Mastery Writing 3 SpArk Workbook

Name: ______

A special thanks to Sarah Twyman, Ark Bolingbroke, for the adaption and formatting of this material.

This workbook is an optional supplement and should not replace the standard English Mastery resources. It is specifically designed to provide consistency of learning, should any students find their learning interrupted. Due to the nature of the format – some deviations have been made from the EM Lesson ppts. These have been made of necessity and for clarity.

Lesson 1

Do Now: Correct the errors in the following passage miranda looked at the ocean where a wild sea was raging and she watched as the

waves went wild and she said “ What a dramatic storm.

DEFINITION: The subject of a sentence is who or what is doing the main action.

Exercise 1 - Underline the subject in these sentences. Circle the main verb. Main verbs tell what the subject was doing. 1. Tim threw the paper in the bin.

2. The rain caused flooding in Shropshire.

3. In the city, many people lived in poverty.

4. After they ran away from Athens, Lysander and Hermia escaped into the forest.

5. Leaves, twigs and sticks littered the ground.

6. Although he loved the theatre, Sam was not confident enough to go to the

audition.

7. “I want to be a dinosaur!” yelled Diana.

8. After he came home from school, James completed his homework straight away because he didn’t want to get a detention from Mr Rowley the next day.

RULE: To be complete, a sentence must:

1. Contain a subject 2. Contain a verb 3. Express a complete idea

Sentence Complete sentence or Fragment?

1. Sikes, a violent, vicious and venomous criminal.

2. The island looked stunning.

3. Starting to shine through the clouds.

4. Gabriel really loved to play football.

5. Although the hurdles were really hard.

6. Jill carelessly tripped over the muddy stick.

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7. Anita won several awards at the school presentation evening.

8. I enjoyed fishing.

9. Fagin and Dodger stole all the jewels.

10. Robin hadn’t quite mastered badminton.

Exercise 3 - Rewrite these sentences so that when it happened is at the start.

1. The ground gets very soggy when it rains.

2. People applauded when Tyren had finished his cello performance.

3. Shelly clapped her hands as the monkeys performed their tricks.

Error Correction

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I cannot describe to you what it was like to be stood alone in the darkness. I was so lonely and cold. The silence was as deep as death.

The only sounds that I could hear was the ones I made myself. I tried to keep still. For as long as possible.

I l istened and l istened. I held my breath and l istened again. I had a strange feeling. That the whole wood was l istening with me. I could hear the trees the bushes the l ittle animals hiding in the bushes and the birds roosting in the trees. I could even hear the snuffling of a stray hedgehog. Although the moon l it up the clearing. I couldn’t see past the shadows.

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Lesson 1 Writing

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Man

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary

approached fascinated infatuated embrace immediately heartbroken nervous rumour Mastery Checks

Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have used capital letters I have written consistently in I have included when it correctly. the past simple tense. happened and punctuated it correctly. Crafting check: I have written a problem solved story with a clear opening, problem, solution and happy ending.

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Lesson 2 Do Now: Correct the errors in this student’s work. Thunder rolled and cracked across the hills. as rain lashed the rocky

mountainside. the two travellers staggered on they were tired cold and hungry

they felt more dead than alive. “There is hope one of them

gasped, “because I can see l ights in the castle

Exercise 1 - Underline the subject in these sentences.

1. Last December, a party of students set out to climb Mount Everest.

2. Ahmed Khan, a drama teacher, said that their performance was fantastic.

3. After they had filled the raisins with sleeping pills, Danny and his father fed them to

the pheasants.

4. It was a few days later than this that the pigs discovered a case of whisky in the

cellar.

5. It is a 3 pipe problem.

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6. I have done nothing but in care of thee.

7. Fortunately, the fall was not serious.

Exercise 2

1. Decide whether the following examples are independent clauses or fragments. 2. If they are independent clauses, name the subject and the verb. If they are fragments, explain why.

If it is an independent clause, Independent what is the subject/verb? Sentence Clause or If it is a fragment, explain why. Fragment?

1. The lonely boy stumbled into the dingy room.

2. The guard laughed loudly.

3. Despite his many flaws.

4. Billy thought about dancing.

5. Because her mother encouraged her to be ambitious.

6. Although she couldn’t explain it.

7. The characters display a variety of emotions.

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8. The geese, ducks and hens staged a month-long strike.

9. Jeremy dodged the ball.

10. Claudia’s cat stretched out on the rug laid before the fire.

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Exercise 3 - Circle the subordinate clauses in these sentences. Underline the independent clauses.

DEFINITION: An independent clause is a group of words that:

1. Contains a subject 2. Contains a verb 3. Expresses a complete idea

1. As Sherri blew out the candles on top of her birthday cake, her hair caught on fire.

2. Sara begins to sneeze whenever she opens the window to get a breath of fresh air.

3. When the doorbell rang, my dog barked loudly.

4. After the basement flooded, we spent all day cleaning up.

5. Even though my alarm had gone off twenty times, I hit the snooze button.

6. After we had had lunch, we went back to work.

7. The children need to take the bus no matter how much it costs.

8. I first saw her in Paris where I lived in the early nineties.

Error Correction

Although Orwell presents Boxer as a stupid animal, the reader is also sympathetic towards him. They want him to succeed even though they know that he is wrong to trust

Napoleon. Orwell shows that Boxer cannot learn the alphabet past “d” can’t remember anything and doesn’t l isten to Benjamin when he is being warned about the pigs. Whilst Boxer may be stupid. He does have some moments of clarity. This is demonstrated when he says “Then we have won back what we had before. He recognises that the war was pointless.

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Lesson 2 Writing

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Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending ;

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Lesson 3

Do Now:

Underline the subjects and circle the main verbs in the sentences below. Remember, tell the main verbs action that the subject was doing. A bowler hat, magnifying glass and old boot lay on the table. Sherlock’s face furrowed in contemplation. This case had attracted attention from across the world. A loud bang, followed by a noisy crash, interrupted Sherlock’s reverie. Suddenly, the table and all its contents flew into the air. Watson, who was late for his meeting with Holmes, dashed into the room. Exercise 1 - Complete the first column of the table in Exercise 1.

Subject Singular/Plural Convert the verb into past simple tense

He [teach] geography.

The girls [drink] lemonade.

They [build] a wall.

Twigs and leaves [lie] on the forest floor.

Holmes [ban] the boy from speaking.

Deborah’s pet [eat] algae. goldfish

[do] their homework every Friday Ashley and her friends night.

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Exercise 1 Part 2

Complete the third column with the past simple version of the verb.

Exercise 2

DEFINITION: Prepositional phrases are parts of sentences and add information to the independent clause. They do not make sense on their own.

Change the following fragments into independent clauses.

1. Because Linda had eaten all of the cake.

2. Even though Nick loved Drama.

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3. Whilst Emma ran home.

Change the following fragments into subordinate clauses in longer sentences. You can make up the rest of the sentence. 4. Sherlock Holmes, Doctor Watson, and Irene Adler.

5. In the battered old suitcase.

6. At 5 o’clock in the morning.

Exercise 3 - Punctuate these sentences correctly. 1. Whenever Daisy looked through the window she always saw things that she wanted to buy

2. Kaleigh twisted the dial on the machine before Makayla could reach it

3. As Holmes and Watson investigated the case more clues were revealed

4. Brenda said before I go to the shops I need to get some petrol

Error Correction

Until 1547, King Henry VIII reigned over England, I reland Scotland and Wales. Catherine of Aragon, his first wife and a Princess of Spain. The only child she had was a girl called

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Mary. King Henry was angry. He wanted a son. After he realised Queen Catherine was not able to have a son. He divorced her. He married a woman called Anne Boleyn, soon afterwards. She was incredibly pretty and funny. Anne Boleyn had a daughter called Elizabeth, but no sons. Lots of people thinks that Anne Boleyn was the most intelligent wife. King Henry executed her in 1536.

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Lesson 3 Writing

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary

threatened departed infatuated painful career desperate relieved romantic Mastery Checks

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Lesson 4 Do Now: The verbs in the box are in the present tense. Change them into the past simple tense and fill in the blank spaces in the passage.

teach lie do sleep have bring try is

Gwen a horse called Barry. Barry loved to do tricks. Every day after school, Gwen

Barry a new trick. The best trick was when he down and pretended to be asleep. When he did well, Gwen Barry a carrot. He always

to eat it quietly, but often he just gobbled it up. In the evening, Barry

in the stables. Barry and Gwen lots of things together. He a very happy horse!

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Exercise 2

1. After Tim paid for his lunch.

2. As he laid it beneath the red and yellow striped umbrella.

3. Even though he did well in his exams.

4. Rather than asking someone else.

5. In the middle of the long, cold night.

6. At the edge of the paper.

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Exercise 3 - Underline the independent clauses and circle the prepositional phrases.

1. Nicholas put his bottle down on the table.

2. At the restaurant, James waited to be served.

3. Jemima would not sit down in her chair.

4. Inside, the room was nice and cosy.

5. In the corner of the box, two mice lay sleeping.

Error Correction

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Henry VIII had a total of six wives. He divorced his first wife and beheaded his second wife. Henry’s third wife was called Jane Seymour. She died, soon after she gave birth to her son. She named the son

Edward.

After Jane’s death, Henry married a German princess called Anne of Cleves, in

Westminster Cathedral. There was celebrations all over

England. In Greenwich lots of celebrations and parties were held. Henry had originally thought that Anne was pretty, but after the wedding he decided that she was too ugly to be his wife. He sent her away to l ive in Kent. In the countryside. She learned to ride horses and hunt deer.

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Lesson 4 Writing

Alex

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary specialty dejected hope pastry skilled inseparable sublime romantic Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have written consistently in I have not used any I have included a temporal the past simple tense. fragments. clause at the start of a sentence and at the end of a sentence. Crafting check: I have written a problem solved love story in which the solution is prepared in the opening.

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Lesson 5

Do Now: Punctuate these sentences correctly.

1. After the men had gone home the building site was deserted

2. Amelia smiled as she opened her exercise book

3. Whenever the siren went off the school children evacuated the building

4. The insects flew away when they ran out of food

Exercise 1 - Fill in the gaps with the correct past simple tense verb.

choose bring come buy

break eat begin

We did it! Mum’s surprise birthday party a success. Everyone _ on time and people very thoughtful presents. People who not come sent beautiful cards. When she out, Mum to cry with happiness. We lots of work to make sure that she had a good time. We

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her a nice cake, her a lovely card and all the way to Yorkshire to find the perfect balloon animal maker. Even though Orhan the plate of sausage rolls, nothing spoil this day. We all lots of food and danced to music. At the end of the day, Mum us that she the proudest mother in the world!

Exercise 2 - Underline the independent clauses and circle the prepositional phrases.

1. Beryl waited in a queue at the Post Office.

2. In the city, life is much faster.

3. On a faraway island full of tropical birds and exotic animals, Sycorax reigned.

4. You will find the information on the left.

5. From the very first page of a book, one can imagine what great adventures await. 6. “I want the yellow one!” Jessica yelled down the corridor.

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Exercise 3 – Punctuate these sentences accurately. 1. I l ike to eat blackberries on summer mornings at lunch time and as I ’m

walking home.

2. Bertie does his homework on a Monday Tuesday Thursday and Friday.

3. In March April and May the daffodils are beautiful.

4. When i t’s raining thundering or snowing we have fewer visitors.

5. On the 18 th 19 th and 20 th of July a large funfair will arrive in Birmingham.

6. As Pippa played basketball Chad opened his bag took out a book and

started to read.

Error Correction

After he had sent Anne of Cleves to Kent, King Henry refused to speak to anybody. He was furious that she had not given him a son. He was now an old man. Throughout the winter autumn and spring Henry moped.

Just as everyone was about to give up hope Henry fell in love with a woman called

Catherine Howard. They spent all of their time together.

During breakfast lunch and dinner Henry sat next to her and gave her fine food and good wine. He married her in 1540.

Because she was very young and pretty. Catherine got lots of attention from other men. King Henry was so jealous that h e had her executed, after less than two years of marriage.

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Lesson 5 Writing

Joy

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

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Vocabulary

threatened terrified infatuated determined sacrificed inseparable intrigued romantic Mastery Checks

Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have written consistently in I have included a I have included a the past simple tense. prepositional phrase and prepositional phrase with a punctuated it correctly. list in it and punctuated it correctly. Crafting check: I have written a problem solved love story in which the happy ending and the solution are prepared in the opening.

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Lesson 6 Do Now: Add in the correct past simple tense verb below.

bring buy do lay sew

1. Jen a new hat.

2. Zara and Mia their homework.

3. The Prime Minister a wreath at the Cenotaph.

4. Gavin a button onto his shirt.

5. Shu-Wei some crisps to the party.

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Exercise 1 - Punctuate these sentences correctly.

1. As Kevin fell off his horse rolled down the hill and landed in a puddle he saw his l i fe flash before his eyes. 2. The l ibrary i s open on Friday Saturday and Sunday. 3. Every Saturday evening they watched fi lms whilst they ate popcorn chocolate and crisps. 4. Whilst the pigs made evil plans drank beer in the farmhouse and wore Mr Jones’s clothes Boxer was completely unaware of what was going on. 5. As the storm was wrecking the ship Ariel appeared as fir e a demon and even the sea god Neptune. 6. As he thought about the journey Jason gathered up his keys wallet phone and watch. 7. Ever since Bernie Joanna and Archie arrived i t’s been chaos! 8. Whenever Felicia played the harp read her book or painted a picture her mother exclaimed “Look how talented my daughter is!”

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Exercise 2 - Punctuate the sentences correctly.

1. George Orwell wrote books in a café at his house and on the streets of Paris. 2. He l ived in I ndia Engl and Fr ance and Spain. 3. In the barn in the field and at the water trough all the animals were working hard. 4. The workhouse Animal Farm and Caliban’s island are all places where people worked for l ittle or no pay. 5. Puck put the love potion on Lysander Demetrius and Titania. 6. Dickens Orwell and Conan Doyle wrote stories that were published in England.

Exercise 3 - Decide whether the examples use prepositional phrases, temporal clauses or are fragments?

DEFINITION: Temporal clauses tell us when the event in the independent clause happened. Prepositional phrases tell us where it happened.

If correct, temporal Correct/ Sentence clause/prepositional Fragment? phrase?

1. I call my aunt at 3 o’clock, 5 o’clock and 7 o’clock.

2. Unless this behaviour stops soon.

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3. I keep pet spiders in my house, on top of my locker and in my garden

4. Although the bottle was smooth and green.

5. Because of the terrible rain, violent storms and loud thunder.

6. It landed in the bin.

7. The teenagers raced to the back of the bus.

Error Correction

When he was younger Henry was a very athletic young man. He enjoyed sport and often played dangerous games. When he went jousting hunting and horse riding he was energetic and happy. The best times of his l ife were spent in the forest.

