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Tom Daley Wow! Who is that figure twirling through the air high above the swimming pool, and what is he all about? Read on and find out… Introduction British diver Tom Daley has represented his country in many competitions worldwide, including three Olympic Games. He specialises in platform dives - both as a solo athlete and in synchronised events. Family and Early Life Thomas Robert Daley was born in Plymouth on 21st May 1994. His father, Rob, trained as an electrician while his mother (Debbie) was a housewife. Tom is their eldest child: his two brothers, William and Ben, are three and five years younger than him. Tom attended local schools and, despite his education being interrupted by competitions, he still achieved great exam results at his secondary school. Sporting Beginnings Having learned to swim at the age of four, Tom then began diving lessons at his local pool aged seven. Although, he was also keen on other sports including judo. He was soon spotted by diving coach Andy Banks, who became his trainer when Tom was eight years old. From that age onwards, Tom was part of an increasingly intensive training regime – including regular lessons and training camps in other cities. He has admitted that he found being away from home very difficult as a young child, and when Tom was placed in a competitive squad and began travelling to diving events, his father decided he would give up his job and accompany Tom on the road; had he not been there, Tom might not have become so successful. Y6 Information Text: Biography Example Text

First Signs of a Star Only one month after his tenth birthday, Tom became the youngest-ever winner of the under-18 platform competition in the National Junior Championships. Unfortunately, despite the fact he had met the tough qualification standard for the 2006 Commonwealth Games, Tom couldn’t be selected for the England team at that time since he wasn’t old enough. However, later in 2005 at the British Championships, he did become the under-18 champion in 10m platform and 3m springboard. Continued Success Progress, achievements and awards came thick and fast after that for Tom: he was junior 10m champion at the British Championships in 2005, 2006 and 2007; BBC ‘Young Sports Personality of the Year’ award winner three times and by the age of 14, he was Britain’s youngest competitor at the 2008 Beijing Olympics. There, he reached the final with his dive partner Blake Aldridge, as well as competing in the individual 10m event. At 16, he was a double-gold winner at the Commonwealth Games. Family Tragedy Sadly, Tom’s biggest supporter – his father – was diagnosed with a brain tumour when Tom was only 12. He died in 2011. Tom was devastated by the loss and has credited his dad with making him the person he is today. Poster Boy In the lead-up to the London 2012 Olympic Games, Tom was one of the British athletes promoting the Games around the country. He won a bronze medal in the individual 10m dive (which he dedicated to his late father) but unfortunately finished 4th in the synchronised event. Y6 Information Text: Biography Example Text

After the success of the 2012 Games, Tom returned to training and school, studying hard for his exams. He became a celebrity supporter of ChildLine, a children's helpline run by the NSPCC, and revealed that he had been bullied earlier in his schooldays. Because of this, Tom’s parents moved him to a new school; he was much happier there.

Competition success continued meanwhile, and in 2016, Tom was selected for the Rio Olympics. He was hugely disappointed not to win a medal in the individual event but that was partly forgotten when he and partner Daniel Goodfellow won bronze in the synchronised 10m dive. Dedicated Sportsman Even at that point, aged only 22, Tom was already regarded as a ‘veteran’ athlete, and is seen as an inspiration for young sports fans across the United Kingdom. His determination and willingness to train incredibly hard make him an excellent role model. As Tom says, “Oh, you have to want it more than anything. It has to be the biggest thing in your life – otherwise why would you do it?” Y6 Information Text: Biography Example Text Annotated Genre Features Tom Daley Wow! Who is that figure twirling through the air high above

1 an introduction the swimming pool, and what is he all about? Read on and that summarises find out… the main events of the person's life Introduction1 British diver Tom Daley has represented his country in many competitions worldwide, including three Olympic Games. He specialises in platform dives - both as a solo athlete and in synchronised events.

