Explain why Germans were so angry about the Treaty of Versailles [8] Advice AO1: Demonstrate knowledge and AO2: Explain why Germans were angry understanding of the period about the Treaty An [8] mark question on the Germany paper wants you to explain the cause of Band 1 (1 Band 2 (2 Band 3 (3 Band 1 (1 Band 2 (2-3 Band 3 (4-5 something – in this case, why ordinary German people were angry at the Treaty mark) marks) marks) mark) marks) marks) of Versailles. To answer this question, you need to know: I include I include I include I give very I partially I give a very very few some of the very little explain why detailed What Germany was like before WW1 details of Treaty and detailed explanation Germans and logical Details of the terms of the Treaty of Versailles the Treaty why information of why were angry explanation What kind of peace treaty Germany expected to get and why Germans about the Germans about the of why Germans were angry Treaty and were angry Treaty Germans Why the Treaty of Versailles was so bad for Germany were angry about it why about the were angry You aim to write at least 2 P.E.E.L. paragraphs (Point, Evidence, Explanation, Link). about it Germans Treaty about the were angry Treaty [8] marks means you should spend about 8 minutes on this question. about it S/A or P/A Teacher Mark and Comment: Use this space to plan your answer: /8 /8 Suggested Improvements: Include some / more details of the terms of the Treaty or how it affected German people Add / give more explanation of why Germans were angry about the Treaty Improve quality of explanation by using P.E.E.L. paragraphs Correct SPAG How can I do better next time? Date: Moderated: ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ How far did Gustav Stresemann solve Germany’s problems, 1923-1929? [6] Advice A01: Demonstrate knowledge A02: Analyse how much change there was and and understanding of the period reach a judgement An [6] mark question on the Germany paper wants you to explain how far Band 1 (1 Band 2 (2 Band 1 (1 Band 2 (2 Band 3 (3 something changed. This probably means that you will say some things changed a mark) marks) mark) marks) marks) lot and some things changed a little. You might want to consider: I demonstrate I demonstrate I have given a I have given I have made a some detailed limited analysis some analysis of detailed Germany’s financial situation knowledge and knowledge and of the change the changes analysis of the Germany’s status among the world’s powerful countries understanding understanding that happened that happened changes that of Stresemann’s of Stresemann’s under under happened Germany’s reparations payments achievements achievements Stresemann Stresemann and under The occupation of the Ruhr by France and Belgium made a Stresemann and judgement made a well- You should aim to write at least 2 P.E.E.L. paragraphs (Point, Evidence, about how far supported Explanation, Link). [6] marks means you should spend about 6 minutes on this he solved judgement Germany’s about how far question. problems he solved Germany’s problems S/A or P/A Teacher Mark and Comment: Use this space to plan your answer: /6 /6 Suggested Improvements: Include / some more details on Stresemann’s solutions More analysis of how far Germany had improved Include / improve final judgement Correct SPAG Student Response: Date: Moderated: ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ How far did the lives of women change in Germany, 1933-1939? [6] Advice A01: Demonstrate knowledge A02: Analyse how much change there was and and understanding of the period reach a judgement An [6] mark question on the Germany paper wants you to explain how far Band 1 (1 Band 2 (2 Band 1 (1 Band 2 (2 Band 3 (3 something changed. This probably means that you will say some things changed a mark) marks) mark) marks) marks) lot and some things changed a little. You might want to consider: I demonstrate I demonstrate I have given a I have given I have made a some detailed limited analysis some analysis of detailed Incentives to have children knowledge and knowledge and of the change the changes analysis of the understanding understanding that happened that happened changes that Employment of change of and/or for women, for women happened for Fashion and dress and/or continuity in 1933-1939 1933-1939 and women 1933- Eugenics continuity in women’s lives made a 1939 and made women’s lives judgement a well- You should aim to write at least 2 P.E.E.L. paragraphs (Point, Evidence, about how far supported life changed judgement Explanation, Link). [6] marks means you should spend about 6 minutes on this about how far question. life changed S/A or P/A Teacher Mark and Comment: Use this space to plan your answer: /6 /6 Suggested Improvements: Include / some more details on changes for women More analysis of how far life changed for women Include / improve final judgement Correct SPAG Student Response: Date: Moderated: ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________