Ann.Rep.Fac.Educ. , IwateUniv ‥ Vo l.38(1978) W.H.AUDEN'SREVISINGPROCESS(Ⅴ): NONES (1952) AND THESHIELDOFACHILLES(1955) Y. S. YAMADA* INTRODUCTORYNOTES ▲◆ ● ThepresentarticleliststhevariantreadingsbetweenthepoemsorlglnallyIncludedin Nones (1952)and TheShieldofAchilles (1955)respectivelyandtheversionspreced ■ lngandsucceedingthem. i ThefirstlineglVenattheheadofeachlistisfromthetextofthefirsteditions. Inthesquarebrackets ,periodicalsorpamphletsthatcouldnotbeexaminedareasterisked. ■ ThetitleofaversionofapoemisnotglVen.ifidenticalwiththatofthepreceding version.Theabbreviationsusedareasfollows･: N -Nones (Faber , 1952) SA-TheShieldofAchilles (Faber , 1955) SP58- W･H･Auden/A Selection (PenguinBooks , 1958) SP 59-SelectedPoetryofW･H･Auden (ModernLibrar y, 1959) CSP 66-CollectedShorterPoems 1927-1957(Faber , 1966) SP 68-SelectedPoems (Faber , 1968;secondimpression , 1972) CSP 69-CollectedShorterPoems 1927-1957(Faber , 1969:firstpaperback impression) CP76 -CollectedPoems (Faber/RandomHouse , 1976) wherethechangeisaminorone , likethatinpunctuationorspelling , awholelin e isquotedfromeachvolume , andthevariantsarelistedinroundbracketsafterorunderJ theline.Anasteriskisattachedtoalineinvolvinganyverbalchange.Severalminor alterationsoccurbetweentlleSP58andSP59versionstho喝h thetwoselectionsare quiteidenticalincontents･Whenvariationsarefoundbetweentllem , theyarelisted･ ● Whennot , onlythe58readingsareg lVeninthelists･ ～ l ●■ 'Prime'and'Nones' , Orlglnallypublishedasseparatepoemsin Nones ,areexamined withintheSApoemsbecausetheybecomeinthelattervolumepartofthesequencetitled `HoraeCanonicae'･AudenwritesinhisNotetoSAthat`Theywereplannedtobepartof asequencewhichisnowcompl ste , anditisintheirpropercontextthatIwouldprefer themtoberead'. IwoadliketoexpressmythankstoProf･EdwardMendelson , LiteraryExecutorof the E stateofW.H.Auden , forhisreadypermi ssiontoquotefreelyfromAuden'swork *FacultyofEducation , IwateUniversity 34 Y.S. YA… A I(34) andforhisconstanthelpandencouragement･ IalsothankProf.ShozoTokunagawho ● mostkindlyprpvidedmewiththezeroxcopleSOfthethree Encounter poemswhichIhad beenunabletosee:'TheWillowWrenandtheStare' , 'Streams'and'Vespers'. 30June1978 Y.S.Y. ATONES We , too , hadknowngoldenhours 〔N , `ToReinholdandUrsulaNiebuhr'(dedicatorypoem;illitalics); CSP66 , `WeToo HadKnownGoldenHours';CP76〕 4 Bythelightofafullmoon52-76･(moon , 66 , 76･) 9*Hadlefttlleintrusiveglory52:/Hadfelttlleintrusiveglory66 , 76. 10W山chtearsreserveapart52-76.(apart , 66 , 76.) 17*All示ordslikepeaceand･love , 52176.I(PeaceandLove , 66,.76.) 20Toahorridmechanicalscreech:52-76 , (sc r eech.66 , 76.) Simultaneously , assoundlessly , (Seep.53) Ifitformtheonelandscapethatweltheinconstantones 〔Horizon , July1948 , `InPraiseofLimestone!*;N;･SP58;esp66;S,P68;C P L76〕 1 52-76.(thatwe , theinconsbntones , 66-76･) 4 andbeneath52 , 58:and , beneath , 66-76. ◆ ● 5喪hearthesesprlngS52 , 58:hearthesprlngS66-76･ ､ 6 Thatspurtouteverywherewithachuckle52-76･(chuckle , 66-76.) 12-13 *Forherson , forthenudeyoungmalewholounges Againstarockdisplayinghisdildo , neverdoubting 52: Forherson , theflirtatiousmalewholounges Againstarockinthesunlight , neverdoubting 58-76. 14Thatforallhisfaultsheisloved , whoseworksarebut52-76･(loved;58-76.) 