Back at the palace he had an accident when he was jousting in a competition.

He wounded his leg and fell off his horse. Many people thought he was going to die, but he survived.

During February March and April he was forced to stay in bed. He applied a mixture of mashed worms the bone marrow of a pig and the hair from a black cat to the wound every day. He was very bad tempered, whilst he was ill .

Eventually Henry got sl ightly better. His bruises and broken bones healed.

On his leg the wound still festered. Years later, he had still not recovered.

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Lesson 6 Writing

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

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Vocabulary

desert golden hieroglyphics artefact priceless statue rubble perilous Mastery Checks

Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any I have included a I have included a temporal fragments. prepositional phrase with a clause with a list in it and list in it and punctuated it punctuated it correctly. correctly. Crafting check: I have written a problem solved action story with an opening, a problem, a solution and a happy ending.

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Lesson 7

Do Now: Add temporal clauses to the independent clauses given below. Make sure to punctuate them correctly.

1. Damien played rugby.

2. Simone won the gymnastics competition.

3. Matthew dove into the sparkling blue pool.

Exercise 1- Punctuate these sentences correctly.

1. As I ate my sandwich with ham lettuce tomatoes and pickles I

noticed that the chef had left out the chicken.

2. Nearby three llamas four goats and an emu waited to be fed.

3. Whenever Dillan Bernard or Tristan stumbled a buzzer would sound.

4. Within the grounds gardens or car par, it is forbidden to exercise dogs.

5. I f you leave the house car or garage, remember to lock the doors.

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Exercise 2 – Add in the punctuation to the sentences below. 1. Although James loved basketball he represented his school in badminton.

2. You may go outside if you have finished your work.

3. Unless Dad made the phone call Jane would not be allowed on the school trip.

4. Even though Andrea loved playing Angry Birds she stopped playing to do her homework.

5. Max started to improve his performance because Sandeep had joined the team.

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Exercise 3 - Below are subordinate clauses. Make up your own independent clause to complete the sentence. These can be either before or after the subordinate clause

1 Rather than eating the entire cheesecake

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even though the phone was ringing

3 Despite eating all the melon

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because you can swim

5 Whether Jodie buys the dress or not

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Error Correction

King Henry’s final wife was called Catherine Parr. She was about the same age as him. She was very kind and spent a lot of time looking after the sick old king.

Catherine Parr was incredibly intelligent. She spoke French Latin and I talian. Because she was interested in religion. She wrote a book about how to be a good Christian. I t was called ‘Lamentations of a

Sinner’.

When King Henry was away fighting battles she ruled in his place.

When someone ruled a country for a monarch, they was called a regent. Queen

Catherine was a regent for nearly a year. I f Henry had been killed she would have ruled until his children were old enough to do so. Until the king returned she was in complete control of the country.

King Henry died in 1547. In order to let the new King Edward rule from London without her. Catherine decided to l ive in the countryside.

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Lesson 7 Writin g

Alex

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary

undergrowth backpack endangered predator machete compass terror basecamp Mastery Checks

Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any I have included a temporal I have included a fragments. clause with a list in it and subordinate clause that is punctuated it correctly. not a temporal clause or prepositional phrase. Crafting check: I have written a problem solved action story with an opening, a problem, a solution and a happy ending.

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Lesson 8

Do Now: Punctuate these sentences correctly. 1. Because the sweets were in plain sight Sharmin was tempted to eat them.

2. Provided that he got good results Brendon’s mother would take him out for a treat.

3. Rather than working hard for his mother’s treat Brendon just wanted to do his best.

Exercise 1 - Punctuate these sentences correctly.

1. Provided that you have finished your homework your chores and the washing up you may watch TV.

2. When he raised funds for the library the canteen and the PE department the school gave him a badge.

3. The garden would have too many weeds pests and insects if it ran wild.

4. You will have to go home until you sign the register a permission form and the contract.

5. Vegetables fruit and grains are good for you when you eat lots of them.

6. In the kitchen Macy prepared the carrots peas broccoli and potatoes the day before.

7. Cigarettes are bad for you because they cause cancer in your lungs blood and liver.

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Exercise 2 - Circle the subordinate clauses and underline the independent clauses.

1) In the garage, Ben kept all of his old toys for years.

2) After a little while, Becca swept out the leaves from under the bench.

3) In town, there are lots of places to eat after work.

4) At seven o’clock, Pedro liked to eat biscuits on his sofa.

5) In the folder, the pages stayed perfect for a long time.

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Exercise 3 - Match each sentence on the left to one of the three mistakes on the right, then correct the error. There is one correct sentence. Do not match this one to an error. The first one has been done for you.

1. Before he went to sleep Rob took off his glasses. There is no comma after the 2. I eat porridge and toast, every temporal clause. morning.

3. Brenda, Laura, and Harry couldn’t decide what to eat. There is an extra comma in the 4. Whenever Wilma went upstairs list. she skipped the third step.

5. Missy did not like football, basketball or rugby.

6. You can play football, in the There is an extra comma after the playground. independent clause.

7. My cupcake tasted of strawberry, coconut, and vanilla.

Error Correction

Charlotte is a scullery maid in Victorian London. Because she wasn’t very well educated, she has made some errors when she wrote her diary.

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Just before dawn this morning. I woke up cold hungry and shivering . I dressed hurriedly in the cold and dark room. I had to light all the fires in the kitchen before the other servants came down.

Once I was downstairs I lit the kitchen fire so that the other servants could wash in warm water. One by one, they stumbled down. Cook came down last. She is usually bad tempered at this time in the morning. She scolded us fiercely for giggling, when Sarah dropped a pan. Although it was funny it was not worth the clip around the ear that I got for it afterwards! We thought we done well to be able to carry the pan. It was heavy!

Lesson 8 Writing

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Karl

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

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Lesson 9 Do Now: Punctuate these sentences correctly. 1. All over town across fields and through the country bells rang out in celebration on Christmas day.

2. Tim loved reading books magazines and blogs as he went on journeys.

3. In cars trains and boats the small bible was placed in drawers for the weary traveller to read in his free time.

4. On the quiet island Andrew Cristina Marky and Paulo lived a quiet life until the tempest wrecked their peaceful ways.

Exercise 1

1. They did their exams, in the summer. There is no comma after the temporal clause. 2. Danielle messaged Crystal, Darren, and Samiha on the way to school.

3. His mum did the shopping, every Wednesday evening. There is an extra comma in the list. 4. In the morning Jessica ate cornflakes for breakfast.

5. The deal included a sandwich, crisps, and a drink. There is an extra 6. Toddlers, teenagers and adults are all comma after the grumpy, in the morning. independent clause.

1) As they ate breakfast, Lana realised they were late.

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Exercise 2 - This student has made several errors in their work. Some sentences are correct. Fix the errors.

1. Even though my teacher asked me to write about Pancake Day I’ve never

eaten a pancake I don’t know what one is and I’m allergic to eggs.

2. I know that they involve flour eggs and milk.

3. A few days ago I asked if we were going to have them at home for breakfa st

lunch or pudding.

4. My sister said if you are prepared to buy the ingredients find an alternative to

eggs and cook them yourself then you can have them .

Exercise 3

Look at the independent clauses below.

Add in two more subordinate clauses to each independent clause.

One should go before and one should go after the independent clause.

One subordinate clause must include a list.

1. Paolo hated vegetables

2. you must not go into the dining hall

3. we love watching television

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Error Correction

Charlotte is a scullery maid in Victorian London.

Because she wasn’t very well educated, she made some errors when she wrote her diary.

After breakfast we went to church. Even though it rained, we walked over fields

through the streets and up the hill to get to the chapel. It took an hour! I heard John

and Grace laughing. Because Cook does not sing in tune she was making fun of her

behind her back. I turned away because I don’t want to get into any more trouble.

Later on that morning, I fetched water from the pump. Morning noon and night I

had to go down to the well in the yard and fill up a wooden bucket with water. If

people needed water, I brung it to them.

We had lunch, when we got back. Once I finished washing the pans scrubbing the

floor and fetching the water I sat down to sew my new uniform in the kitchen. Although

I like sitting down. It was really boring. While Sarah and I done our sewing, we could

smell a treacle tart being baked.

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Lesson 9 Writing

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Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary deafening emergency duty reputation screamed rescue terror perilous Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any I have included two I have included at least one fragments. subordinate clauses with lists sentence with two in them. subordinate clauses in it. Crafting check: I have written a problem solved action story in which the solution is prepared in the opening and all the information in the opening is relevant later in the story.

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Lesson 10 Do Now: Add in a subordinate clause before and after the independent clause. 1

Marvin tripped over the step. 2

the robot learned how to play chess. 3

the child played with the balloon animal.

Exercise 1

Match the sentence on the left to the mistake on the right, then correct the error. There is one correct sentence. Do not match this one to an error. The first one has been done for you.

1. In the Percy Jackson books Rick Riordan There is no comma after wrote about myths. the first subordinate 2. His son asked him to tell him stories, that clause. were like Greek myths. 3. Riordan says that his son and Percy have the same sense of humour, age, and personality. There is an extra comma in the list. 4. If Percy Jackson was based on the author’s son he is also inspired by the author’s students. 5. Because his son has ADHD and dyslexia, so does Percy. 6. These books are popular because they There is an extra comma are exciting, gripping and teach you a after the independent lot. clause. 7. Although eight year olds can read them they still interest teenagers and adults.

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DEFINITION: A comma splice is a common mistake. It occurs when two independent clauses have been joined by a comma. One way to correct a comma splice is to make the independent clauses into separate sentences.

Fix the following comma splices by making them into two separate sentences.

Some sentences are correct. Do not change these.

1. I didn’t like the film, it was far too long.

2. Sara and Jerry are getting married in the autumn, they didn’t want a

summer wedding.

3. My favourite bands are all really loud because playing loud music is good

for stress relief.

4. Baking cupcakes is amazing, they taste delicious.

5. The long, dark tunnel loomed before us, its dar kness was almost

intoxicating.

6. Nancy wanted to stand up for Oliver, her conscience was bothering her.

7. Because Bill was a nasty man, he hated Oliver for what he had done.

8. Conan Doyle wrote the novel Sherlock Holmes, he published each chapter

in a magazine first.

Exercise 3 – Correct the following sentences: 1. In a rush my younger brother ran across the road stepped out of his shoe

and left it behind him.

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2. Cars at the traffic lights honked their horns, flashed their lights, and

shouted to get his attention.

3. As the lights changed he could no longer run into the road, retrieve his

shoe, and put it back on.

4. Rather than risk his life he waited pressed the button on the pedestrian

crossing and stood at the side of the road with just one shoe on his foot.

5. On the positive side most of the cars that went past saw the shoe, slowed

down, and went round it.

6. Although several cars did drive over the shoe it remained intact, unbroken,

and surprisingly clean.

Error Correction

Charlotte is a scullery maid in London. Because she wasn’t very well educated, she has made some errors when she wrote her diary. Last week we heard about some of Charlotte’s other jobs.

Find and correct the errors.

Later on the family ate their fine dinner. I rushed about all evening. As I collected pans scrubbed pots and fetched more water, I could hear the music and laughter from the dining room. It sounded like heaven! Although I wanted to go and see the beautiful ladies in their dresses jewels and finery, I was not allowed. John and Mark took some wine upstairs for the gentlemen.

“They were very handsome and rich, they are so lucky!” he said.

Mark said “They sat in the parlour drinking brandy, port and wine. I w ish that I could be a gentleman instead of being rushed off my feet as a groom!”

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As the night drew to a close, I felt like my feet was about to drop off.

Sarah and I did not go upstairs straight away, we ate some bread and cheese.

After we had climbed six flights of stairs, we said our prayers, got into our nightgowns, and went to bed.

“Just imagine if I was a fine lady” I thought. “How different my life would be!”

Lesson 10 Writing

Jamila

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Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary deafening emergency pressure void oxygen mission terror perilous Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have included two I have included at least one If I have used any comma subordinate clauses with lists sentence with two splices, I have identified in them. subordinate clauses in it. them. Crafting check: I have written a problem solved action story with an appropriate happy ending for the hero.

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Lesson 11 Do Now: Turn these into sentences that use speech punctuation and the name of the speaker.

1.

2.

3.

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Exercise 1

Fix these comma splices by making the independent clauses into separate sentences. Two sentences are correct. Do not change these.

1. The nurse screamed, she had seen a mouse. 2. It was a beautiful, sunny and warm day. I sat outside and sunbathed.

3. The long, hot days made me feel sleepy and tired, I couldn’t bear the thought of any more heat.

4. The lark sang, the eagle soared.

5. Specks of dust flew through the air, the old bookshop felt as though nobody had been in there for centuries.

6. Orwell was very interested in language because he thought it influenced the way that people thought

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Exercise 2

Fix the comma splices by adding in one of the words below to make second clause a subordinate clause.

unless although because as soon as

1. Susie, Ahmed and Chelsea all qualified for the 100 metre final, ______they had all won their previous races. 2. Raelyn enjoyed the film, ______she did not like the main character. 3. You can go to the football match, ______you finish your homework. 4. Recycling is a good idea, ______it costs more than throwing things away.

Exercise 3

As charlotte and Sarah sat by the fire, Charlotte said, “it’s not fair, although I done all my work well, I didn’t get paid very much at all.”

Sarah said, “when you get married, you will be able to stay at home all day. Your husband will have to work and earn money for you.”

Charlotte replied, “If I got married, I would have to cook, clean and look after the children.

I would also miss my friends, I wouldn’t be allowed to work here anymore.

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Sarah laughed she thought it was very funny that charlotte was angry. “Why don’t you stay here and work forever?” she asked. “You could become the next cook.”

Error Correction

The Brontës were a Victorian family who lived in a village called Haworth. There were three sisters called Charlotte Emily and Anne. They becam e very famous authors and poets. They were very determined and independent. Charlotte Brontë said “I try to avoid looking forward or backward, and try to keep looking upward.” Their father was a vicar called Patrick Brontë and their brother was called Branwell. Because he couldn’t cope when his wife died, their Aunt Elizabeth came to look after the family. When they left school the sisters became governesses. A governess lived with rich families and taught the children maths English and French. None of the Brontës enjoyed being a governess, they thought that the children were spoiled and rude. The sisters wanted to set up a school together. Although Charlotte and Emily spent a year abroad to improve their French. They had to come back early because their Aunt Elizabeth died and their brother was addicted to drink and drugs.

Lesson 11 Writing

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Isobel

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

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Lesson 12 Do Now: Fix comma splices by making the independent clauses into separate sentences. 1. I bought a new pen and pencil for the start of term, I like to be prepared.

