Vocab Mat for Flashback Narrative – Trapped in a bottle

Pronoun Noun /Expanded noun phrase Adjective Determiner/ Article I me my mine fear terror panic panic-stricken we our delight joy curiosity fearful a he him his the shimmering, glass surface petrified an she her hers an abandoned, glass bottle dumbstruck the it its an inescapable prison intrigued

Conjunction Verb Adverb Personification Relative pronoun FANBOYS (for, and, entrap desperately my heart screamed, but no sound nor, but, or, yet, so) came from my mouth hammer urgently who whilst panic wrapped it’s arms around me whose terrorise forcefully as the glass walls laughed back with imprison agonisingly which every hit of my fists because embraced that the warm, golden sand embraced us since welcomed enticingly with each step where although tempted delightedly my toes giggled in delight when even though glinted curiously the gentle, lapping sea was calling out my name sauntered foolishly the waves welcomed me with open ventured arms

Personification:

Giving human qualities to an object, animal or even place. Can you use punctuation to create a dramatic effect of suspense? The sea winked enticingly.

Personification is useful because it can make written descriptions Ellipsis ... more vivid. This device can help your reader better relate and connect to the object being describe. How did I end up here...and how ______am I going to get out? Shifting Tenses Colon for reveal :

Past Present Future I was trapped here in this smiled smiles will smile inescapable prison: an abandoned, was smiling is smiling will be smiling buried glass bottle. had smiled has smiled will have smiled

Picture Stimulus

Possible settings:

WAGOLL: Flashback narrative

Trapped

“Aaaaargh!” My scream ricochets off the glass walls and only seems to pierce my ears, rather than gain the attention of those nearby. Bashing my fists against the curved surface, I desperately try to smash my way free. Fear grips my stomach. How did I end up here...and how am I going to get out?

***

The sun was smiling down on us all, as we meandered across the dunes, each step sinking us deep into the warm, golden sand. Summer had arrived and the gentle, lapping sea was calling out my name. “I’m off! Catch you later!” I called back to my parents, who were busy fussing over covering my baby sister from head to toe in suncream! “Er...,”my dad hesitated, “don’t go far now love. Just where we can see you.” Before he had finished speaking, I was already at the shoreline and my toes giggled in delight with each new wave washing over my feet.

That’s when I saw it. Glinting in the sunlight, it winked conspiratorially at me. The sound of families enjoying the delights of their day-out were now faint - I had strayed to the edge of the beach, where no one else had ventured. Reaching down and touching the shimmering glass surface, that peaked only partially out of the sand, I felt a spark, like an electric current dancing through my fingers. Strange. I tried again. This time an epic flash of light blinded me. The sand, sea and sun disappeared; just a blank white scene was left and I felt my body being agonisingly squeezed. The pressure was unbearable. Blinking myself out of this dazed haze, I focused on my surroundings, panic rising within me as each second passed. I was trapped here in this inescapable prison: an abandoned, buried glass bottle.

Need a helpful hint? Check out the planning points below:

Paragraph 1: Present tense - describing being trapped in the bottle.

• Calling out, trying to get people’s attention. • What do you unsuccessfully do to try and get out? (Challenge: could keep where you are trapped secret for now and reveal at the end of the piece.) • Describe emotions felt.

Paragraph 2: Shift to past tense - arriving at the beach and exploring.

• Describe the scene when you first arrive at the beach. • What do you say to who you are with (for example: parents or friends) and what do they reply? • Describe exploring alone and moving further away from the crowds.

Paragraph 3: Discovering the bottle

• Describe spotting something buried. • Explain your emotion when you saw it (for example: curious) • Describe what happened when you first touched it. • Explain the dramatic change when you touched it again. • Where did you realise you were when you woke?

Reading Challenge!

Read through the WAGOLL for our flashback narrative

What does the word ‘meandered’ in the second paragraph tell us about the way the family were walking?

Does the second paragraph portray a positive or negative emotion? How would you explain your answer using evidence from the text?

How does the author create the feeling of suspense across the text? Explain using evidence from the text.