22123*sometimes/ A rminarm , 52 , 58:attimes/Arminarm , 66-76. 42Foreffectsthatbringdownthehousecouldhappentoall52-76･(house ,.66-76,) 51Slippedawaysighing･)'Come･('purredtheclaysandgravels･52-76･(gravels , 76.) 55-56*(IntendantCaesarsroseand/Left , slammingthedoor.)-52-76. ((IntendentCaesars58:) 58'Iamthesolitudetllatasksandpromisesnothing;52-76.(nothing , 68:) 60/61(stanzabreak)52 , 58:(nostanzabreak)66:(stanzabreak)68 , 76. 64-65*Abackward/Anddelapidatedprovince , connected152-76.(dilapidated66-76.) 73*Bythesesolidstatues52 , 58:Bythesemarblestatues66-76. 85Todeathasafact , nodoubtweareright:Butif52-76.(right;but58:) (35) W.H.AUDEN'SREVISINGPROCESS (Ⅴ) 35 92*Either , butwhenIt ry toimagineafaultlesslove52-76.(t ry toimage68:) Sometimesweseeastonishinglyclearly lThirdHour , 1951*;N , 'OneCircumlocution';SP58;CSP66;CP76] ■ 2*Theout-there-whenwearealreadyln;52: Theout-therewhenwearealreadyln;58: ■ Theout･there-nowwearealreadyln;66 , 76. 140flight-bonedchildrenundergreatgreenoaks;52-76.(oaks:66 , 76.) Asilistenedfromabeach-chairintheshade 〔N , `TheirLonelyBetters';SP58;CSP66;CP76〕 9*Nooneofthe血wascapableoflying , 52;66: Notoneofthemwascapableoflying , 58;76. 15We , too , makenoiseswhenwelaughorweep , 52176･(weep:66 , 76.) Onandonandon lAtlantic , November1947 , 'Serenade'; PhoenixAQuarterly , 1948*;N , 'Serenade'; CSP66 , `TwelveSongs , Ⅹ';CP76 , `TenSongs , Ⅹ'〕 8*Salutethethreateningnight･47:/Salutetheincumbentnight･52-76. 12Andexclaimsitsmatteroflfact;47:/Andexclaimsitsmatter-of-fact;52-76. 13*Thecarefulchildwithcharm47:/Thechildwithcarefulcharm 52-76. 17Al l, al l, haverightstodeclare , 47-76.(jul , allhave47'.) 19Tobesimplypubliclythere47:/Tobe , simply , publicly , there52-76. 21-22*Somyembodiedlove,/Thatlikemostfeelingis47･. Somyembodiedlove/Which , likemostfeeling , is52-76. 24*Asksneighborhoodfromyou･47:/Asksneighbourhoodofy'ou.52176･ Deftly , admiral , castyourfly lHorizon , November1948 , 'Song'; Voices , Spring1949*; NewYorkHeraldTribune , 24April1949*;N , `Song';SP58;CSP66 , `FiveSわngs , ノⅠ';CP76〕 llThegreatwinesoftheChateaux･48L176･(chateaux48:Chateaux58:) I 13Donotttl rn, donotlift , yo u r■eyes ･ 48-58: Donotturn , donotliftyoureyes66 , 76. 15*Onthebridgeoutsideyourmemories , 48: Onthebridgebetweenyourproperties , 52-76･ 17-18*Initsgloryanditslpower/Thisistheirho ur･ 48: Initsglor y, initspower,/Thisistheirhour･52-76･ Inal一upperroomatmidnight 〔N , `TheLoveFeast';GP66;CP76〕 36 Y.S.YAW A (36) 5*LouistellillgAnne52:LouistellingAnne66 , 76. 21122*WhoisJennylyhgto/Bylong-distancetelephone?52: WhoisJennylyingto/Inhercal l, Collect , toRome?66 , 76･ LetOutwheretwofearsintersect , apoilltSelected 〔N , `AirPort';CSP66 , `InTrallSit';CP76〕 10alldchildrel1011eCannottrust52:andchildrenonecalュnOttrust , 66 , 76. 33-34 *Butherewearenowhere , unrelatedtodayorourmothe r/LEarth52: Butherewearenowhere , unrelated也 dayortoMother/Eartl166 , 76･ 37*Asobjectforspeculation , aggressivecreatures52: Asobjectsforspeculation , aggressivecreatures66 , 76. 