2. Maisie’s dog is called Jethro, it barks a lot.

3. I love apple pie, dessert is my favourite part of a meal.

4. The beetle ran across the scorching sand every evening, it liked to sleep under a certain

rock.

5. It’s really hot outside, people are buying icecream, sun tan lotion and sunglasses.

Exercise 1

Fix these comma splices by turning them into a sentence with one independent clause and one subordinate clause.

1. Joel waited for the pizza to cool, he had already burned his mouth with the French fries.

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2. Mr Burton rode his motorcycle to school, he could get to school faster.

3. Latifa passed her exams, she studied every evening.

Exercise 2

Add one independent and one subordinate clause to each of these fragments. One has been done for you

1. Whilst they were in the car, John listened to music because he was bored.

2. In 2014,

3. At the end of the day,

4. When they arrived in the classroom,

5. In four days’ time,

Exercise 3

• Decide whether the following examples are independent clauses or fragments. • If they are independent clauses, name the subject and the verb. If they are fragments, explain why.

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Error Correction

From a very early age the three sisters wrote lots of stories. They Independent Example Clause or Subject + Verb or Explanation Fragment?

1. The handbag, pretty, stylish and elegant.

2. The monkey ate a banana.

3. Amin really loved to cook.

4. Starting to read lots of books.

5. The worm slowly slithered over the damp grass.

6. The orange and red leaves on the trees and on the ground.

7. I sang loudly.

8. Napoleon and Snowball, both pigs in animal farm.

9. Tania hadn’t quite passed French. created tiny books for their toy soldiers to read. They used tiny handwriting, they believed adults couldn’t read it. Although Emily and

Anne were the main writers. Charlotte also contribu ted.

When they grew up the sisters published a book of poetry in order to pay their bills. Because women were discriminated against they had to use pseudonyms, a pseudonym is a fake name. They called themselves Currer,

Acton and Ellis Bell. They were able to get their work published and earn a small amount of money. The sisters continued writing.

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Between them, they wrote many novels that people read today, including ‘jane eyre’ ‘agnes grey’ and ‘Wuthering Heights’. At the time many people thought that the novels were shocking. Today they are considered classics.

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Lesson 12 Writing

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary searing groaned scrambled escape thrust fiery grasped terror Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any I have avoided comma I have included speech fragments. splices. and punctuated it correctly. Crafting check: I have written a fantasy quest in which the hero is given one magical object that helps them fight the monster.

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Lesson 13

Do Now:

Fix the following fragments by adding an independent clause.

1. As soon as the boy shouted.

2. During the well attended, very busy and rather noisy show.

3. Because she had seen a beautiful ballerina dancing on the stage.

Exercise 1

The passage below uses several irregular past simple tense verbs. Add in the correct one.

One sunny morning, a young boy [awake]______to the smell of bacon and eggs. He quickly [run]______down the stairs. He [stick]______his tongue out at his sister. “I

[hide]______your teddy bear in the cupboard last night,” he said. “You [do]______not notice!” The boy [spin] ______on the stool as he [swing] ______his legs. His sister

[weep]______loudly. The boy laughed. Their mother [come]______into the room to see what all the fuss was about. When she saw that the boy had [fight]______with his sister, she

[forbid]______him to play outside for the whole day. It definitely [teach] ______him a lesson!

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Exercise 2

Fix the comma splices by making one of the independent clauses into a subordinate clause.

1. Emma had salad, chicken and rice for lunch, she loved healthy food.

2. It wasn’t a very good play, the actors hadn’t learned their lines.

3. The play went on too long, Emma wished she had eaten a larger lunch.

4. Emma’s stomach rumbled, she stayed until the end anyway.

Exercise 3

Correct these examples. They may contain more than one error.

1. After an hour I left, because I was tired.

2. Although, it was rainy windy and cold I walked to the shops.

3. Meanie said “I took the last cookie, I’m sorry”

4. “I thought that film was rubbish” said Georgia but, Toby disagreed.

5. The stars and moon glistening in the sky, the leaves rustling in the wind.

6. Wendy took out her camera she took a photograph, Justine smiled.

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Error Correction

Anne Brontë was born on 17th of January 1820. She was taught by her eldest sister, at school. After she had finished her education she became a governess at blake hall for the Ingham family, they were horrible to her. Their children were very badly behaved, and Anne was very unhappy. Her second job was as a governess for a family, in york. Initially the children were as badly behaved as the ones in her previous family but this soon changed. She was very happy and became friends with the family. Even though she loved working there, she had to leave when the children growed up.

Even though Charlotte didn’t think her writing was good enough Anne contributed 19 poems to a book of poetry by the sisters. The book was a failure, but Anne sent her Poems to be publis hed in a magazine under the pseudonym of Acton Bell. They were published, lots of people read her work.

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Lesson 13: Writing

Innis Juan

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary quaked groaned scrambled escape choked shrivelled grasped terror Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have written consistently in I have avoided comma I have included speech the past simple tense. splices. and punctuated it correctly. Crafting check: I have written a fantasy quest in which the hero is given one magical object that helps them fight the monster.

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Lesson 14 Do Now: Underline the subject in these sentences. 1. As Nicky raced over the finish line, Dave, Maria and Carly cheered her on in the crowds.

2. Whilst Margaret went to University, got her degree and studied Geography, her brother and his friends completed 6th Form.

3. In spite of the delays, turbulence and lost luggage, Jeremy still said “I’m so glad to be in Florida!” when he landed.

4. Although she had not finished all of her meal, drank only a little of her juice and still had coffee in her cup, Jill left.

Exercise 1 - Circle the correct verb for each of the sentences.

1. Everybody was/were eating wedding cake.

2. Tim and Yasmin was/were watching television.

3. Nobody was/were touching the quiche.

4. The teacher and the student was/were working on the test together.

5. Either Hester or Sam was/were responsible for this mess.

6. Everyone was/were very tired.

Exercise 2

Correct these sentences by fixing the comma splices or adding an independent clause to any fragments.

1. I had a really bad day today, everything went wrong.

2. I woke up and found that my sister was in my room, she had emptied my pants drawer on the floor.

3. Even though I tried to eat my breakfast nicely.

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4. Things didn’t improve in my dance lesson, my outfit was really itchy.

5. While we were shopping in the very crowded supermarket.

6. Our neighbour, my teacher and my mum’s boss heard me shouting, I felt so embarrassed that I cried.

Exercise 3 - Fix the following fragments by adding an independent clause.

1. As soon as the sun came out.

2. Because she had just had her nails done.

3. Due to the snow on the ground.

4. Despite my warnings.

5. If you go to the shops today.

6. After the film.

7. Behind the sofa.

8. Under the sea.

Error Correction

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based on her experiences with her first Family. She also wrote a book called ‘The Tenant of Wildfell Hall’, which was about an artist who had run away from her abusive husband. At the time she was writing it was illegal for women to live separately from their husbands, this was a scandalous novel. It caused lots of people to discuss whether this were an appropriate topic for a woman to be reading and writing about. Anne replied “All novels should be written for both men and women to read”

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Lesson 14: Writing

Sam

Clara

Greyjacket

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary snarled groaned bounded escape crept ripped shock terror Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any I have avoided comma I have included speech fragments. splices. and punctuated it correctly. Crafting check: I have written a fantasy quest in which all information given in the opening is used by the end of the story.

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Lesson 15 Do Now: Correct the following sentences.

1. After lunch, Joe, Naruma and Charlie went shopping, they needed to buy new trainers.

2. Once their mother had left, the brothers started to play their Xbox, they had bought a new game that morning.

3. Every day last week, it rained, autumn had arrived.

Exercise 1 - Fix the comma splices below. 1. Jim yelled, “I want an icecream too!”, he was not allowed one.

2. Squealer said, “You are not hungry, we are very good at producing food.”

3. Bill Sikes was a violent criminal, as he assaulted Nancy, he yelled, “You she-devil!”

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4. Benji, Khadija and Tracy loved to sing, their music teacher said, “I think you should join a choir.”

5. Veronica was a very spoilt child, every day she said to her father, “I want that golden ticket!”

Exercise 2 - Write what the students said accurately.

1.

2.

3.

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Exercise 3 - Correct the following sentences.

1. I don't think I'm too short to play basketball, it's just that the net is too tall.

2. The captains pick their teams in P.E., I’m always last.

3. I find basketball games so boring, nobody ever passes to me.

4. Josee threw the ball, it sailed into the air and landed in my hands, I knew this was my

chance!

5. I gripped the basketball firmly jumped as high as I could and planted it in the net, the

team roared with approval.

Error Correction Emily Brontë was born on the 20 th July 1818. When she was a child she loved to create imaginary characters from the world of Gondal with her sister, Anne.

When she was seventeen, she attended school, she was taught by her older sister Charlotte. However, she was very homesick, and soon re turned home. She decided to set up a school with her sisters, and travelled to brussels to practice her french and german. Because the sisters had not advertised very well the school did not succeed. Emily Brontë’s first published novel was ‘Wuthering

Heights’, which was about a forbidden love between catherine and heathcliffe.

Readers was shocked by the vivid imagery and strong female character of cathy. They thought it was incredible that anybody could write about such shocking scenes. a woman. Emily wrote under the psuedonym Ellis bell.

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Lesson 15: Writing

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary snarled glowed carpet escape crept floating dismounted terror Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have included two I have included speech and All my verbs are in the right subordinate clauses with lists punctuated it correctly. form for their subjects. in them. Crafting check: I have written a fantasy quest with a clear goal, terrifying monster and magical object.

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Lesson 16 Do Now: Fix the temporal clauses, subordinate clauses and speech. After the storm had passed we took time to assess the damage. It had been quite scary even though we had stayed indoors. When the storm first began we thought that it probably wouldn’t be that bad. As time went on we began to think about food supplies. We had collected emergency food in the shed some time ago.

My father said our only option is to run out in the garden, grab some tins and run back indoors.

Everybody said no it is too dangerous. After a while the storm calmed and we could go outside see which trees had fallen and grab a bite to eat.

Exercise 1

Correct the comma splices in this passage by using the words “but” and “because” or creating a new sentence.

The final day of primary school is such an exciting time, it feels like the end of an era and the start of something new. Some students really enjoy starting secondary school, most can feel mixed emotions. You go from being the oldest student to being the youngest, the worst thing is that you are also the smallest. Some schools take Year 7 for an early lunch, after a while you just queue up with everyone else. It is a bit daunting walking through the corridors, lots of older students bump into you with their bags. Behaviour improved when the Head Teacher put up mirrors in the corridors, the bigger students can now see how they are behaving and calm down.

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Exercise 2 - Explain what the error is and how they should fix it.

Some of these words may help you. Some may not. Tense Singular Comma splice Plural Subordinate clause

Al: Caliban and Ariel were both slaves even though they done nothing wrong. Error:

Denice: Nobody were happy when they found out the cake was stale. Error:

Bryson: Squealer and the other pigs was not a good influence on the farm. Error:

Rebekah: Everybody were fighting every day. Error:

Exercise 3 - Correct the sentences. You may need to add some new words. 1. On my walk I stayed on the Right-hand side of the pavement by the buildings and away from the main road.

2. If I walk too closely to the main road the pollution makes me cough.

3. The next moment I squealed a large rat must have fallen off a window ledge above plummeted to the street below and landed in front of me.

4. Although there had been a loud noise when it landed it seemed fine, it lolloped away steadily.

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Error Correction

Charlotte was born on the 21st April 1812. She faced a lot of hardship in her life but proved to be a very determined woman. She attended two different schools. The first school was for daughters of vicars. Charlotte’s sisters, Maria and Elizabeth, became very ill at the school and died, Charlotte returned home to be with her family. Her second school was better for her, and she became a teacher there. This inspired her to set up a school, she travelled to Brussels with her sister Emily to practice her french. Despite trying very hard the school was not successful and the book of poetry she published with her sisters was a failure. Eventually Charlotte’s first novel was published under the pseudonym currer Bell. It was called “Jane eyre.” Even her pu blisher didn’t believe that a woman could write such a detailed book at first! “Jane Eyre” was a great success. Charlotte enjoyed the life of an author in London. She went to the opera art museums and the theatre. She made friends with other authors and artists.

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Lesson 16 Writing

Nia

Borys

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary aghast infatuated relieved approached determined nervous confessed delighted Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any I have avoided comma All my verbs are in the right fragments. splices. form for their subjects. Crafting check: I have written a problem solved love story with four clear parts.

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Lesson 17 Do Now: Punctuate these sentences correctly. 1. In spring winter and summer the birds migrate out of town.

2. The youngest child threw a tantrum cried and shouted when she fell over.

3. In the forest Lysander, Hermia and Helena all got hopelessly lost.

4. Over the hills valleys and mountains the fog rolled in quickly.

Exercise 1 Enter the correct punctuation in these sentences.

1. Richman said Because I love peas the dinner lady gave me an extra large helping

2. Although I loved the show Laura Tom and Sarah hated it Kiandra explained.

3. If I could ask one question to my local MP I would ask What are you going to do for education

4. Bob said If I had the latest iPhone I would install Snapchat Whatsapp and Instagram

5. Although I look young I’m actually 14 said Shanelle I’m allowed to travel to school on my own

6. Unless I get a part time job I won’t have any money for an Xbox games or a new computer complained Sydney I am going to hand in my application form tomorrow

Exercise 2

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Match each sentence to the error it has made.

1. He phoned his mum, his sister, and his grandmother every Tuesday. A. Forgets to put 2. “I adore your new bag” said Chenelle. I wish I commas in lists. had one that nice.”

3. Danny and his father planned a daring escape, from the dangerous poacher.

B. Doesn’t 4. Although I ate some cake, I bought some punctuate more, yesterday. speech correctly. 5. Shakespeare wrote about lots of interesting characters in this play, my favourite part is when Hermia says to Helena, “How low am I, thou painted maypole?” C. Splices commas 6. “I want to buy sweets chocolate and oranges,” her mum said.

7. Neveah said, “Although it will be difficult, I’m D. Adds commas in determined to go to university in Oxford, where there Cambridge or Harvard.” aren’t supposed to be any. 8. Paula called her mother, it was her birthday.

Exercise 3

a. Underline the subject in each sentence.

b. Circle the main verb in each sentence

1. I called upon my friend, Mr. Sherlock Holmes, one day in the autumn of last

year.

2. The stout gentleman rose from his chair.

3. At the moment, I do not know the details of the case.

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4. Holmes, the greatest detective London has ever seen, sucked on his

ancient wooden pipe.

6. The portly client puffed out his chest and pulled a dirty and wrinkled

newspaper from the inside pocket of his greatcoat.

7. After we had heard the strange tale, Holmes pulled me to one side and

whispered quietly into my ear.

Error 8. I did not learn very much, however, from my inspection of Mr. Wilson.

