Sharpen your students’ writing proficiency in clearly defined steps Writing 7 Read an additional Writing Sample mini-biography sample writing On the cycle path Writing task Mini-biography Sarah Lee is a competitive cyclist from . She Step 1 won Hong Kong’s first cycling at the The school magazine is publishing a special sports issue. The editorAnalyse of the magazine 2012 Olympics. She was also the world champion for the has asked you to write a mini-biography of your favourite sports star. Write the mini- 500-metre time trial in 2013. In addition, Lee has won three gold medals at the . biography by following steps 1–3. This strong and talented cyclist first received attention in Deconstruct a piece of text to understand its structure 2010 when she broke the Asian record for the 500-metre event. Soon after this, in Melbourne, she broke that Step 1: Analyse record again. She received the Medal of Honour from the Hong Kong government in 2011 for her Purpose, audience and tone accomplishments. In 2009, Lee had an accident that almost ended her Think about the task and answer the PAT questions below. career before it began. While she was training, she crashed when trying to avoid hitting a dog with her bicycle. As a result, she broke her wrist. However, Lee Purpose recovered, and the next year she attended the Asian Games. Which one of the following describes the purpose of a mini-biography? Tick (✓) Lee faced some health challenges when she was growing up. She had anemia, which is a condition that the correct box. can make people feel tired. Despite this, she did very well in track and field events at her school. When she I talk about people’s I talk about my was in Form 3, her school recommended her to the Hong Kong Sports Institute. Soon after this, the Hong I talk about what I like opinions of my favourite favourite sports star’s Kong Cycling Association noticed her talent and helped about the sports star in sports star in a accomplishments in a train her further. a mini-biography. mini-biography. mini-biography. Lee grew up in Kowloon, where she lived in a small flat with her family. She says that her role model is Sir , who won seven Olympic medals for Great Britain. Lee is still at the beginning of her career, and she is sure A B ✓ C to win more medals for Hong Kong in the future.

Writing Audience SDL Text type features: Mini-biography Who are your readers? Where will they see the mini-biography? Read the mini-biography on pages 72 and 73 again.Understand Match each paragraph text withtype its features The people who are going to read my mini-biography are the students of my school. Sample content in the box below. Find information from the mini-biography to support your answer. The first one has been done for you. They will see the mini-biography in the school magazine. (any reasonable answer) A how the person became famous and other important accomplishments B additional information about the person’s childhood and education C the most important information about the person and what the person is Tone famous for What do you think the tone of a mini-biography should be? Should it be formal, D information about what the person did to become successful entertaining or informative? Why? Suggested answers I think the tone should be informative because I have to report facts in a Paragraph Content Supporting information mini-biography. (any reasonable answer) permanent mark, most-decorated female athlete, smashing 1 C

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Olympic debut, swept a total of 14 gold medals, broke the 2 A Identify the Purpose, world record 11 times A Audience and Tone worked closely with her coach, waking up at 4 a.m. every morning for training, swimming a total of 70,000 yards 3 D 89 every week and following a diet of nutritious foods, keeps a training journal to monitor her progress 15 Ledecky’s mother and elder brother encouraged her to enter 4 B the pool. She received several scholarships, decided to go to Stanford University 07_OE2e_1B.indd 89 11/1/2018 上午11:45 Step 2: Develop Writing skill: Using the inverted pyramid method

• We use the inverted pyramid method to organize information in an interesting and appealing format for the reader. • We put the most important and interesting information at the beginning to grab the reader’s attention and make them want to continue reading the text. • We usually use this method for writing news articles and biographies.

Most important information Arouse reader’s interest • Who? What? Where? When? Why? How? Important details Sustain reader’s interest • More facts and supporting information

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SDL Text type features: Mini-biography Read the mini-biography on pages 72 and 73 again. Match each paragraph with its Sample content in the box below. Find information from the mini-biography to support your answer. The first one has been done for you.