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2 2 information First Signs of a Star about the key events in the Only one month after his tenth birthday, Tom became the person's life in youngest-ever winner of the under-18 platform competition3 in chronological paragraphs the National Junior Championships. Unfortunately, despite the fact he had met the tough qualification standard for the 2006 Commonwealth Games, Tom couldn’t be selected for the England team at that time since he wasn’t4 old enough. However, later in 2005 at the British Championships, he did become the under-18 champion in 10m platform and 3m springboard. Continued Success2 Progress, achievements and awards came4 thick and fast after that for Tom: he was junior 10m champion at the British Championships in 2005, 2006 and 2007; BBC ‘Young Sports Personality of the Year’ award winner three times and by the age of 14, he was Britain’s youngest competitor at the 3 4 3 2008 Beijing Olympics. There, he reached the final with specific facts about his dive partner Blake Aldridge, as well as competing in the achievements, individual 10m event. At 16, he was a double-gold winner at influences and significant people the Commonwealth Games. Family Tragedy2 Sadly, Tom’s biggest supporter – his father – was diagnosed with a brain tumour when Tom was only 12. He died in 2011.3 Tom was devastated by the loss and has credited his dad with making him the person he is today.5 4 verbs written in 2 past tense and Poster Boy third person In the lead-up to the London 2012 Olympic Games, Tom was one of the British athletes promoting the Games around the country.3

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After the success of the 2012 Games, Tom returned to training 3 specific and school, studying hard for his exams. He became a celebrity facts about 3 achievements, supporter of ChildLine , a children's helpline run by the NSPCC, influences and and revealed that he had been bullied4 earlier in his schooldays. significant people Because of this, Tom’s parents moved him to a new school; he was much happier there5.

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9 All text: Accurate 3&9 preposition spelling, After the success of the 2012 Games , Tom returned to training phrases to punctuation and and school,13 studying hard for his exams. He became a celebrity add detail grammar taught and clarity 15 in previous years supporter of ChildLine, a children's helpline run by the NSPCC, (e.g. under the is demonstrated 2 4 floorboards, throughout and revealed that he had been bullied earlier in his schooldays. across the room, the text. Because of this,3&9 Tom’s parents moved him to a new school9;16 etc.)

2 formal he was much happier there. 10 adverbs and vocabulary and adverbials to sentence structure Competition success continued meanwhile2, and in 2016, Tom add detail and that matches the clarity (e.g. formality of was selected for the Rio Olympics. He was hugely10 disappointed bravely, often, the text 10 repeatedly, in not to win a medal in the individual event but that was partly the blink of an 3 a range of 8 eye, etc.) linking words/ forgotten when he and partner Daniel Goodfellow won bronze phrases, in the synchronised 10m dive11. 11 expanded including noun phrases to adverbials, to add detail and join sentences Dedicated Sportsman clarity (e. g. a and paragraphs Even at that point, aged only 22,15 Tom was already regarded4 state-of-the-art together (e.g. computer or a 12 4 first, then, as a ‘veteran’ athlete, and is seen as an inspiration for young hideous, green after, while, 10 18 alien with a significantly, sports fans across the United Kingdom . His determination pointy nose.) likewise, for and willingness to train incredibly10 hard make him an excellent instance etc.) as 12 12 inverted well as repetition role model. As Tom says, “ Oh, you have to want it more than commas and ellipsis 10 anything . It has to be the biggest thing in your life – otherwise 13 commas for 4 passive verbs why would5 you do it?”12 clarity (e.g. The Spanish team were beaten 14 apostrophes for by France or The possession sweets were eaten by the children.) 15 brackets, 5 modal verbs dashes and (e.g. can, commas for could, should, parenthesis would, etc.) 16 semi-colons, 6 multi-clause dashes and sentences colons to separate clauses 7 single clause sentence for 17hyphens to effect - short avoid ambiguity and snappy sentence 18Y5/Y6 8 relative clauses statutory within sentences spelling words starting with who, which, where, when, whose and that. (e.g. My mum, who is a great chef, cooked dinner for me.) Y6 Information Text: Biography Example Text Annotated Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling Features

