Code 31972 Saudi Arabia Email: [email protected] Exam No: 500503 Essay Literary Analysis Along the right-hand side of your evaluated exam, you should see marginal or "bubble" comments from your instructor. You should also see a series of highlighted numbers in the evaluation chart identifying the rating you earned on each trait. If you don't see this feedback, click on the "View" tab and "Print Layout" or click on "Review" and the option "Final Showing Markup." If you still cannot see the feedback, please contact the school for the complete evaluation. Figurative Language Analysis of the song, Jar of Hearts The song, Jar of Hearts by Christina Perri is a popular song, which uses numerous types of figurative language. The use of figurative languagses allows for people listeninglisteners to understand the deeper meaning and story of the song. The Commented [PF1]: Based on your outline, this is the closest to a thesis statement for this essay. lyrics were obtained from Google Play List (2017) and song was written by D. Lawrence. However, the thesis should (1) state the name of song (2) identify the specific literary devices that will be analyzed (3) state the main message or theme of the song that is The title in it of itself is a literary device. It is a metaphor. The ‘jar of hearts’ is a conveyed through the literary devices and (4) indicate what the cultural impact or significance of the song is. metaphor implying that past relationships have been put to the side and put away, so that they are part of the person’s history and not in their present or future. Although the title is original since there are no other songs that I know of with this name, the plot of the song is unoriginal. It is the same type of love story found in lots of songs, books, and movies, and thus it is a form of figurative language called a cliché. The cliché and plot of the song is simple.