Correction

Charlotte’s life was not a completely happy one. Her brother and sisters all died from tuberculosis within a 9 month period. After they died she lived in

Yorkshire with her father, she also married a man called Arther Nicholls. Although she was happy with her new husband her father did not like him. She was happy with her life, and published another novel, ‘The professor’ before she died.

Throughout their lives and up until the present day all the Brontë sisters have been influential characters. Even thoug h it wasn’t normal for the time they wrote about strong women who survived lots of difficult times. Their writing included characters that were interesting funny and radical.

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Lesson 17: Writing

Sally

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary ranch protect sheriff lasso determined wagon revolver gallop Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any I have avoided comma I have included speech fragments. splices. and punctuated it correctly. Crafting check: I have written a problem solved action story with four clear parts and with a solution that is prepared in the opening.

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Lesson 18 Do Now: Underline the subject in these sentences. Circle the main verb (the action) in each sentence.

1. As she entered the room, Hannah was shocked because there was no one there. 2. Although the sun was blisteringly hot and blinded people, it made Dominic happy. 3. Whilst Abigail went rock climbing, had a shower and watched television, Samira read her book because she was tired. 4. Far away from the hubbub of the playground, Jesse, Tom and Azeez secretly plotted their revenge on Narayan.

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Exercise 1 – Add in the singular or plural version of each noun in the table.

Single Plural Single Plural

house story shoe essay detective bays magicians tray island stairway babies cowboys city aunties family county

Exercise 2

Correct these sentences by fixing the comma splices or adding an independent clause to any fragments

1. Whenever I try to eat a more healthy diet

2. Fizzy drinks are harmful, most teenagers don't even realise how much sugar is in them.

3. If I don't remember to eat a good breakfast in the morning

4. I eat five different vegetables a day, it puts me in a really good mood.

5. Whenever I eat a lovely home-cooked meal

6. South Koreans eat an average of ten portions of fruit and vegetables a day, they have the highest life expectancy in the world.

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Exercise 3 – Fill in the gaps to correct the passage.

On the second day after Christmas I called upon my friend Sherlock Holmes. I intended to give him my best of the season. He was lounging upon the sofa wearing a purple dressing-gown his favourite leather slippers and ragged hat on his head. What a miserable present I said to Holmes. What kind of monster would give you such a tattered hat for Christmas .

Holmes over his paper. “And Merry Christmas to you too, Watson_

Holmes cried. “The hat was indeed a present but the gift in the mystery it brings me, not the wearing of it. Here, take it and look closely I want to know your opinion of who it could possibly belong to.”

Error Correction Regrettably, our story must begin on a note of sadness. It is an unfortunate truth that: not all beginnings are happy ones. This particular story opens in a workhouse.

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lives and worked here. Children left on doorsteps with no family to call their own spent their days in the bottle-washing factorys. There is nothing beautiful or warm one can say about a workhouse. Only that this is where our young hero, Oliver Twist, came into the world.

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Lesson 18: Writing

Akan

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary phoenix Perilous terror tears squawked Swooped rescued relieved Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have avoided comma All my verbs are in the right All my plural nouns are spelt splices. form for their subjects. correctly. Crafting check: I have written a fantasy quest with four clear parts and all information from the opening used later in the story.

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Lesson 19

Do Now: a) Underline the subject of each sentence. b) Turn every singular subject into a plural subject. Make sure the sentence still makes sense.

1. The detective looked at me with terror in his eyes.

2. Even after all these years, the boy still loved to play football with his friends.

3. The dog, without realising what it had done, ran back into the house.

Exercise 1 – Add in the plural or singular form of each noun in the grid below.

Single Plural Single Plural

Shirt pathways Fox societies arteries brush Canary castaways

Peach melody

Cockroach key

witches country

Guy lunchbox

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Exercise 2

a. Underline the subject in each sentence. b. Circle the main verb(s) in each sentence. c. If the subject is a singular, write ‘S’ after the sentence. If the subject is a plural, write ‘P’ after the sentence.

1. The witches mixed a love potion for the knight.

2. After a week, the peach went mouldy.

3. The key was under the pile of papers.

4. The boys wore dark glasses to the concert.

5. Despite the locked gate, the baby escaped.

6. Every Halloween, the group of children rings doorbells up and down our street.

7. The plastic bottles were dropped by the careless student.

Exercise 3 - Correct the examples. They may contain more than one error. 1. The guests was gathered in the corridor. Jane offers to take their coats for

them.

2. Although the party was fun. I came home early. Because I was tired.

3. Her hair was long, it came all the way down to her waist

4. After Christina had showered eaten dinner and done her homework she

played games to relax.

5. If you want to. You can come round and help me paint the room but I can’t

give you any money.

Error Correction

I was at Baker street at three the next afternoon, but Holmes was not. I had been waiting for about an hour when the street-level door opened. A man entered, dressed

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in dirty, ragged clothes. His chin was covered by a scraggly beard, and he walked with a limp it was Sherlock Holmes. I knew my friend was a master of disguise, but it was still hard to recognize him. Went into the bedroom and returned looking like himself again.

He sat down by the fire and laughed.

“What a morning I’ve had, watson,” he said. “As you can guess from my disguise, I visited Miss Adler’s house in order to watch Miss Adler.”

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Lesson 19: Writing

Aylmer

Isolde

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary armour perilous terror tears sword swooped rescued relieved Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have used capital letters All my verbs are in the right All my plural nouns are spelt correctly. form for their subjects. correctly. Crafting check: I have written one type of story with a satisfying structure.

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Lesson 20

Do Now:

Correct the errors in this student’s work.

The sun glinted above the mountains like a diamond the sky became a rosy pink. Standing tall and proud. The pine trees nodded gently in the delicate breeze. At the top of the hill Bill and Ron looked at one another. He said, “It makes you realise how lucky we are to be alive, doesn’t it”

Exercise 1 - Correct the following examples.

1. The School Council held a vote about whether to paint the hall or leave it as it was and

spend the money on something else, it would be a democratic process.

2. The students voted to leave it, they liked the idea of spending the money on new sports

equipment a disco night or maybe even a new vending machine.

3. The Head Teacher was disappointed, she told the students that she was ashamed of

their behaviour and not even sure that she needed to honour the outcome of the

vote, even democracies need strong leadership.

4. The school hall was never painted and the money never given to the school council, it

was noticed that the Head Teacher's car had nice new alloy wheels soon afterwards.

Exercise 2

Add speech punctuation and a P whenever you think there should be a new paragraph. Good morning said the head of the School Council to the Head Teacher. Good morning replied the Head Teacher, looking sheepish. Those are nice-looking wheels said the head of the

School Council. Thank you blushed the Head Teacher they're new. The paint in the hall isn’t

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new said the head of the School Council it’s all horrible and peeling off the walls. Is that so said the Head Teacher. The head of the School Council didn’t reply.

Exercise 3 – Punctuate these sentences correctly.

1. At the end of the day you can always count on me to be there for you said Jamal to Ricky.

2. Maga stopped what she was doing turned to Zoe and whispered you’ll never guess what I just heard.

3. When he had finished the washing up Olly said I would like to sit down drink my tea and watch TV.

4. The team captain said to the team we need to make sure we make shorter passes when we’re near the goal.

5. Before he waded into the sea Brian waved and shouted we’ll see you when we get back. 6. After she had tasted it the judge said you have prepared baked and decorated the cake perfectly.

Error Correction

It was Mr. Bumble who gave Oliver his last name. He used the alphabet to keep track of all the new orphan names. When the last orphan came to them, Bumble is at the letter S.

Therefore, Bumble gave him the name Swubble. As T was next in line this babies was named

Twist. The orphan after Oliver received the name Unwith, and the one after that Vilkins.

“Very good, Mr. Bumble,” Mrs. Bumble said. She wrote Oliver’s name, in the registry book.

“It’s official now.”

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“It’s all a part of the job, Mrs. Bumble” Mr. Bumble answered. “A town official’s job is rarely done. Mr. Bumble did not notice his wife rolling her eyes at him.

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Lesson 20: Writing

Aaliya

Saanvi

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Solution Part four: Happy ending

Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have included at least one I have included speech and All my verbs are in the right sentence with two punctuated it correctly. form for their subjects. subordinate clauses in it. Crafting check: I have written one type of story with a satisfying structure.

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Lesson 21

Do Now:

Put the commas in the correct places in this student’s writing.

Last Wednesday Khaled Tamara and I went to the park. I arrived before them despite leaving late getting lost and getting stuck in traffic. For twenty minutes I waited for them and wondered where they had got to before they finally arrived.

I didn’t mind that they were late because they brought a wonderful picnic of sandwiches crisps and lemonade. Khalid apologised and said “Sorry we were so late.” Just before I left my mum said that she needed everything in the fridge for pack lunches. At the last minute I had to unpack what I’d made go to the shops and make up a whole new picnic.’

Exercise 1 – Correct the comma splice or fragment.

1. Supermarket eggs can’t hatch, that’s impossible.

2. A young man wanted to hatch a duck from an egg, he bought the eggs from the

supermarket.

3. Even though his parents knew that he was determined to hatch a duck from an egg.

4. The young man had bought a special egg incubator from ebay, it worked!

5. Although he enjoyed keeping his baby duck in the bedroom in the beginning.

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Exercise 2

Fill in the blank space with the correct version of the verbs. get work understand remember check deserve fill ring bring show

When I mark my students’ essays, I ______a warm and fuzzy feeling. There is one student who ______particularly hard. He ______everything that I teach him. He ______everything I say. He always ______for corrections. In my opinion, he ______a reward. This essay that I am holding in my hands now ______me with joy and hope for the future generation. Each word

______out with truth. The ending ______a tear to my eye. It

______that I am not such a terrible teacher, after all.

Exercise 3

Add speech punctuation and a P whenever you think there should be a new paragraph.

Good morning said Kim, I’d like to buy a shirt please. The shop assistant looked at him and smiled. Are you looking for something smart or casual? she asked. Quite smart, please Kim

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replied. We have a large selection over here the shop assistant replied. I think blue would suit you. Do you know your size? Yes thank you. I will have a look replied Kim. He wandered over to the display to find the perfect shirt.

Error Correction

Two days after Christmas I decide to visit Sherlock Holmes. I wanted to wish him a merry

Christmas. When I arrived at Baker Street, I found my friend resting on the sofa. Next to him an old worn, dirty hat was slouched over the back of a chair, I saw a magnifying glass sitting on a nearby table.

“I suppose this hat has something to do with a crime? I asked.

“No, my dear watson,” answered Holmes. “It’s not to do with a crime but is just one of those odd little events that take place in a large city like London. I received the hat on Christmas morning from a policemen named Peterson.

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Lesson 21: Writing a comeuppance story

Dave

Part one: Opening Part two: Bad deed

Part three: Bad deed revealed Part four: Comeuppance

Vocabulary livid swallowed drenched shocked ashamed hurled apologised humiliated Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have included at least one I have included speech and All my verbs are in the right sentence with two punctuated it correctly. form for their subjects. subordinate clauses in it. Crafting check: I have written a clear comeuppance story in which a character does a bad thing and is punished for it.

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Lesson 22

Do Now:

Correct the following sentences.

1. This sentence demonstrate everything that are wrong with students who don’t

proofread.

2. Even J.K. Rowling check her work before she send it off to the publishers.

3. Rushed work show the reader that the student do not care enough about what they is

studying.

4. Everybody make mistakes. This is why your teacher ask you to proofread your work.

5. The student who say, “There are no need to proofread because my essay have no

errors,” will surely find that their essay are full of errors.

Exercise 1

Add speech punctuation and a P whenever you think there should be a new paragraph.

Would anybody mind if I took the last apple? I asked, reaching into the fruit bowl. Not at all.

You’re welcome to it, my friend replied, and please don’t buy any more of them. What have you got against apples? I asked, raising one eyebrow. I just prefer fruit from plants, she said, like strawberries, raspberries and blackberries. Rather than apples, pears and plums, I laughed.

Exactly, she said. Please remember that the next time you go shopping. Next time, why don’t you buy your own fruit? I said, signalling an end to the conversation. She looked up but didn’t reply.

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Exercise 2

State whether the sentences have been written in the first, second or third person.

1. I was at Baker street at three o’clock precisely, but the train had already departed.

2. Kenny and Kyle developed a special handshake to prove their friendship.

3. You whip the eggs really well and add cheese.

4. We made our way into the forest to escape the wicked witch.

5. Aliens are a real threat to planet Earth.

6. “You have taken my pencil from me!” cried the upset child.

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Exercise 3

Make any fragments into complete sentences by adding independent clauses.

1. Despite my warnings.

2. To make sure that she could afford to go on holiday.

3. She looked through the window.

4. At the end of the street and round the corner.

5. Whether or not you want to go to school.

6. Due to the rain, wind and cold temperatures.

7. When she got home from school.

8. However much he tried.

9. I ran for the bus and ripped my tights.

10. Even though he hated dogs generally.

Error Correction

The two boys took Oliver to a new part of the city. There was no empty and rundown building on these streets. In this part of town the sidewalks were clean, the buggies were shiny, and all of the people were well dressed except Oliver Dodger and Charley. There was so many people on the street that no one noticed them.

Dodger and Charley wove their way through the crowd. Oliver walked behind him. Oliver walked behind his friends he watched as they picked their way through the crowd. Dodger would stand very close to a gentleman while Charley kept watch. When Charley gave a quick, sharp, whistle, Dodger jumped back and they walked away. This happened several

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times as Oliver watched, he were confused about this game. What were they doing.

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Lesson 22: Writing a comeuppance horror story

Andy

Part one: Opening Part two: Bad deed

Part three: Bad deed revealed Part four: Comeuppance

Vocabulary chilling panic eerie sinister fatal menacing fog obscured Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any I have included speech and All my verbs are in the right fragments. punctuated it correctly. form for their subjects. Crafting check: I have written a horror story with a clear comeuppance structure.

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Lesson 23

Do Now:

Look at the sentences. State whether they have been written in the first, second or third person.

1. Your cooking is wonderful because you always use exactly the right spices.

2. Caliban can be seen as a monster, but I actually see him as a sensitive character.

3. We went swimming in the sea before we came to see you.

4. The whole family went on a camping trip together last year.

5. I am writing to inform you that your application for work experience has been successful.

Exercise 1

Rewrite this conversation between Mr. and Mrs. Sowerberry with the correct speech punctuation and paragraphing.

Mrs. Sowerberry placed her hands on her hips and said well? She did not sound very happy. My dear said Mr. Sowerberry. I’ve brought home a workhouse boy. We can put him to work in the shop. He looks pretty small she frowned. Well, yes Mr. Sowerberry said He is rather small. I’m sure that he will grow, though. Of course, she snapped he will grown on our food and money.