2 formal find out… 10 adverbs and vocabulary and adverbials to sentence structure Introduction add detail and that matches the clarity (e.g. formality of British diver Tom Daley has bravely, often, the text repeatedly, in represented his country in the blink of an 3 a range of 18 eye, etc.) linking words/ many competitions worldwide, phrases, including three Olympic Games. 11 expanded including noun phrases to adverbials, to He specialises in platform dives add detail and join sentences clarity (e. g. a and paragraphs – both as a solo athlete and in state-of-the-art together (e.g. synchronised events9. computer or a first, then, hideous, green after, while, alien with a significantly, Family and Early Life pointy nose.) likewise, for Thomas Robert Daley was born4 instance etc.) as 12 inverted well as repetition in Plymouth on 21st May, 1994. commas and ellipsis His father 15 trained , Rob, as an 13 commas for 4 passive verbs electrician10 while3 his mother (Debbie)15 was a housewife. Tom clarity (e.g. The Spanish 16 15 team were beaten is their eldest child: his two brothers, William and Ben, are 14 apostrophes for by France or The possession sweets were eaten three and five years younger than him. Tom attended local schools by the children.) 2&3 and, despite his education being interrupted by competitions, 15 brackets, 9 5 modal verbs he still achieved great exam results at his secondary school . dashes and (e.g. can, commas for could, should, parenthesis would, etc.) Sporting Beginnings Having learned to swim3 at the age of four,13 Tom then began 16 semi-colons, 6 multi-clause 3 dashes and sentences diving lessons at his local pool aged seven. Although , he was colons to also keen on other sports9 including judo. He was soon spotted4 separate clauses 7 single clause sentence for by diving coach Andy Banks, who became his trainer when Tom 17hyphens to effect - short 8 3&9 avoid ambiguity and snappy was eight years old . From that age onwards , Tom was part of sentence 11 an increasingly intensive training regime – including regular 18Y5/Y6 8 relative clauses statutory lessons and training camps in other cities. He has admitted that spelling words within sentences 9 10 starting with he found being away from home very difficult as a young who, which, child, and when Tom was placed4 in a competitive squad and where, when, whose and that. began travelling to diving events, his father decided he would5 (e.g. My mum, 18 16 who is a great give up his job and accompany Tom on the road; had he not chef, cooked been there, Tom might not have become2 so successful. 6 dinner for me.) Y6 Information Text: Biography Example Text Annotated Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling Features

