Feature Writing Invitational a Meet • 2015
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Feature Writing Invitational A Meet • 2015 Leaguetown High School, located in Texas, has an enrollment of 1,800 students in grades 9-12. Over winter break, junior Diego Santo’s house burned down. Di- ego, who is deaf, was sleeping at home with his dog Jester at the time of the fire. Both of his parents had gone to work. The fire alarm woke Jester who, in turn, started to lick Diego all over the face. By the time Diego got out of bed, the entire house was engulfed in flames. The fire was inches from his bed. Diego grabbed You are a reporter Jester, a golden retriever, and the two jumped out his bedroom window to safety. for the Leaguetown Diego’s family does have a fire alarm designed for people who are deaf. One Press, the stu- alarm emits a strobe light in the hallway and living room, and another one is dent newspaper of supposed to shake Diego’s bed. The strobe alarm did function properly, but the alarm for Diego’s bed malfunctioned. Leaguetown High The firefighters at the scene said a gas leak in the kitchen caused the fire. School. Because gas was fueling the fire, it took only minutes to spread across the house. After Mayor Jenni Takei heard about Jester’s heroic deed, she decided to honor From the given the three-year-old dog. Mayor Takei will award Jester the Silver Hero Medal at the city council meeting on Friday, Feb. 13. information, write a You are writing for the issue of the Press to be distributed Monday, Feb. 9. feature story as you would for the high ■ DIEGO SANTO, junior school newspaper. “The fire started on the second day of winter break. It was about 9 a.m. and both my parents had gone to work. I was taking advantage of being off and sleeping You may use state- late. When Jester first started licking my face, I pushed him off and rolled over. ments attributed to I didn’t want to get up. Then, he did something he rarely does. He jumped onto individuals as direct my bed and got right in my face. He wouldn’t stop licking me. It looked like he or indirect quotes. was barking, too, but I am not for sure. After a few seconds of the constant lick- ing, I realized that I smelled something burning. I sat up in my bed and saw the You may not change fire spreading into my bedroom. My window is right over my bed, so I pushed it the meaning of a open, shoved Jester out the window and quickly followed. statement. You have “I would have been toast without Jester. The firemen on the scene said smoke one hour. induces a deep sleep-like state, and that’s why so many people don’t wake up when their house is on fire. I was sleeping hard. I don’t think I would have woken up without Jester’s lickfest. Do not write your “I don’t know what happened with the alarm that is supposed to shake my name or the name of bed. My parents and I tried it when we bought it a few years ago, and it worked. your school on this Maybe the batteries needed to be replaced. The fire investigators are looking into it. “It’s cool that Mayor Takei is giving Jester a medal. He definitely deserves sheet or your entry. one. He’s always been a great dog — super loyal and loving. And now he’s my Put your number on super hero, too.” your paper. 2015 INVITATIONAL A FEAture • PAGE 2 ■ WILLIAM RUDISH, firefighter “Gas fires are some of the fastest spreading and burning fires we encounter. Unfortunately, those fires also have a higher mortality rate. Lucky for Diego, Jester made sure the two got out alive and unharmed. Both needed a little oxygen, but after that, they were fine. “It’s not unusual for a family dog to alert its owners about a fire, but usually it’s through barking. Jester was persistent, and we are grateful.” ■ JENNI TAKEI, mayor “This town has a tradition of honoring its heroes, even if the hero is a dog. Jester’s actions were both brave and smart, and he deserves a medal for his action. This may be the first time the city has ever awarded the Silver Hero Medal to a canine, but hopefully, it won’t be the last.” ■ ADDITIONAL INFORMATION The December fire completely destroyed the Santo’s house. The family is living in a rental house until their house is rebuilt. Diego’s parents also installed two new fire alarms in his bedroom and moved Jester’s bed permanently in his room. Diego has been deaf since birth. 2015 INVITATIONAL A FEATURE • KEY PAGE 1 DO NOT DISTRIBUTE TO STUDENTS BEFORE OR DURING CONTEST! INVITATIONAL A • 2015 FEATURE WRITING CONTEST TIPS AND SAMPLE STORY Contest Director: Give one copy to each judge to use during critique/judging. Also, staple one copy of the contest and one copy of the contest tips to each student’s returned entry. The purpose of the tips is to provide immediate feedback to students. However, it is not meant to replace written comments from the judge. 1. Figure out what the story is about and its theme or focus. This story is about a dog who saves his owner from a fire. 2. The lead of a feature story must grab the reader’s attention. It does not have to be a certain length or include the 5Ws and H. It should set a scene and get the reader into the story. Although you have freedom to describe the scene as you think it might have existed, try to stay as close to the copy as you can. Some judges will not want you to wander off the subject too much. On the second morning of winter break, junior Diego Santo was jostled awake when his golden retriever, Jester, started slobbering all over his face — not exactly the most pleasant way to wake up. But in this case, it was the safest. The house was on fire. By the time Diego, who is deaf, got out of bed, his entire home was engulfed in flames. The fire was mere inches from his bed. “My window is right over my bed, so I pushed it open, shoved Jester out the window and quickly followed,” Diego said. “I would have been toast without Jester.” 3. Once you get past the lead, make sure you include a nut graph. It tells the reader what the story is going to be about. Follow the nut graph with a direct quote, and then go into the transition/quote formula. nut graph Diego called Jester his “super hero” for saving his life, and Mayor Jenni Takei agrees. After hearing about Jester’s heroic deed, Mayor Takei decided to honor the golden retriever with a silver hero medal at the city council meeting this Friday. direct quote “This town has a tradition of honoring its heroes, even if the hero is a dog,” Takei said. “Jester’s actions were both brave and smart, and he deserves a medal for his action. This may be the first time the city has ever awarded the Silver Hero Medal to a canine, but hopefully, it won’t be the last.” 4. After you get past the nut graph, the rest of the story can tell itself through the use of transition/quote formula. Be sure you attribute after the quote or at least after the first sentence. An attribution should be: subject of attribution followed by the verb of attribution (“Diego said,” not “said Diego”). Avoid stacking quotes. Try to avoid putting two or more quotes together without placing some kind of transition between them. Also, make sure transitions provide information to help the action of the story and that the quote does not repeat informa- tion in the transition. transition/story-telling On the morning of the fire, both of Diego’s parents were at work, and Diego was hoping to sleep late to enjoy the start of winter break. When three-year-old Jester first starting licking 2015 INVITATIONAL A FEATURE • KEY PAGE 2 Diego, he pushed the dog off and rolled over. However, when Jester jumped on the bed again and got right back in Diego’s face, he knew something wasn’t right. “I don’t know what happened with the alarm that is supposed to shake my bed,” Diego said. direct quote “After about a minute of the constant licking, I realized that I smelled something burning,” Diego said. “I sat up in my bed and saw the fire spreading into my bedroom.” transition/story-telling Diego, who has been deaf since birth, could not hear fire alarms and, since he was sleep- ing, he also could not see the strobe light fire alarm in the hallway. Diego’s family does have an additional fire alarm designed for people who are deaf. direct quote “My parents and I tried it when we bought it a few years ago, and it worked. Maybe the bat- teries need to be replaced. The fire investigators are looking into it.” 5. Always use third person. Don’t say “our student” or “our own Diego.” Also, do not editorialize. For instance, you should not say “He is so amazing.” These statements are personal opinions and should not be made in a feature story. 6. Always use the verb “said” as the verb of attribution.