A how the person became famous and other important accomplishments B additional information about the person’s childhood and education C the most important information about the person and what the person is famous for D information about what the person did to become successful

Suggested answers Paragraph Content Supporting information permanent mark, most-decorated female athlete, smashing 1 C two world records, impressive feat Olympic debut, swept a total of 14 gold medals, broke the 2 A world record 11 times worked closely with her coach, waking up at 4 a.m. every morning for training, swimming a total of 70,000 yards 3 D Step 2 every week and following a diet of nutritious Developfoods, keeps a training journal to monitor her progress Ledecky’s mother and elder brother encouraged her to enter 4 B the pool. She received several scholarships, decided to go to Equip students withStanford theUniversity right skills and raiseWriting 7 their language awareness to develop writing sophistication StepLook at 2:the followingDevelop profile of Novak Djokovic, a tennis player. In pairs, discuss where the information should go using the inverted pyramid method. Writing skill: Using the inverted pyramid method Writing • We use the inverted pyramid method to organize information in an interesting and Brainstorming appealing format for the reader. Name: Novak Djokovic • We put the most important and interesting information at the beginning to grab Brainstorm ideas for your mini-biography using the following inverted pyramid diagram. the reader’s attentionBorn: and make22 them May 1987,want Belgrade, to continue Serbia reading the text. • We usually use this Height:method for writing1.88 m news articles and biographies. Languages: Serbian, Italian, German and English My favourite sports star: Spouse: Jelena DjokovicMost (2014–present)important information Arouse reader’s interest Children: Stefan• Who? Djokovic What? (2014), Where? Tara Djokovic When? (2017) Why? How? Coach: Andre Agassi Important details Sustain reader’s Childhood:interest He did not• go More to school facts because and supporting his country was at war. Instead, he focused on tennis andinformation played for hours every day. At age 14, he won Most important information a silver medal for his country in the Junior World Championships. Close with less General information and background What is this person most famous for? Grand Slam wins important or • Extra details Australian Open: 2008,supporting 2011, 2012, details 2013, 2015, 2016 90 Learn a relevant French Open: 2016 What are his/her Wimbledon: 2011, 2014, 2015 greatest accomplishments? writing sub-skill US Open: 2011, 2015

07_OE2e_1B.indd 90 11/1/2018 上午11:45 Language awareness SDL Important details Using transitions to connect events Make sure the What are his/her other noteworthy We use transitions to connect ideas in a piece of writing. We can use them to information you show when different events occurred. Some words we can use are: include in your accomplishments? mini-biography is after/afterwards during following/next later until correct and up to date. before earlier immediately meanwhile while Research and check the Did he/she overcome any obstacles? facts online.

Complete the following paragraph about Lee Wai-sze. Choose the most appropriate time transitions from above.

Lee Wai-sze is famous for winning Hong Kong’s first Olympic medal in cycling in 2012. But General information and background she had won medals for Hong Kong 1 before she became a sports star. At the , she broke the 500-metre time trial event record. 2 Later What was his/her childhood like? that year, she managed to improve her time in the same event at the 2010 Melbourne Track 3 Cycling World Cup. Her great success immediately gained favourable attention from What are his/her plans the media. The 4 following/next year, she received a Medal of Honour from the Hong for the future? Kong Government. 5 After winning her Olympic medal, Lee continued to train hard to win medals for Hong Kong in international competitions.

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07_OE2e_1B.indd 92 11/1/2018 上午11:45 Writing 7 Step 3: Write Appendices Feedback form on writing tasks Drafting Unit ______Page ______Text type: ______Write your mini-biography of your favourite sports star Tick the appropriate boxes and add comments in the ‘Comments’ box at the end. using your notes. Needs Satisfactory Well done Step 3 improvement WriteSDL Revising and editing Content Read your mini-biography and put a tick in the boxes The content is relevant. for each category. Make revisions to your mini- biography if necessary. Adequate information about the topic is provided. Draft, evaluate and edit writing The ideas are expressed clearly. PAT The ideas are interesting and creative.

1 I know the purpose of writing a mini-biography. Language using ready-made forms and tools A wide range of vocabulary and language 2 My mini-biography appeals to my intended audience. patterns is used.