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Exercise 2 Part 1 - Identify which of these sentences are punctuated correctly.

1. In the depths of the jungle, the explorers cautiously crept towards the rare parrot.

2. They didn’t want to scare it, they had to be very quiet.

3. As they approached, there was a loud “crack”.

4. Ashanti stared angrily at Dan, he blushed.

5. He had tried to be quiet, there were just so many twigs on the ground

6. Ashanti rolled her eyes.

7. She liked Dan, he could be really clumsy.

8. The bird had not moved, so they continued to pick their way towards it.

9. Ashanti raised her camera slowly.

10. She felt a flutter of excitement, she had waited a lifetime for this moment

Exercise 2 Part 2

Re-write these sentences so that they no longer use a comma splice. Change one of the independent clauses into a subordinate clause for each. 1. ………………………………………………………………………………………………..... ………………………………………………………………………………………………...... ………………………………………………………………………………………………...... 2. ………………………………………………………………………………………………..... ………………………………………………………………………………………………...... ………………………………………………………………………………………………...... 3. ………………………………………………………………………………………………..... ………………………………………………………………………………………………...... ………………………………………………………………………………………………...... 4. ………………………………………………………………………………………………..... ………………………………………………………………………………………………...... ………………………………………………………………………………………………...... 5. …………………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………………………

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Exercise 3 - Correct the errors in the following sentences.

1. The teacher was not pleased, the student had brought a dog with him to detention.

2. Unless it has a good reason to be here the dog needs to go said the teacher.

3. The student claimed that it wasn't his fault, because he hadn't encouraged the Dog to come.

4. He pleaded with the Dog ordered him to leave and threw a ball out of the window.

5. Although the Dog was tempted to chase the ball through the window he decided to stay.

6. The teacher was furious, either that dog leave or I do, she said.

Error Correction

As I watched him enjoying the concert. I think about his various moods. When he was hard at work on a case he was serious, determined and cold, as he listened to the music. He was light hearted happy, and dreamy. I also knew that his happy moods often meant he had solved a case, if I were a criminal. I’m not sure which of Holmes’ mood I would prefer.

Outside the hall, a refreshed Holmes turns to me and said Watson, I believe that we are just in time to stop a serious crime, I will need your help tonight. Would you please bring your gun and meet me at Baker Street at ten o’clock.”

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Lesson 23: Writing a horror story. Focus: openings

Amir

Gran

Part one: Opening Part two: Bad deed

Part three: Bad deed revealed Part four: Comeuppance

Vocabulary chilling panic eerie sinister fatal menacing fog obscured Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any I have included speech and I have written consistently in fragments. punctuated it correctly. the third person. Crafting check: I have written a horror story with a clear comeuppance structure.

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Lesson 24

Do Now:

Add speech punctuation and a P whenever you think there should be a new paragraph. Why do you always take so long to eat breakfast? It’s because I thoroughly chew every bite. Does that not get boring? Quite the opposite, actually. That’s interesting. What do you mean? Well, if I’m chewing fruit then I get lots more juicy goodness if I chew it thoroughly. What about toast? It’s just the same. I get to appreciate all the interesting flavours of the bread.

Sounds good. I might try it. You definitely should. Your life will be better for it.

Exercise 1 - Correct the following sentences.

1. My favourite novel epitomise everything I love about the fantasy genre.

2. The author present her characters so skilfully, and convey their predicament so

convincingly.

3. Everything I read demonstrate my commitment to imaginary worlds and faraway

kingdoms.

4. For example, Narnia present the adventures of four children who climb into a wardrobe.

5. JRR Tolkien use his fictional world to illustrate what happen when the little man stand up

and fight the big people.

6. My love of fantasy imply that I don’t like reality much.

Exercise 2 - Decide whether the sentences have been written in the first, second or third person.

1. Everybody feels better after a good walk.

2. Some primary schools ask children to walk for a mile every morning.

3. Teachers and children walking together every single day is lots of fun.

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4. You can talk to a friend as you walk.

5. Even though sometimes it rains, we just put on our wet weather gear.

6. The teacher might choose their favourite student to walk with.

7. I love walking and talking with my friends.

8. I especially lik e it when the teaching assistants join us.

Exercise 3 - Turn the full form of these words into words that use an apostrophe of omission.

RULE: The apostrophe shows when letters have been missed out of a word.

Full form With apostrophe Full form With apostrophe

I am Could have

You are Would have

They are Does not

I have Is not

You have Could not

She has Would not

He has I had

They have You had

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Cannot He had

It is She had

Error Correction

Theres no lake at Camp Green Lake. There once is a very large Lake here. That was over a hundred years ago. Now, it is just a dry, flat wasteland. There used to be a town of Green Lake as well, the town shrivelled and dried up along with the lake.

During the summer, the daytime temperature hovers around ninety-five degrees in the shade if you can find any shade. Not much shade in a big dry lake. The only trees is two old oaks on the eastern edge of the dried out lake. A hammock is stretched between the two trees and a log cabin stands behind that. Out on the lake, rattlesnakeses and scorpions find shade under rocks and, in the holes dug by the campers.

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Lesson 24: Writing a horror story.

Focus: bad deed – ignoring the warning

Bernie Lily

Part one: Opening Part two: Bad deed

Part three: Bad deed revealed Part four: Comeuppance

Vocabulary chilling panic eerie sinister fatal menacing conscious isolated Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any I have included speech and I have written consistently in fragments. punctuated it correctly. the third person. Crafting check: I have written a horror story with a clear comeuppance structure and a particularly creepy place.

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Lesson 25

Do Now:

Correct this student’s work.

My alarm goes off at 7am and I got out of bed. I quickly shower, get dressed, and eat my breakfast. Once I’ave eaten, I brush my teeth and help my little sister get ready, she can be quite naughty. Sometimes she runs around the house and refuses to get ready. If I offer to do her hair for her, she usually calms down bit but she often keeps bouncing up and down. Not always easy to get her to keep still! She likes it when I do bunches for her and put bows in her hair. Even though she can be a pain, sh’es my baby Sister and she is pretty cute.

Exercise 1 – Correct the following sentences:

1. If I take a few minutes each day to be calm.

2. I try to focus on each moment as it comes, each sound, smell and taste is special and important.

3. The sound of birdsong can really lift my mood, it always makes me smile.

4. Although some people think you should be constantly busy.

5. A few deep breaths are really relaxing, I make sure I do this whenever I’m feeling overwhelmed.

6. Whenever I have a test in class.

7. My friends understand how much I need this time, they give me space when I ask for it.

8. Even though the classroom can be loud and busy. Exercise 2 - State whether these sentences have been written in the first, second or third person: 1. Only when she was alone in the room did she open the crate and lift out the

cage within.

2. You need to think very carefully about what you want to do after school.

3. We’re walking across the wild fields south-east of town, those ones that slope

down to the river and head on towards the swamp.

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4. “I don’t want to!” bellowed the small girl as she stamped her feet with rage.

5. The first time Matthew Arnatt saw the cloud of death, it was floating out of the

first-floor window of a house near where he was living.

6. I had seen little of him lately. I feared that I had neglected our friendship.

Exercise 3 - In this passage, find the contractions and write them out in full.

She’s no idea what a photograph is, but I bet she’d rather not be photographed. Don’t believe that she hasn’t spotted the camera. She’s got her eyes trained right on it. I can’t stop thinking about those eyes. Even though she’s the predator, she’d have felt threatened, too. This picture doesn’t just show a lion in her natural habitat. It has won competitions. It has been shown in museums all around the world. She’s beautiful, she’s deadly and she’s famous.

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Error Correction

“Wheres Papa going with that axe?" said Fern to her mother as they were setting the table for breakfast.

"Out to the hoghouse," replied Mrs. Arable. "Some pigs were born last night." "I dont see why he needs an axe," continued Fern, who was only eight.

"Well said her mother, "one of the pigs is a runt, it's very small and weak, and it will never amount to anything. So your father has decided to do away with it."

"Do away with it?" shrieked Fern. "You mean kill it? Just because it's smaller than the others?"

Mrs. Arable put a pitcher of cream on the table. "Don't yell, Fern!" she says. "Your father is right. The pig would probably die anyway."

Fern pushed a chair out of the way and ran outdoors. The grass was wet and the earth smelled of springtime. Fern's shoes was drenched by the time she caught up with her father.

"Please dont kill it!" she sobbed. "It's unfair."

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Lesson 25: Writing a horror story. Focus: bad deed revealed – meeting a monster

Mr Jones

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Bad deed revealed Part four: Comeuppance

Vocabulary chilling panic eerie sinister fatal menacing conscious isolated Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have written consistently in the I have used apostrophes I have included speech in third person. of omission correctly. the present tense and used the correct verb form Crafting check: I have written a horror story with a clear comeuppance structure. I have stretched the “bad deed revealed” section out to make it more exciting.

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Lesson 26

Do Now:

Decide which of these are fragments and make the fragments into complete sentences. 1. Whenever Jude saw animals. 2. Laundry drying in the sun. 3. In the morning, in the afternoon and at night. 4. The lady sang. 5. Running along the road, sweating and feeling the burn in my muscles. 6. Behind the wardrobe door, to the children’s amazement. 7. I love peanuts. 8. Although meat can look delicious. 9. Sighing in the breeze. 10. Went to the shops and bought an ice cream because it was sunny.

Exercise 1

Add speech punctuation and a P whenever you think there should be a new paragraph

.

One friend asked the other, if you could have a superpower, what would it be? Easy, came the reply, I would choose the ability to spot and correct all the errors in my essays and writing.

Not invisibility, or seeing through walls or the ability to travel through time, then? With accurate writing, I’d get better grades at school and be far more likely to get an interview when I apply for a job. Isn’t that just proofreading, though? asked the first friend. Do you really need a superpower to check and correct your work? The second friend thought about it, and then said, if proofreading was that easy, then why do so many people make mistakes in their writing?

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Exercise 2 Cross out the words that can be changed into a contraction. Replace them with a word using an apostrophe.

1. I will forgive you for what you did.

2. I would not do that if I were you.

3. Teri wondered why the cat had not eaten the food.

4. The Lions could have won the championship if their team had fewer injuries.

5. They are going to meet us over there.

6. My sister did not know that I had already finished my homework.

7. She has already said that she will pick me up from the bus stop.

8. I had a delicious sandwich for lunch. We can go there next week if you would like to.

Exercise 3

Decide whether the following sentences use the apostrophe of omission correctly or not and correct the sentences that don’t

1. We’re all going to Manchester for Christmas this year.

2. My dad often send’s his brother emails about what we are all up to.

3. The chef on TV use’s interesting ingredients.

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4. I’ve always wondered how they make mobile phones.

5. My granny has a garden. She love’s to grow vegetables and flowers.

6. They’re mum always makes us delicious cakes.

7. They decided they we’re too tired to drive home, so they stayed another night.

8. There aren’t any apples left in the supermarket today.

Error Correction

Grammar exercises make you really think about how language works. Because I think I know the rules I don’t always check my work. Even though my teacher mark’s my grammar mistakes there is always a little voice inside me that thinks that it is really the teacher who has made the mistake. He work’s hard and look’s like he stay’s up too late, I would not be surprised if he made mistakes sometimes. Whenever he call’s me to talk to him at the end of the lesson he ask me if I check my work before handing it in. The essay sits there between us on the desk, it is covered in the teacher’s pen marks.

Because he asked me to go through my entire exercise book and label my mistakes with the reason why they are wrong I know that I will not be able to go to my friend’s house after school. Even though I feel angry I still do the work. Each mistake on the capital letter rule the apostrophe rule and putting an ‘s’ on the 3rd person of the present tense is a big wake-up call.

My book prove that I don’t know the rules as well as I think I do.

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Lesson 26: Writing a horror story. Focus: the comeuppance

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Bad deed revealed Part four: Comeuppance

Vocabulary chilling panic eerie sinister fatal menacing conscious isolated Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 All my plural nouns are spelt I have avoided putting I have avoided putting an correctly. an apostrophe on any apostrophe on any verbs plural nouns. apart from contractions. Crafting check: I have written a horror story with a clear comeuppance structure. If I have written a gruesome ending, it is appropriate to the monster the character meets.

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Lesson 27

Do Now:

Complete the table with the correct singular or plural word.

Single Plural Single Plural

berry goose

child woman

man loaf

louse species

battery quiz

thief deer

foot kiss

boot lady

Exercise 1 - Find the apostrophes in this passage and remove any that are incorrect.

RULE: You never use an apostrophe to turn a singular into a plural.

The Amazon Rainforest is the larges’t rainforest on earth. It’s home to 427 mammal’s, 1,300 birds, 378 reptile’s and more than 400 amphibians. It covers 40% of the South American continent. The Amazon consists of several ecosystem’s and vegetation types and has thousand’s of species’.

Some of the animals here can’t be found anywhere else in the world. The Amazon Rainforest provides an ideal habitat for lot’s of different kinds of animals. It’s home to about 2,000 birds and mammal’s. That's not to say, however, that the rest of South America doesn't have some unique and intriguing species’ of its own.

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Exercise 2 – Correct the following sentences:

1. My cousin make terrible cups of tea.

2. Would you like a cup of tea, she asks.

3. She do this because she know that nobody will ever say, “yes.”

4. Even though she drinks two or three cups a day.

5. I feel sorry for people when they come to the house and accept her offer of tea, they just don’t know how bad it’s going to be.

6. Her problem is that she puts the milk in before the hot water, the tea doesn’t mix properly she forgets to stir it and it tastes too milky.

7. Because no one has told her she will never learn.

8. If we tell her how bad her tea is.

Exercise 3 - Correct this student’s work by adding and removing apostrophes as necessary.

My mother often say’s to me, “I know that you dont like studying, but if you aren’t careful, youll do badly in you’re exam’s”. Shes always trying to get me to do more. When she sees that

Im not doing my homework, she presse’s her lip’s together, frowns and breathe’s through her nose really loudly. Sometimes, she talks to her sister about me when Im trying to watch TV. My

Aunt roll’s her eyes, tuts and start’s to lecture me as well. My family thinks that education is very important and cant understand that I am more interested in sport’s than science.

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Error Correction

In the winter, it snow’s in New York. Snow is cold, wet, and dangerous. Snow covers the roads and makes driving difficult. Snow cover’s the sidewalks and makes walking difficult. Some people cant get to work or dont manage to get to the shops for supplies.

The snow can also be pretty. Sparkles and glistens when the sun shines on it. Some people enjoy playing in the snow they build snowman or snow forts. They have snowball fights when they ca’nt go to school they slide down hills on sleds or toboggans. They ski down hills. Snow dosent need to be miserable.

