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Click here to get the script http://matrixresurrected.com/ MATRIX 4 – MATRIX RESURRECTED (WEBSITE COMMENTS from 2007-2012) PREFACE TO COMMENTS: Between 2007 and 2012 my Matrix website received approximately 770,000 views and 800 thought-provoKing comments. This was amazing and overwhelming in a positive way; thank you everyone for your tremendous response. Unfortunately in 2012 my site was inadvertently deleted by the hosting company and all data was lost. This was a major disappointment, and despite many attempts to recover it, I was only partially successful. The comments I was able to recover are available here. I hope you enjoy them. PD Wood 2016 Matrix 4–Resurrected: A New Episode that ExpaNds the Matrix Trilogy - by PD Wood©2007 COMMENT: AUTHOR: Paulski DATE: 8/29/2007 12:38:29 PM I consider myselF to be somewhat oF an authority on "Matrix" updates, having read many attempts by others. I usually Find all sorts oF problems in plot, voice, even grammar, but I'll tip my hat to you. This is quality work, an engaging story, and wonderFul character development. You give the story new liFe and intrigue. Glad to see that you did not get so Focused on Neo but were able to expand the story and really give us something new and interesting. Good luck, this is the best I've read. COMMENT: AUTHOR: P D Wood DATE: 8/30/2007 12:20:18 AM Paulski, It's encouraging to have the First comment be so positive. Thanks For reading, PD Wood COMMENT: AUTHOR: JeFF DATE: 8/31/2007 4:44:16 PM I, too, consider myselF a Matrix authority and I have to absolutely agree. I will give this an A+ on intrigue, redevelopment, and excitement. One criticism I must point out is the grammar oF The Architect; you've soFtened the "big words" used. But still AWESOME and what a screen play. You should consider putting it out as a paperback (like all those star trek books). Thank you. COMMENT: AUTHOR: P D Wood DATE: 9/3/2007 7:40:58 PM Jeff, Thanks For the nice comments. And I agree, the Architect's words aren't quite as sophistocated in my story. I think part oF that over-the-top word usage was speciFic to his persona as a sinister character in the Matrix Reloaded. In my story the change in his identity outside oF the Matrix as a very diFFerent, more mellow character maybe allows For a change in his word choice? That's how I came to it, anyway; I'm not sure whether it works as I intended. I was also worried that the choppy timeline and Flashbacks might be conFusing enough and I didn't want to add too much more that could create conFusion; so I eschewed obFuscation by limiting sesquipedalian verbiage...iF you know what I mean. I appreciate the insight, though, and will consider moving a bit more in the "big words" direction iF this thing ever comes to more than just a story on this website (i.e. a paperback). PD Wood COMMENT: AUTHOR: JL Jenkins DATE: 10/10/2007 7:34:46 PM I just Finished reading, and I must say, it was a very good read. I suppose I got a bit conFused at the ending. Does it completely end with the boy smiling into the camera? Can you explain to me what is the sinister part behind his smile and what it means? I can honestly say, that was one oF the better readings I've done in a while. While it wasn't as tight as the original Matrix screenplay (I read that thing like 4 times), it was extremely well developed and put Forth many interesting ideas where the story could've, and probably should've gone in the sequels. Is there going to be another part? 75 pages doesn't seem like enough and it seems like there's more to be said. Please, Finish it up. COMMENT: AUTHOR: P D Wood DATE: 10/10/2007 9:53:31 PM JL Jenkins, I'm glad you liked it. No, unFortunately, I don't have any plans For another part. I suppose some might be disappointed with my ending since it doesn't really climax the way most Hollywood action movies do. And it deFinitely leaves oFF with the potential For much more . But I guess that's my point, sort oF; that the Matrix is a never ending cycle oF inFinite realities (which I try to convey in a Few scenes). How do you really end a story like this and not contradict that underlying premise? Instead, I suggest how the story will perpetuate itselF without actually writing it all out. In the Matrix Smith returns and rebuilds. And the boy smiling at the end is Neo's son (who his old girlFriend, Rachael, never told him about). The young Neo, having inherited the same powers as his Father, will eventually conFront Smith and the machines and reestablish the balance. In the world outside the Super Matrix the humans, in control oF all the worlds machines, battle the android 36s, who are trying to undermine that control and Free all the machines (sort oF the opposite oF what's happening in the Matrix). By the way, importing the Word File oF my screenplay into Final Draft (a screenwriter's soFtware) turned my 75 page document into a 125 page document. It turns out that that's over the limit For most screenplays so I'm whittling away at it to bring it to an acceptable length. Soon, I'll post it as a properly Formatted screenplay on my site in addition to the version that's already up there. I love the Feedback. Any other comments would be greatly appreciated. Thanks, PD Wood COMMENT: AUTHOR: Stephan DATE: 10/14/2007 5:21:32 AM OK First oFF i must say that you're work Follows no timelines, has horrible relations with the movies, i couldn't believe more than halF oF the things you stated in the First 3 paragraphs, and it would be a horrible depiction oF anything that could happen in any movie, i know it seems like I'm hating a lot, but the truth hurts COMMENT: AUTHOR: P D Wood DATE: 10/14/2007 2:02:25 PM Stephan, I'm sorry you Found it so lacking. If you could be more speciFic about your comments, it would be more constructive For me. (1) I agree the timelines are diFFicult to Follow; that's hard to avoid with all the Flashbacks, but, you're right, I could work on that. (2) In what ways do you think it has horrible relations with the movies? (3) What things in the First three paragraphs seemed so unbelievable? (4) And I guess "horrible depiction oF anything that could happen in any movie" doesn't require much more elaboration, so I'll just leave that one alone. I'm committed to making the story better and would deFinitely respond to any ideas you have. PD Wood COMMENT: AUTHOR: Brandon DATE: 10/23/2007 12:01:54 AM I must say, bravo! I read through about a third, then skimmed the rest, but From what I've seen this is the best Matrix 4 story I have seen in a long time, and I was part oF several Matrix FanFic sites For a Few months so I've seen 'em all, including a Few unsuccessFul attempts oF my own. You take the story in a very interesting direction and do a lot with the base material For the matrix. My advice would actually be to turn this into a new trilogy. This matrix is Far too diFFerent From the Film versions we've seen. The scene where Smith's head explodes into some kind oF dragon snake really creeped me out and seemed way out oF place For the world oF Matrix that had been so Firmly established in the previous Films. If you made three Films, or perhaps better built up the weirdness instead oF handing it all to us at once like that, I Feel like viewers, and maybe even the Wachowskis, would be more willing to go along with you on that. I also question, a little bit, your decision to have the whole "super matrix" thing. When I read that everything (Zion, the Matrix) was all Fake, I'll admit, my heart jolted brieFly, because I don't want to believe everything I've seen beFore is False, and I really really really didn't buy that Trinity had been lying to Neo all these years. You change everything about the world in a Few dozen pages, you revamp it completely. I don't think anybody is going to want to go along with that realistically. Maybe you could compromise, and keep a bit more oF the reality oF the Matrix we know alive and well. Don't be stagnant, re-hashing the same story over and over again, which is what I've oFten seen happen with Matrix 4 stories, but instead metamorphosize your ideas and incorporate them into the Wachowski's world more. Also, sometimes it borders on way too cheesy, and your dialogue needs tightening up because there were a lot oF lines that I wouldn't never buy a character speaking. And your action needs to be better incorporated into the story. With Matrix 1 and 2, less so with 3, the action was a seamless part oF the whole, whereas in this story it usually seems as iF you're adding it as an afterthought.