All text: Accurate 9 preposition spelling, First Signs of a Star phrases to punctuation and 9 3 add detail grammar taught Only one month after his tenth birthday , Tom became the and clarity in previous years youngest-ever17 winner of the under-18 platform competition11 (e.g. under the is demonstrated 9 10 floorboards, throughout in the National Junior Championships . Unfortunately , across the room, the text. despite the fact he had met2 the tough qualification standard etc.) 2 5 formal for the 2006 Commonwealth Games, Tom couldn’t be selected 10 adverbs and vocabulary and 9 3 adverbials to sentence structure for the England team at that time since he wasn’t old enough. add detail and that matches the 3 13 13 clarity (e.g. formality of However , later in 2005 at the British Championships, he bravely, often, the text did become the under-18 champion in 10m platform and 3m repeatedly, in the blink of an 3 a range of springboard. eye, etc.) linking words/ phrases, Continued Success 11 expanded including noun phrases to adverbials, to Progress, achievements and awards came thick and fast after add detail and join sentences 3 clarity (e. g. a and paragraphs that for Tom: he was junior 10m champion at the British state-of-the-art together (e.g. Championships9 in 2005, 2006 and 2007; BBC ‘Young Sports computer or a first, then, hideous, green 12 after, while, Personality of the Year’ award winner three times and by alien with a significantly, 3 pointy nose.) likewise, for the age of 14 , he was Britain’s youngest competitor at the instance etc.) as 2008 Beijing Olympics9. 6 There3, he reached the final with 12 inverted well as repetition commas 9 3 and ellipsis his dive partner , Blake Aldridge, as well as competing in the 18 3&9 11 13 commas for 4 passive verbs individual 10m event. At 16 , he was a double-gold winner clarity (e.g. The Spanish at the Commonwealth Games. team were beaten 14 apostrophes for by France or The possession sweets were eaten Family Tragedy by the children.) 10 14 15 15 Sadly , Tom’s biggest supporter – his father – was 15 brackets, 5 modal verbs diagnosed4 with a brain tumour when Tom was only 123. He dashes and commas for (e.g. can, 7 9 could, should, died in 2011. Tom was devastated by the loss and has credited parenthesis would, etc.) 2 his dad with making him the person that he is today. 16 semi-colons, 6 multi-clause dashes and sentences Poster Boy colons to 17 separate clauses 7 single clause In the lead-up to the London sentence for 2012 Olympic Games, Tom was one 17hyphens to effect - short avoid ambiguity and snappy of the British athletes promoting sentence 9 the Games around the country . 18Y5/Y6 statutory 8 relative clauses He won a bronze medal in the within sentences spelling words starting with individual 10m dive (which he who, which, 8 where, when, dedicated to his late father ) but whose and that. unfortunately10 finished 4th in the (e.g. My mum, who is a great synchronised event. chef, cooked dinner for me.) Y6 Information Text: Biography Example Text Annotated Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling Features

9 All text: Accurate 3&9 preposition spelling, After the success of the 2012 Games , Tom returned to phrases to punctuation and training and school,13 studying hard for his exams. He became add detail grammar taught and clarity in previous years a celebrity supporter of ChildLine, a children's helpline run by (e.g. under the is demonstrated 15 2 4 floorboards, throughout the NSPCC, and revealed that he had been bullied earlier in across the room, the text. his schooldays. Because of this,3&9 Tom’s parents moved him to etc.)

2 9 16 formal a new school ; he was much happier there. 10 adverbs and vocabulary and adverbials to sentence structure Competition success continued meanwhile2, and in 2016, Tom add detail and that matches the clarity (e.g. formality of was selected for the Rio Olympics. He was hugely10 disappointed bravely, often, the text 10 repeatedly, in not to win a medal in the individual event but that was partly the blink of an 3 a range of 8 eye, etc.) linking words/ forgotten when he and partner Daniel Goodfellow won bronze phrases, in the synchronised 10m dive11. 11 expanded including noun phrases to adverbials, to add detail and join sentences Dedicated Sportsman clarity (e. g. a and paragraphs Even at that point, aged only 22,15 Tom was already regarded4 state-of-the-art together (e.g. computer or a 12 4 first, then, as a ‘veteran’ athlete, and is seen as an inspiration for young hideous, green after, while, 10 18 alien with a significantly, sports fans across the United Kingdom . His determination pointy nose.) likewise, for and willingness to train incredibly10 hard make him an excellent instance etc.) as 12 12 inverted well as repetition role model. As Tom says, “ Oh, you have to want it more than commas and ellipsis 10 anything . It has to be the biggest thing in your life – otherwise 13 commas for 4 passive verbs why would5 you do it?”12 clarity (e.g. The Spanish team were beaten 14 apostrophes for by France or The possession sweets were eaten by the children.) 15 brackets, 5 modal verbs dashes and (e.g. can, commas for could, should, parenthesis would, etc.) 16 semi-colons, 6 multi-clause dashes and sentences colons to separate clauses 7 single clause sentence for 17hyphens to effect - short avoid ambiguity and snappy sentence 18Y5/Y6 8 relative clauses statutory within sentences spelling words starting with who, which, where, when, whose and that. (e.g. My mum, who is a great chef, cooked dinner for me.)