Editing Parallel Structure

EDITING PARALLEL STRUCTURE

Parallel structure means using the same pattern of words to show that two or more ideas have the same level of importance. This can happen at the word, phrase, or clause level. The usual way to join parallel structures is with the use of coordinating conjunctions such as "and" or "or." Informational essays often advance a thesis statement that synthesizes two or more ideas. These thesis statements must be edited for parallel structure.

Parallel Words and Phrases – correct any problems with parallel structure.

1. Mary likes hiking, swimming, and to ride a bicycle.

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2. The production manager was asked to write his report quickly, accurately, and in a detailed manner.

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3. The teacher said that he was a poor student because he waited until the last minute to study for the exam, completed his lab problems in a careless manner, and his motivation was low.

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Parallel Clauses - correct any problems with parallel structure.

A parallel structure that begins with clauses must keep on with clauses. Changing to another pattern or changing the voice of the verb (from active to passive or vice versa) will break the parallelism.

1. The coach told the players that they should get a lot of sleep, that they should not eat too much, and to do some warm-up exercises before the game.

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2. The salesman expected that he would present his product at the meeting, that there would be time for him to show his slide presentation, and that questions would be asked by prospective buyers. ______

3. A news story should tell what happened, when it happened, and about the parties involved.

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4. As yet the inspector has no idea who could have committed so bizarre a crime or the motives of the criminal.

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5. The candidate was criticized for being colorless and that he was overly cautious.

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