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Lesson 27: Writing a horror story. Focus: a slow reveal

Part one: Opening Part two: Problem

Part three: Bad deed revealed Part four: Comeuppance

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Lesson 28

Do Now:

1. Complete these sentences. 2. Say whether they are written in the first, second, or third person.

a) I never knew that after all these years, you here all along.

b) I going to wait for the last train.

c) We going to the shops. Do you want anything?

d) When we heard the final whistle, we exhausted.

Exercise 1 - Correct this student’s work by removing incorrect apostrophes and adding them where they are needed.

On Saturday, I’m going to meet a dog called Frieda and I cant wait. She's a really important member of the team helping to save people in Mexico, after the huge earthquake there. Like the human’s on the team, she need’s special equipment like boot’s to protect her feet from sharp rocks, and goggles to protect her eyes from dus’t.

She uses her amazing sense of smell to find survivor’s trapped under rocks so the emergency services can get them out. She dosen’t let anything get past her. She’s a proper hero - the Navy says shes already saved 50 live’s.

Exercise 2 – Correct the following sentences:

1. I cant remember what life was like before we met Geoffrey, it was certainly emptier.

2. Geoffrey enjoy’s cuddle’s, treat’s and stroking.

3. Although we found him in the rescue centre.

4. Thats the one, shouted my sister when she saw him.

5. He need’s special medicine to stop him from getting flea’s.

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6. Once he brought a rat in the house, he thought that we would be pleased.

7. My brother cant stand rat’s, he screamed, Get it out of the house.

8. Geoffrey didnt bring us any more present’s after that, he preferred cuddle’s and treat’s.

Exercise 3 - In this passage, find the contractions and write them out in full.

When primary school finished, my mother was always waiting for me at the school gate.

She didn’t miss a day. She’s very punctual, and she probably just wanted to make sure that I couldn’t get in trouble. She’s quite strict like that. She couldn’t stand the idea of me wasting time after school. The other students couldn’t believe that my mum had the time to come and meet me. They’ve always laughed at me about it. It’s easy to feel frustrated when parents stop you from doing what you want to do. I didn’t feel frustrated, though. I couldn’t have persuaded her to wait for me at home even if I had tried. My father sometimes came with her. He’s a fireman, so he’s often out at night but around during the day. They’ve always enjoyed hearing about my day at school.

Error Correction

What a lot of hairy-faced men there are around nowadays.

When a man grow’s hair all over his face. It is impossible to tell what he really looks like.

Perhaps thats why he does it. He'd rather you didnt know.

Then there's the problem of washing.

When the very hairy one’s wash their faces, it must be as big a job as when you and I wash the hair on our heads.

So what I want to know is this: how often do all these hairy-faced men wash their faces? Is it only once a week, like us, on Sunday nights? And does they shampoo it? Do they use a

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hairdryer? Do they rubs hair-tonic in to stop their face’s from going bald? Do they go to a barber to have their hairy faces cut and trimmed or do they do it themselves in front of the bathroom mirror with nail-scissors?

I don't know. But next time, you see a man with a hairy face (which will probably be as soon as you step out on to the street) maybe you will look at him more closely and start wondering about some of these things.

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Lesson 28: Writing a horror story

Alice

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Bad decision Part four: Comeuppance

Vocabulary chilling panic eerie sinister fatal menacing conscious isolated Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have used apostrophes of I have avoided putting I have avoided putting an omission correctly. an apostrophe on any apostrophe on any verbs plural nouns. apart from contractions. Crafting check: I have written a horror story with poetic justice. The main character makes the wrong choice and receives a comeuppance.

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Lesson 29

Do Now:

Correct this student’s work. Remove any incorrect apostrophes and add apostrophes where they should be.

My granny love’s Autumn. She says its her favourite of all the season’s. Often, she goes to the local park, sits on a bench and stare’s at the tree’s with their golden, orange and red leaves. Shell sit for hours and she doesnt mind if she doesnt talk to anyone. She says that she cant believe how beautiful nature is and how lucky she is to just be able to enjoy it. She tell’s me that I shouldnt rush around so much and forget to just look up at the tree’s now and then.

Exercise 1

Rewrite this paragraph so that it is in the third person, rather than the first person. Stay in the present tense.

I know I’m not an ordinary ten-year-old kid. Sure, I do ordinary things. I eat ice cream. I ride my bike. I play ball. I have an XBox. Stuff like that makes me ordinary. Inside, I feel ordinary as well, but I know ordinary kids don’t make other ordinary kids run away screaming in playgrounds. I know ordinary kids don’t get stared at wherever they go.

Exercise 2 Cross out the words that can be changed into a contraction. Replace them with a word using an apostrophe. 1. Even after everything he has been through, he is still smiling.

2. Sammy is coming to the party later, but she will have to leave early.

3. Romesh turned to me and asked, “Jack is your brother? He does not look like you at all.”

4. Nish has just one fear: he cannot stand snakes.

5. “I had no idea you were coming!” Marlon said. “If I had known, I would have baked a cake.”

6. Eileen is going to be unable to walk because she has had surgery on her knee.

7. “Linford is the favourite to win this race,” the commentator said.

8. In the interview, I said, “Rudy is not as good as he used to be.”

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Exercise 3 - Find the contractions and write them out in full.

Even when Oliver Twist leaves the workhouse, the reader knows that his life won’t be any better with Mr. Sowerberry, the undertaker. Oliver’s already been through a lot of hardship in the workhouse, where he wasn’t fed properly and was made to do hard work. Oliver hopes that life outside the workhouse will be better for him. He’s wrong, though. As soon as Oliver arrives, he is shown where he’ll be sleeping. Mrs. Sowerberry says, “You don’t mind sleeping among the coffins, do you?” Oliver is about to find out that his situation is going to turn from bad to worse. At least in the workhouse he was allowed to sleep in a bed. Now, living with the undertaker, Oliver has to spend his nights in the bare coffins that have been prepared for the dead people soon to enter them. Mrs. Sowerberry isn’t interested in giving Oliver a more comfortable bed. She tells him, “Don’t suppose it matters much if you do mind, though. There’s no place else for you to go.” This situation isn’t healthy, and would’ve been eerie and intimidating for Oliver. Sleeping in a coffin sounds ridiculous and terrifying, even though it is the best Oliver has.

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Error Correction

It was dusk – winter dusk. Snow lay white and shining over the hills and icicles hung from the forest trees. Snow lay piled on the dark road that cut through the fields, but from dawn mans had been clearing it with brooms and shovels. They’re were hundreds of them at work and they were wrapped in sacking because of the bitter cold. Kept together in groups for fear of the wolves and their heavy breathing formed grey clouds as they cleared the snow from the road.

Snow lay thick, too, upon the roof of Willoughby Chase, the great house that stood in the heart of the area. The Chase looked like an inviting home. Its rosy brick was bright and well- cared-for its numerous turrets stand up sharp against the sky and the balconies each held a golden square of window. The house was all alight inside, and the joyous noise of activity contrasted with: the hideous howling of the wolves outside.

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Lesson 29: Writing a horror story with a happy ending

Alice

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Same as last lesson. Today you will write a different second half.

Part three: Good decision Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary chilling panic eerie sinister fatal menacing conscious isolated Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have used apostrophes of I have avoided putting I have avoided putting an omission correctly. an apostrophe on any apostrophe on any verbs plural nouns. apart from contractions. Crafting check: I have written a horror story with poetic justice. The main character makes the right choice and receives a happy ending.

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Lesson 30

Do Now:

Fill in the blanks with an appropriate word that contains an apostrophe.

The first one has been done for you.

a) I can’t see the stage from back here.

b) I won’t come if going to be cruel.

c) We go that way.

d) got to taste it!

e) Sorry, but we make it later.

Exercise 1 - Turn these phrases into sentences that use apostrophes of possession.

RULE: Add ‘+s to singular nouns that don’t end in “s” to that they own something.

1. The pen belonging to Ms. Ali 2. The bone belonging to the dog 3. The paper belonging to the father 4. The printer belonging to the school 5. The car belonging to the woman

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6. The house belonging to the family 7. The book belonging to Jack 8. The bike belonging to Shaharin

Exercise 2 – Add apostrophes in the correct places in the sentences below.

1. The spiders web was hanging from the branch. 2. My mums headache had got worse as the time went by. 3. Bens dog makes a loud noise when it barks. 4. My best friends sister is called Jodie and she likes shopping. 5. I like that girls coat. 6. The boys pet snake is crawling along the floor. 7. I’ll buy the food for Kates party. 8. Abirs party wasn’t very much fun.

Exercise 3

1. I’ve forgotten where I put Terri’s keys.

2. It’s strange how much the teacher’s voice reminds me of my uncle.

3. I haven’t been to my sister’s house for two years.

4. Sherlock’s powers of observation weren’t able to help him solve the case.

5. It isn’t like him to forget about his best friend’s birthday.

6. The goalkeeper’s foot was broken and she wasn’t able to play in the final game of the season.

7. My phone’s not able to receive calls but my sister’s phone is.

8. He’s going to decide which of Shakespeare’s plays is his favourite.

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Error Correction

Every year in the spring, the Year Eights go away for three day’s and two night’s to a place called the Broadwood Nature Reserve in Norfolk. Its a four-hour bus drive away. The kids sleep in cabins with bunk beds. There are campfires, marshmallows and long walks through the woods. The teachers have been prepping us about this all year long, so all the kids is excited about it except for me. It’s not even that I’m not excited, because I kind of am. It’s just

I’ve never slept away from home before and I’m kind of nervous. Most kids have had sleepovers by the time they’re my age not me not unless you include hospital stays, but even then Mum or Dad always stayed with me overnight. I never slept over at Aunt Kate and Uncle

Pete’s house. When I was really little that was mainly because there were too many medical issues.

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Lesson 30: Writing a fantasy story with a happy ending

Tom

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Good decision Part four: Happy ending

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Lesson 31

Do Now:

Put all the apostrophes in the correct places in these sentences.

a) I wont be able to go to Davids birthday.

b) He couldnt score with an open goal.

c) This nights going to be special.

d) I really wanted to learn more about the authors life.

Exercise 1

1. I can’t wait to go to Jamie Oliver’s new restaurant. 2. The sheep’s wool didn’t sell for much money. 3. Ever since the injury she suffered last season, Paula’s speed hasn’t been the same. 4. It doesn’t matter if you don’t like it: just say that your father’s cooking is wonderful. 5. I’m so glad that you think this spaghetti bolognese is better than your aunt’s. 6. He’s going to be upset if you don’t come from back from Zara’s home right now. 7. It’s a matter of opinion whether you prefer Ms. Smith’s class or Mr. Wright’s. 8. Harry’s scar was hurting which meant that he couldn’t waste another moment.

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Exercise 2

1) I cannot wait to get to Zaras birthday party.

2) The pupils exam paper was not handed in on time.

3) Despite a number of warnings, Yacoobs behaviour has not improved.

4) We have seen lots of exam papers, but Wilsons is certainly the best in the school.

5) Later on tonight, I will be playing basketball with Toms brother.

6) The boys knees were bleeding, but he did not care.

7) Could you tell Jessicas mum that I will be back for dinner?

8) It has been five years since we visited Amys house.

Exercise 3

Bill Sikes doesn’t trust anyone at all. After Oliver has been taken in by Rose and Mrs. Maylie, Bill meets with Fagin and Monks. Even though he’s a violent thug, Bill doesn’t trust Monks. He also loses trust in Nancy. When Nancy tells Bill that she’s going to see her friend, Bill says, “Let’s not get angry. We might suspect you have something to hide.” It is true that Nancy knows about all of Bill’s crimes, however she is more interested in Oliver’s safety. She can’t sit and watch Bill hunt and kill Oliver. Nancy doesn’t want to see Oliver killed, but she also doesn’t want to see him turn to a life of crime. We see Nancy’s kindness try to overcome Bill’s violence and aggression. Although Nancy wins the battle for Oliver’s life, it is a tragedy that she’s got to pay for it with her own.

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Error Correction

Very quickly I stripped off my pyjamas and put on my shirt and my jeans. I pulled my sweater over my head. It was neither navy-blue nor black. It was a sort of pale brown. It would have to do. My sneakers was the wrong colour too. They were white. But they were also dirty and that took a lot of the whiteness away. How long would it take me to get to the wood? It would take an hour and a half. As I bent down to tie the laces. I noticed my hands were shaking and my stomach had that awful prickly feeling as though it were full of small needles.

I ran down the steps: of the caravan and across to the workshop to get my fathers torch a torch is a good companion when you are alone outdoors at night and I wanted it with me. I grabbed the torch and went out of the workshop. The moon had long since disappeared, but the sky was clear and a great mass of star’s was wheeling above my head. There was no wind at all, there was no sound of any kind. To my right, going away into the blackness of the countryside, lay the lonely road that led to the dangerous wood.

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Lesson 31: Writing a fantasy story with a comeuppance

Tom

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Same as last lesson. Today you will write a different second half.

Part three: Bad decision Part four: Comeuppance

Vocabulary searing groaned scrambled escape thrust fiery grasped terror Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have included an apostrophe I have avoided putting I have used a more formal of possession for one of the apostrophes on words tone by avoiding characters that don't show omission contractions. or possession. Crafting check: I have written a fantasy quest with poetic justice. The main character makes the wrong choice and receives a comeuppance.

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Lesson 32

Do Now:

Put all the apostrophes in the correct places in these sentences.

a) Omars day couldnt get any worse.

b) It wasnt a pretty sight.

c) Tomorrows the start of the holidays.

d) A slug was crawling around Kellies salad.

e) The computer’s screen wasn’t as clean as I wanted it to be.

Exercise 1 - Put the apostrophes in the correct place.

1. Mannys windowsill was full of flowers and herbs. 2. The cats tail was curled around the basket. 3. The dishwashers lights were flashing rapidly. 4. Can you make some posters for Connies gig? 5. My dads foot looked swollen after he kicked the lamp post. 6. Zafars goldfish swims in circles around the fishbowl. 7. My friends aunt plays the piano beautifully. 8. I really like that mans hat.

Exercise 2

1. When the doorbell rings at three in the morning, it is never good news. 2. Alex Rider was not a heavy sleeper.

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3. His eyes flickered open but for a moment he did not move in his bed, lying on his back with his head resting on the pillow. 4. The moonlight spilled on to his chest and shoulders but he could not be seen from the door. 5. Alex was not yet fifteen, already well-built, with the body of an athlete. 6. He always knew that he would be a superstar. 7. The lamp post was flickering otherwise Alex would have been able to see the black ID number on the roof of the police car parked outside. 8. The porch light had not turned on but someone was outside the door.

Exercise 3

1. Alis hair was soaking as she had left her umbrella at home. 2. Callums skin tingled unpleasantly; he had not expected that loud noise. 3. Are you quite sure that it is safe to walk across Old Joes bridge? 4. He made sure he found his mothers car keys quickly otherwise they would have been late for school. 5. I will see you later at Rosas new café. 6. The birds wings flapped vigorously as he had seen a tasty meal. 7. Brads ballet shoes did not fit anymore as his feet had grown over the holidays. 8. I had not expected to beat Victors score on the pinball machine.