46-47*amaculatecityisspared/Throughtheprayersofilliterate･saints52: maculatecitiesarespared/Thro / ugh theprayersofilliteratesaints , 66 , 76･ Thereisatimetoadmithowmuchthesworddecides , 〔BoitegheOscure , 2(1948)*; Natio n ,22April1950 , `Ischia(forBrianHoward) I; N; CSP66;CP76 .] (Capitalizationsattheheadofthelineshavebeenchangedtosmallletters , exceptwhere selltenCeSbegin , from66･) ▲ G*Who , turnlngbackfromthecrusaders'harbour , broke 50176. (harbor , 5(): who , 66 , 76･) ′ 9*Tosee.allpelmilesscreaturesashissiblings･But 50: ToseeallpennilesscreaturesFashissiblings:Then52: toseeallpennilesscreaturesasoursiblings･Then66 ,･ 76. 17-18*Iampresentlymoved/Bysun-drenchedParthenopeai , 50-76. (by66 , 76･*Parthenopeia , 50; Parthenopea , 66 , 76･) 21*Fromgrossproductivecities･Howwellyoucorrect 50: Fromsoiledproductivecities･Howwellyoucorrect52-76ニ(from66 , 76･)･ 24*Underyour/uniformlight. 5(): Underneathyouruniformlight･52-76･(underneath66 , 76･) 31Whichbetrayhersecretfever 50-76･ (which66 , 76.fever , 66 , 76.) 42A southernpoint , sheer-sidedCapriwhobyherself 50-76･ (Capri , 50:) 49*Fromthearagoniangrapedistil , youramberwine , 50-76. (from66 , 76.distil l, 50:) 50Yourcoffee-colouredhoney , webelievethatour ･50176. (your66 , 76･coffee･colored 50.') 580futterprotestatwhatisthecaseorhis 50-76･ (of66 , 76.case , 50:) 61-62*FarfromtallRestituta'salltoowatchfuleye , Whosepatronage , theysay , isannuallyboughtwithblood. 50: FarfromtallRestituta'sall･too-watchfuleye , Whoseannualpatronage , theysay , isboughtwithblood.52-76. (37) W.H. AUDEN'SREVISINGPROCESS(Ⅴ) 37､ (61far66 . 76･)(62whose66 , 76･) 63 164That , blessedandformidable/Lady , wehopeisnottrue; 50-76･ 66*Thatthesedaysofexoticsplendourmaystandout 50 -76. (splendor 50:) Whatthereisasasurroundtoourfigures 〔Commentary , May1949 , `Pleasurelsland'*;.N;SP58;CSP66;CP76〕 10*Uponshadowlesssand･52 , 58:/Uponunshadowedsand･66 , 76･ 77-78AskasonemightthetimeoratrifleJExtrahermoneyandhislife･52 , 58: Ask , asonemightthetimeoratrifle/Extra , hermoneyandherlife･66 , 76･ ■ HavlngfinishedtheBlue-plateSpecial 〔NewYorke J･, 12February1949 , `InSchraff t'S'*;N;CSP66;CP76〕 (Nochangebetweenthelastthreeversions･) ● TheplerSarepummelledbythewaves; 〔Horizon , Apri l 1947 , `TheFallofRome(toC .I. C .) '*; Nation , 14June1947*;N; SP58;CSP･66',SP68; IandThou , January-February1969*',CP76j 13 *C erebrotonicCatomay52176.(Catos58.I) , TheEmperor'sfavouriteconcubine lN , 'MusicHo'-,CSP66(p･271) , 'FiveSongs , Ilレ,CP76(p･438)] (1*favourite52 , 66:favorite76.) Theirlearnedkingsbentdowntochatwithfrogs; 〔Mademoiselle , Oct dber1947 , `Nurser yLR hyme'*; N; CSP66;CP76〕 (Nochangebetweenthelastthreeversions.) Inthebadolddaysitwasnotsobad: lHorizon , November1948 , 'TheManagers';N;SP58;CSP66;CP76] 6*Objects , books , girls , horses4876･(Objets , 48:) 14*ForthesortofPowers48:/ForthespeciesofPowers52-76･ 200nadolphin , naked , 48-76.(nakedL48:) 28-29*Reststodaywithquiet/Men , 48:Reststodaywith'suchquiet/Men , 52-76. 38-39Fromproblemsndsmiling/Candismiss;thetypewritersneverstop48-76. (dismiss･The66 , 76･) 43-44*Fromwoodsunalteredby わur warsandvows Driftthescentofflowers 48: Fromwoodsunalteredbyourwarsandourvows Theredriftthescentsofflowers 52-76. 4gCanbetrainedtoobserve;farintothenight 48-76･(observe･Far66 , 76.) Y.S. YA h4ADA (38) Theirwindowsburnbrightly , Andbehind , theirbacksbentoversomereport Onevelyquarter