3 I used a tone that is neutral and objective. There are no mistakes in grammar, spelling, capitalization and punctuation.

Organization Content Paragraphs are developed with supporting details.

4 I talked about my favourite sports star’s accomplishments. Coherent links within and between paragraphs are included. 5 I talked about the obstacles my favourite sports star faced. Appropriate introductory and concluding Self-evaluation 6 I talked about my favourite sports star’s childhood. paragraphs are included. Features form 7 I talked about what my favourite sports star is planning to do in the future. Appropriate text type features are included.

The level of formality is appropriate.

Organization Comments

8 I organized my mini-biography using the inverted pyramid method. Additional writing resources Language

9 I used transitions in my mini-biography to connect different events. A5 Oxford English (Second Edition) 1A 5 of 8 Writing support Unit 2 Name: ______( ) Class: ______Date: ______When you have finished revising and editing your mini-biography, swap it with a partner Peer-evaluation form appendices_1B.indd 5 11/1/2018 下午5:22 Useful vocabulary and expressions and give each other feedback. Use the form on page A5 to help you. Make improvements In addition to the words introduced on page 44 of your textbook, you can use the words below as necessary. to write your personal email.

School facilities Oxford English (Second Edition) 1A 7 of 8 badminton court principal’s office student lounge Writing support Unit 2 93 caretaker’s closet language centre study room Name: ______( ) Class: ______Date: ______changing room recording studio theatre 4 Writing Handbook football pitch sports centre Junior Secondary English ______Drafting School features and equipment Now draft your personal email. Use your notes and the writing plan below to help you. You can board game projector vending machine also use the words and expressionsJunior on Secondary page 5 to help English you. 07_OE2e_1B.indd 93 11/1/2018 上午11:45 e-book reader sewing machine Wi-Fi laptop shower From:

lift tablet To: Writing Handbook ______Subject: School clubs and activities Writing Handbook Athletics Gala Fashion Show Orchestra Friendly greeting Boy Scout/Girl Guide Fencing Club Orienteering Club How do you want to ………………………………………………………………………………….. Tips and tricks greet your friend? Junior Secondary English Cookery Club Gardening Club Red Cross ………………………………………………………………………………….. Design Club K-pop Club Robotics Club Body ………………………………………………………………………………….. Electronics Club Music Festival Talent Time Basic information 1 Try closing your eyes. Before you start, What basic information ______about your school do ………………………………………………………………………………….. picture the person, School subjects you want to share? place or thing you want tto describe. ………………………………………………………………………………….. Chinese Home Economics Physical Education ………………………………………………………………………………….. English ICT Science 2 Ask yourself questions. For example, What do I notice first about her/him/it? Geography Literature Social Studies ………………………………………………………………………………….. Writing Facilities What does she/he/it look like? Sound like? Health and Wellness Maths Visual Arts What facilities does your ………………………………………………………………………………….. ______new school have? Feel like? Smell like? What are the most ………………………………………………………………………………….. important details about her/him/it? ………………………………………………………………………………….. Useful language patterns 3 Note down words that come to your mind. ………………………………………………………………………………….. 4 Study the useful language patterns below. Write sentences using the language patterns. andbook When you start writing your description, introduce the ………………………………………………………………………………….. H School subjects topic quickly. You don’t want your reader to be confused What subjects do you ………………………………………………………………………………….. like most? Why? What about the topic. So, mention the name of the person, place or  Talking about school facilities: There is/There are + noun (facilities) + preposition of place + do you do in these ………………………………………………………………………………….. thing in your first sentencee. where + clause (function)/clause (facilities) + where + clause (function) classes? ………………………………………………………………………………….. 5 Include some unique details. What makes the e.g. There’s an assembly hall next to the general office, where all students can gather for ………………………………………………………………………………….. important meetings./We also have ‘chill out zones’ where students can do independent study person, place or thing interesting? What makes herr/him/it ………………………………………………………………………………….. or relax on the big cushions during break. School clubs special? What school clubs are ………………………………………………………………………………….. ………………………………………………………………………………………………………….. you interested in? Why?

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