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Error Correction

He entered the house through the kitchen, the same way he had left it the night before. Was only eight o’clock, but the whole place seemed to be deserted he ran up the staircase and along the corridor to his room on the first floor. Slowly, he opened the door. It seemed his luck was holding out, there was nobody there. Without turning on the light he went inside and snatched up the telephone. The line was dead. Never mind. He found his Game Boy, all four cartridge’s, his yo-yo and the zit cream and crammed them into his pockets. He had already decided not to stay there. It was too dangerous. He would find somewhere to hide out.

He went back to the door and opened it. With a shock he saw Mr Grin standing in the hallway, looking hideous with his white face, his ginger hair and his mauve, twisted smile. Tomi reacted quickly, striking out with the heel of his right hand, but Mr Grin was quicker. He seemed to shimmy to one side, then his hand shot out, the side of it driving into Tomis throat. He gasped for breath but no breath came.

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Lesson 32: Writing a love story with a happy ending

Jean Carl

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Good decision Part four: Happy ending

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Lesson 33

Do Now:

Put all the apostrophes in the correct places in these sentences.

1. The computers keyboard was not working.

2. They werent very happy with their meal.

3. Davids not coming to the play tonight.

4. Hed found the magic key.

5. The suns rays shone over the lake.

Exercise 1

1. A gentle breeze flicked open the pages of Evies diary.

2. They have been walking for many miles.

3. Zafar would’ve been here if his train was on time.

4. It was unusual to find a book that Hermione had not read before.

5. Nathan and Gabriel are not talking to each other because they had an argument.

6. Euan could have could have tripped over Sabars schoolbag if she had not picked it up.

7. Zachs uncle will eat you alive if he finds you in here!

8. Mahdi’s stomach flipped as he thought about the taste of brussel sprouts.

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Exercise 2

RULE: If a singular word ends in –s, add ’+s .

RULE: If a singular word ends in –ss, still add ’+s

1. The sword belonging to the princess

2. The number plate belonging to the bus

3. The car belonging to Mr. Davies

4. The toy belonging to Rufus

5. The printer belonging to the business

6. The pen belonging to Nicholas

7. The book belonging to the class

8. The cat belonging to Farah Jones

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Exercise 3

1. The dress zip had broken.

2. Aaron’s hand had healed nicely after a few weeks.

3. The moon buggy sped over the small craters of Mars surface.

4. Sherlock Holme’s coat flapped about his legs as he strode out the door.

5. He realised that he was sitting in his boss chair.

6. As if by magic, a cup of tea appeared on Ms. Straus’s desk.

7. A blush stole across’s Thomas face as he thought about his embarrassing morning.

8. Paris buildings looked beautiful in the misty morning light.

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Error Correction

Lord Hellebore laughed into James face and his hot breath, which smelt sour and sulphurous, blasted him, almost making him choke. James was reminded of a time when he had been to London Zoo and, standing too close to a lions cage, the great beast had roared right at him. The lion’s breath had stunk of meat and of something else, something inhuman and frightening. Without the bars between them, the stink would have been the smell of death, but it wasn’t only Lord Hellebore’s breath that smelt. He is damp with sweat and there was an unpleasant, animal odour seeping from his body like a poisonous gas James wanted to hold his nose and run, but Hellebore pierced him with his gaze. His pupils very wide and black, like two deep, black holes surrounded by thin pale-blue rings.

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Lesson 33: Writing a love story with a comeuppance

Jean Carl

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Same as last lesson. Today you will write a different second half.

Part three: Bad decision Part four: Comeuppance

Vocabulary threatened terrified infatuated heartbroken sacrificed inseparable disappointed support Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have included speech and I have avoided putting I have included an punctuated it correctly. apostrophes on words apostrophe of possession for that don't show omission each of the characters. or possession. Crafting check: I have written a love story with poetic justice. The main character makes the wrong choice and receives a comeuppance.

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Lesson 34

Do Now:

1. Turn these phrases into phrases that use an apostrophe of possession. 2. Use each new phrase in a sentence. For example: The dog belonging to Ms. Parkes = Ms. Parkes’s dog snuggled in the sun.

1. The telephone belonging to Serena.

2. The hoodie belonging to James.

3. The springs belonging to the mattress.

4. The characters belonging to Roald Dahl.

Exercise 1- Turn these phrases into sentences that use apostrophes of possession.

RULE: If a singular word ends in –s, add ’+s .

1. The leaves belonging to the trees 2. The saddles belonging to the horses 3. The spells belonging to the witches 4. The rooms belonging to the businesses 5. The hisses belonging to the snakes Exercise 1 part b – Write the correct singular words using apostrophes for possession

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1) cat The ___cat’s______eyes were gleaming in the darkness. 2) home In the catalogue, the ______rooms were all beautifully presented. 3) book The ______pages were creamy and smooth. 4) actress The ______performances were incredible. 5) customer The ______complaints were all noted down. 6) bag The ______straps were all bright pink. 7) spice The ______aroma was very strong. 8) voice The ______melody was haunting and strange.

Exercise 2

Yesterdays Maths lesson was one of the more dramatic lessons I have been in. Once my class had taken out their books, I looked over to ensure the students desks were in order. The class atmosphere was one of orderly calm.

However, as soon as the students had got started on their writing, a bee flew into the room. I am allergic to bee stings, so I instinctively ducked under my desk. I was not the only one. As it zoomed past each student, the bee left a trail of chaos behind it. The desks contents flew everywhere whilst students frantically ducked for cover, chairs legs were thrust into the air to form makeshift shields and the students screams ripped through the air.

At the terrible sound, the head teacher, Ms. Jones, came running. She spotted the bee like a trained hunter, grabbed a book and mercilessly smashed the bee against a desk with a loud “thwack.” When the book was lifted, the bee wings twitched for a few seconds before it

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lay still. Ms. Jones face was a picture of disgust as if she was wondering how on earth I could be so pathetic. She swept out of the room whilst I tried to regain some sense of order.

Exercise 3

1. Shes coming home for Christmas. 2. My brother eats everything he see’s! 3. The vendor is selling balloon’s but I don’t have enough money to buy one. 4. It’s cold outside so youd’ better wear a warm coat. 5. I’m going to the shop’s to get some apples. 6. Jasmine and James’ hav’ent been able to bring in their homework.

Error Correction

Nobody came to my seventh birthday party.

There was a table laid with jellies and trifle’s, with a party hat beside each place and a birthday cake with seven candles on it in the centre of the table. The cake had a book drawn on it, in icing. My mother, who had organised the party, told me that the lady at the bakery said that they had never put a book on a birthday cake before, and that mostly for boys it was football’s or spaceships. I was their first book.

When it became obvious that nobody was coming. My mother lit the seven candles on the cake, and I blew them out. I ate a slice of the cake, as did my little sister and one of her friends

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(both of them attending the party as observers, not participants), before they fled, giggling, to the garden.

I unwrapped the newspaper around the pass-the-parcel gift myself, revealing a blue plastic Batman figure. I was sad that nobody had come to my party, but happy that I had a Batman figure. There was also a birthday present waiting to be read, a boxed set of the Narnia book’s, which I took upstairs. I lay on the bed and lost myself in the stories.

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Lesson 34: Writing an action story with a happy ending

Jacob

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Good decision Part four: Happy ending

Vocabulary crushed darkness adrenaline reputation nemesis gut terror sheer Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have avoided putting I have included an I have included an apostrophes on words that apostrophe of apostrophe of possession for don't show omission or possession for each of a group. possession. the characters. Crafting check: I have written an action story with poetic justice. The main character makes the right choice and receives a happy ending.

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Lesson 35

Do Now:

Complete these sentences using apostrophes of omission and possession.

1. Helens farm was not that far away.

2. That can not have been easy.

3. He did not see Ms. Khans dog behind him.

4. This article does not make sense to me.

5. Khalids not very well today.

Exercise 1

RULE: If a plural doesn’t end in -s, add ’+s

1. The cheese belonging to the mice

………………………………………………………………………………………………

2. The changing room belonging to the men

………………………………………………………………………………………………

3. The toys belonging to the children

………………………………………………………………………………………………

4. The wool belonging to the sheep

………………………………………………………………………………………………

5. The spines belonging to the cacti

………………………………………………………………………………………………

Exercise 2

Add the correct words with their apostrophes of contraction or possession, according to the instructions in the brackets.

Sherlock Holmes is an extraordinary character. His friend Watson often (contraction of cannot) keep up with him. Whilst Watson (contraction of does not) always understand what is

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going on, he does know that Holmes saves (possessive plural of person) lives. He is always on hand to help people and even solves (possessive plural of prince) and (possessive plural of princesses)problems. (contraction of he will) put on crafty disguises to get past murderers, thieves and blackmailers. However, (possessive singular of Holmes) true genius lies in his ability to think logically about things other people overlook. As a result, the reader often shares (possessive singular of Watson) admiration for his deductions. Holmes is always one step ahead of his enemies. These (possessive plural of villains) intelligence is never enough to defeat the magnificent Sherlock Holmes.

Exercise 3

Caz woke up with a start. Strange sounds were drifting through her window. Perhaps it was just the sound of owls screeches as they hunted for prey she thought, and turned over in her bed. Yet, it was a mix of very odd sounds. Some seemed to come from the black night, outside the walls of her house. Other sounds seemed to almost be in the room with her. A foxs yowl made her jump. Another sound of pounding paws came closer and then retreated. Then an eerie noise, like childrens cries, danced through the air and curled under her chest. The nights echoes were chilling her. She did not think she would be able to sleep. Then another sound started - a closer sound. Was that a mouses scrabbling she heard by the foot of her bed? Cazs skin was crawling. She pulled her feet closer to her. She could not work out her night-time visitors location.

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Error Correction

‘Im come, your Majesty,’ said Edmund, rushing eagerly forward.

‘How dare you come alone’ said the Witch in a terrible voice. ‘Did I not tell you to bring the others with you?’

‘Please, your Majesty,’ said Edmund, ‘I've done the best I can. I've brought them quite close. Their in the little house on top of the dam just up the river with Mr and Mrs Beaver.’

A slow cruel smile came over the Witches’ face. ‘Is this all your news?’ she asked.

‘No, your Majesty,’ said Edmund, and proceeded to tell her all he had heard before leaving the Beavers house.

‘What! Aslan?’ cried the Queen, ‘Aslan! Is this true? If I find you have lied to me –’

‘Please, I'm only repeating what they said, stammered Edmund. But the Queen, who was no longer attending to him, clapped her hands. Instantly, the same dwarf whom Edmund had seen with her before appeared.

‘Make ready our sledge,’ ordered the Witch, ‘and use the harness without bells.’

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Lesson 35: Writing an action story with a comeuppance

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Same as last lesson. Today you will write a different second half.

Part three: Bad decision Part four: Comeuppance

Vocabulary crushed darkness adrenaline Reputation nemesis gut terror Sheer Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have avoided comma splices. I have included an I have included an apostrophe of apostrophe of possession for possession for each of a group. the characters. Crafting check: I have written an action story with poetic justice. The main character makes the wrong choice and receives a comeuppance.

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Lesson 36

Do Now:

1. Complete these sentences.

2. Say whether the word is singular or plural.

house’s houses’ baby’s babies’

1. The ______fathers were all talking. 2. All the ______gardens were neat. 3. The ______toy had broken. 4. He couldn’t see anyone through the ______windows.

Exercise 1 – Circle the correct word from the choice below.

1. The childrens /children’s/childrens’ classroom was messy after the art lesson.

2. Shahid smelt burning and all of the potatoe’s/potatoes’/potatoes skins had turned black.

3. The foxes’/foxe’s/foxes’s screeches woke him up.

4. Allie had to queue as all the cubicles in the womens /women’s /womens’ shower block were being used.

5. The sound of the buffaloe’s / buffaloes’/ buffaloes hooves thundered across the field.

6. Carly scowled as she looked around the shop; all of the dresses’/dress’s/dresses’s prices were too high.

7. The crowds’/crowds/crowd’s shouts alerted the police officer to the fight.

8. He couldn’t reach as all of the ballons’s/balloons’/balloon’s strings were too small.

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Exercise 2 – Correct the mistakes in the sentences below.

1. Sophias tiny wardrobe was jammed full of dresses’.

2. Mr. Jones’ pet gerbil had escaped again.

3. In the classroom, all the desks’s stationery had disappeared.

4. The geeses honk’s were so loud that they could be heard a mile away.

5. The house’s front door gleamed out of the darkness.

6. Bilal sighed as the clocks regular ticking was irritating him.

4. The sheep’s wool kept them warm in the bitter winter months.

5. The roses thorns tore at the boys’ jumper.

Exercise 3

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1. Benny swam in the mens pool. The water spilled over the pools edges.

2. The young childs face crumpled as he realised that he had walked into the older

childrens play area.

3. The boys laughter grew louder as the geeses tails flapped about.

4. The two princesses dresses had been ruined by the cooks son.

5. The dragons breath stank like a thousand rotting frogs brains.

Error Correction

Jess and Tess were best friends at school. Year’s later, they couldn’t believe they’re luck when they ended up living next door to each other.

Jess and Tess both have two children. Jess’s children are seven and five years old. Her childrens’ names are Brian and Trudy. Brian’s favourite hobby is football. Whilst Trudy likes playing with the dog, Brian won’t go near it because he is too scared.

Tess has twin baby boys. Tess’s babies’ names are Ron and Angus. Ron’s favourite toy is a cuddly rabbit and Angus’s favourite toy is a cuddly lion. Ron doesn’t like the cuddly lion and

Angus dosen’t like the cuddly rabbit. Sometimes, their toys are the best way to tell them apart!

Jess and Tess like living next door to each other. However, it’s not always easy. Tess’s twins’ bedroom is next door to Jess’ children’s bedroom. Sometimes, Trudy’s sleep is interrupted by the babies’ crying. Brian will take up, too, but he’ll usually fall back to sleep pretty quickly. It’s not perfect, but generally Tess and Jess like it. They certainly wouldnt move any time soon.

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Lesson 36: Writing a satisfying story Title: “A Risk Worth Taking”

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Part four:

Vocabulary serene emergency pressure void oxygen mission terror perilous Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any fragments. I have included an I have included an apostrophe of apostrophe of possession for possession for each of a group. the characters. Crafting check: I have written a love/ action/ fantasy/ horror story (select one) with:  A clear, four part structure  Poetic justice All information prepared and resolved

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Lesson 37

Do Now:

Underline the correct phrase to complete the sentences.

1. The possessive cat’s describes something belonging to one/ more than one cat.

2. The possessive chickens’ describes something belonging to one/ more than one chicken.

3. The possessive Dickenses’ describes something belonging to one/ more than one Dickens.

4. The possessive Holmes’ describes something belonging to one/ more than one Holmes.

5. The possessive homes’ describes something belonging to one/ more than one home.

Exercise 1

Complete the following sentences by replacing the underlined nouns with a pronoun.

something us it everyone

they she he her

1. Yesterday was not a very nice day.

2. Why can’t Helen and Kurt just listen?

3. Where has the class gone?

4. I knocked on my friend’s door but it seemed like Harry was out.

5. Cal was running around in circles as Cal had already eaten five chocolate bars.

6. Alison’s rucksack was too full up.

7. The other football team keep making fun of our team.

8. A creature is moving in the bushes over there.

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Exercise 2

Pronouns Insert the correct pronouns into this passage. You can use each - she pronoun more than once. - herself - her Laura turned and took a few steps down the driveway. The sun seemed particularly bright, everything around ______looked so vivid and alive, the colours intense, and then the colours turned to liquid and bled into each other, like a watercolour painting left in the rain.

‘Look at that,’ ______heard ______say, and the voice seemed to come from far, far away.

______felt like ______was walking through treacle, as if ______legs were sinking into the ground, and then the light began to close in like a fist. Flickering darkness narrowed

______vision, ______head felt weightless, full of bubbles, and ______was falling forward. ______heard a noise like thunder and someone calling. ‘Look out… Look out…

Look out…’ The voice echoed and spun off into the darkness and Laura spun away after it, shrinking to a tiny speck, and then the tiny speck disappeared.

Exercise 3 - Fix up the unclear pronouns in this passage.

Damien had taken his cows, Clover and Hazel, to the cattle market. They had left home at

3 am in the morning so they were all tired. He lay down on a bale of straw whilst they watched him disapprovingly. He was snoring softly and his hat started to fall off. Then Hazel stayed where she was, but she moved a bit closer to have a look.

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Error Correction

Nathans flight has just landed so now I’m about to meet the mythical boy. And I admit I want to see him. I’m going to leave this world behind, but I want to see him before I do.

Nathan comes up the escalator and then stands still. Hes got a baseball cap on, mirrored sunglasses, a scarf, an army jacket, fingerless gloves, jeans and boots. She’s got hardly an inch of skin exposed, but what I can see is olive. And, for some reason, I can’t help but smile.

What is it about him?

He’s got a tatty, grubby backpack. He’s very skinny. And there’s something about him … the witch thing, only more so. He oozes the thing that is Black Witch.

I realise I’m just staring at him I need to get serious about this. He could be part of a trap. I look around for anything odd. I get up and walk around the arrivals hall again, taking it slow, assessing each person or group, watching those who are standing around, but each person, each group eventually moves off. And, every time I glance back at Nathan, he’s still there, unmoving.

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Lesson 37: Writing a satisfying story Title: “A Good Decision”

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Part four:

Vocabulary threatened terrified infatuated heartbroken sacrificed inseparable disappointed support Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have avoided comma splices. I have included speech I have used at least one in the present tense and possessive pronoun. used the correct verb form. Crafting check: I have written a love/ action/ fantasy/ horror story (select one) with:  A clear, four part structure  Poetic justice All information prepared and resolved

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Lesson 38

Do Now:

Complete these sentences using the correct pronoun.

We she myself them Nobody

a) We heard ______before we reached the top.

b) I set a new challenge for ______.

c) Is ______coming to the cinema?

d) ______turned up to the meeting.

e) ______are going to the ice rink tomorrow.

Exercise 1

Replace the underlined word or phrase with a pronoun.

RULE: When you want to show possession with a pronoun, you do not need an apostrophe.

1. Tyai’s computer arrived in a large box. Her computer arrived in a large box. 2. Callum and Sam walked to school together.

3. Are you going with Kelly and Zindani to the park?

4. Eric, Sayeed and I are best friends.

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5. The phone belonged to Caspar.

6. The boy’s bike was very fast.

7. Tuesday is the worst day of the week.

8. Emma didn’t like the look of that film.

Exercise 2

1. I really hope hes coming to the party.

2. Is this his rucksack?

3. Theyre going to the park at lunchtime.

4. Do you think shes going to come to the party?

5. I was not sure who the ball belonged to but someone said it was theirs.

6. Youre always so silly after you drink fizzy drinks.

7. I thought that the brown jacket might have been yours.

8. Their mascot was an eagle and ours was a large dragon.

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Exercise 3

1. The cake was her’s and she did not want to share it. ……………………………………………………………………………………………… 2. The boy couldn’t believe how many people had come to he’s birthday party. ……………………………………………………………………………………………… 3. The mens changing rooms were out of order. ……………………………………………………………………………………………… 4. I had six strawberry’s for breakfast. ……………………………………………………………………………………………… 5. The teacher see’s everything the class does. ……………………………………………………………………………………………… 6. I’ve lost my pen. Please can I borrow your’s? ……………………………………………………………………………………………… 7. The duck’s were swimming in a line. ……………………………………………………………………………………………… 8. The boy catches’ his ball. ………………………………………………………………………………………

Error Correction

“Rory! You’ve overslept again. Get yourself out of bed!” James Starbright was standing in the doorway of Rory’s bedroom on the second floor of the house they shared together near the King’s Road in Chelsea. It was seven forty-five in the morning and Rory should have been up and getting dressed, but all James could see was the back of Rory’s head with a clump of messy fair hair poking out from under the duvet and the curve of his body beneath. “Rory…” James said again. A hand appeared, clutched hold of the pillow and dragged it down. “What day is it, James?” The voice came from nowhere, muffled beneath the bedclothes. “It’s Thursday. It’s a school day.”

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“I dont want to go to school.” “Yes, you do.” He closed the bedroom door and a few seconds later he emerged, screwing up his eyes against the morning light. He threw back the duvet and rolled into a sitting position, looking around the wreck that was he’s room. There were crumpled clothes on the floor, school books and folders everywhere, DVDs and games stacked up beside his computer and Chelsea posters peeling off the walls. Just the way he liked it.

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Lesson 38: Writing a satisfying story Title: “The Potion”

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Part four:

Vocabulary searing groaned scrambled escape thrust gulped grasped terror Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have used apostrophes of I have included an I have used at least one omission correctly. apostrophe of possessive pronoun. possession for a group. Crafting check: I have written a love/ action/ fantasy/ horror story (select one) with:  A clear, four part structure  Poetic justice All information prepared and resolved

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Lesson 39

Do Now:

Complete these sentences using the correct noun or pronoun. His, mine, Cleo’s, hers, your, he’s, Eddie’s 1. ______car is a lot faster than mine. He can afford a better car!

2. I didn’t have my pencil. I turned to Cleo and asked if I could borrow ______.

3. Keon and I have known each other since primary school. my best

friend.

Exercise 1

RULE: If you want to show possession with a pronoun you do not use an apostrophe. You use a possessive pronoun to do this job.

1. Shes the only one who can tame the wild beast. 2. I think that one is theirs. 3. The ball was definitely ours so I am not sure why the other team took it. 4. Hollys very upset about the fight. 5. “Is that yours?” Shelby asked. 6. Use this computer. Hers is a bit slow. 7. Before we go to the game, hes going to tidy his room.

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8. Thats not my order.

Exercise 2

Circle the correct word to complete the sentence.

1. I think your / you’re beautiful. 2. His / He’s not in his room. 3. Their / They’re coats are already hanging up. 4. Whose / Who’s pen is this? 5. Whose/ Who’s going to the cinema tonight? 6. You said that their / they’re not very nice to you. 7. Dave didn’t like his / he’s new bike. 8. Your / You‘re lips have gone blue in the cold.

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Exercise 3

1. Who’s pen is this? I think it’s Charlie’s pen. 2. Whose copying you’re work? 3. He’s a boy who’s behaviour is very bad. 4. There book is over their, but you’re book is here. 5. Your house is much bigger than they’re house. It is the biggest, but its garden is smaller. 6. Your a good friend, but he’s not. 7. He’s bike is in there garage. 8. You’re hair is long, his hair is curly and they’re hair is brown.

Error Correction Hal was still friends with Ollie – even if most of their contact was through Facebook.

It wasnt easy being thousands of miles apart with an eight-hour time difference, so that while Hal was getting up and frantically grabbing his clothes, Ollie was still sound asleep. It was almost as if they were on different planets.

He’d seen Ollie quite recently. He’s parents had invited Hal out to San Francisco, where they’re house was, for ten days during the Easter holidays.

It had been a fantastic holiday. They had explored the city – the Golden Gate

Bridge, Fisherman’s Wharf, Alcatraz prison – and driven down the winding coastal road to Big Sur, where they had spent the weekend hiking and camping. In some of the most stunning countryside in California.

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Lesson 39: Writing a satisfying story Title: “The Hero”

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Part four:

Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have included speech in the I have used at least one I have included both whose present tense and used the possessive pronoun. and who's and used them correct verb form correctly. Crafting check: I have written a love/ action/ fantasy/ horror story (select one) with:  A clear, four part structure  Poetic justice All information prepared and resolved

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Lesson 40

Do Now: Complete these sentences using the words below. Your/you’re his/he’s whose / who’s 1. “Be quiet!” the teacher said. “ ______giving me a headache.” 2. The dog was excited. ______tail was wagging furiously. 3. making that awful noise? It sounds like a stampede of elephants.

Exercise 1

1. They will see the results of the competition in assembly. 2. You should have gone to the football match yesterday. 3. To make my recipe, I have bought six eggs and some plain flour. 4. The boy could not run any further as he was so tired. 5. There are not any more sweets left in the packet. 6. I was not going to go to my gym class tonight because I was running late. 7. All of the pupils who have forgotten their pen, come over here please. 8. I know that they are disappointed.

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Exercise 2

Read through these sentences and add the apostrophe if necessary. Some are already correct. 1. Its not open on Sunday. 2. The cat licked its fur to try and get rid of the dirt. 3. I don’t think its a good film. 4. The seagull opened its beak in delight when it saw the boy’s chips. 5. Its leaves are green. 6. Its a green leaf. 7. The rabbit bit a hole through its cage. 8. Its face was scrunched as it looked into the light.

Exercise 3

1. Its difficult to know if they’re hard working or not. 2. It’s a shame it’s beaches aren’t nicer.

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3. Whose responsible for your homework? 4. Look at the dog over there; it’s bark is very loud. 5. Your not thinking about they’re house again, are you? 6. Do you know whose bag their holding? 7. He’s hair had caught in it’s branches. 8. I think he’s coming to pick up you’re old guitar.

Error Correction The town of Castleford stands today as its stood for six hundred years, on a high block of granite amidst a small forest woodland the houses of Castleford are square and old, built of grey stone, with dark slate roofs and high chimneys. Taking advantage of every inch of space on the rock, the houses lean into each other, one built upon the next, with here and there a bush or tree growing out of the side of a building.

Their is one road from Castleford, a winding track rising sharply up from the forest, where it is lined with rocks and small stone’s. Followed far enough south, out of the forest, the track becomes a real road, paved with asphalt. Followed further, the road gets larger, is packed at all hours with cars and lorries who’s owners are rushing from city to city. Eventually the road take’s you to London, but London is a whole night’s drive from Castleford.

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Lesson 40: Writing a satisfying story Title: “Good Advice”

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Part four:

Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have included speech in the I have used at least one I have included both whose present tense and used the correct possessive pronoun. and who's and used them verb form correctly. Crafting check: I have written a love/ action/ fantasy/ horror story (select one) with:  A clear, four part structure  Poetic justice All information prepared and resolved

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Lesson 41

Do Now:

Complete these sentences using either its or it’s.

1. ______not fair!

2. The cat flicked ______tail.

3. Turn down that music. ______too loud.

4. ______nearly the weekend.

5. ______leaves were brown and shrivelled.

Exercise 1 – Correct the unclear pronouns

Joe sat on the rug holding a rattle. He pulled its tail whilst watching it trying to reach the bird. Mrs. Lee didn’t see any of this as she was concentrating on other things. She was having a conversation on hers.

Exercise 2

1. Do you know who’s car that is?

2. You shouldn’t have done that. You’re behaving quite rudely today.

3. Khalid knows that its only a film but he still finds it scary.

4. Stephan lost he’s bat in the park.

5. You’re all going to be feeling unwell tomorrow after eating so much.

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6. Whose your favourite main character?

7. The children picked up they’re bags.

8. The ginger cat swiped its claws.

Exercise 3 – Correct the apostrophe mistakes in this passage

Tessa walked into the room. The lights were flashing different colours and bouncing off the guests faces as they danced to the loud music. There was a table full of cake’s and crisps, but there were not many drinks. She saw one glass of coke left on the table and moved towards it quickly. That drink was her’s and she was not going to let anyone else have it! Just as she got there, a thirsty guest swiped the glass and gulped it down. Tessa was really annoyed at the host, Max. He had invited too many people to he’s party and now there was nothing to drink.

Error Correction

Look at Daisy and you think you know exactly the sort of person she is – one of those dainty, absolutely English girls with blue eyes and golden hair; the kind who’ll gallop across muddy fields in the rain clutching hockey stick’s and then sit down and eat ten iced buns at tea. I, on the other hand, bulge all over like a marshmallow man; my cheeks are moony-round and my hair and eyes are stubbornly dark brown.

i arrived from Hong Kong part way through year 8, and even then, when we were all still the little girls, she was already famous throughout Deepdean School she rode horses, was part of the lacrosse team and was a member of the Drama Society. The big girls took notice of her and by May the entire school knew that the Head Girl herself had called Daisy a ‘good sport’.

But thats’ only the outside of Daisy, the jolly part that everyone sees. The inside of her is not jolly at all.

It took me quite a while to discover that.

Lesson 41: Writing a satisfying story

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Title: “Regret”

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Part four:

Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have included speech in the I have included both his I have included both their present tense and used the and he's and used them and they're and used them correct verb form. correctly. correctly. Crafting check: I have written a love/ action/ fantasy/ horror story (select one) with:  A clear, four part structure  Poetic justice All information prepared and resolved

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Lesson 42

Do Now:

Complete these sentences using the correct possessive pronoun. You can only use each possessive pronoun once.

its my hers your mine

1. I fell over as ______skateboard slipped. 2. Is that ______lunch box? 3. This ring is ______! 4. ______thorns tore at my jumper. 5. I had forgotten my lunch, so Ava gave me half of ______.

Exercise 1 – Circle the correct word to complete the sentence.

1. Whose / Who’s that leaving the rugby pitch?

2. As far as I know his / he’s the only one left who needs to hand their book in.

3. The lions shook their / they’re manes as the flies buzzed around them.

4. Its / It’s a miracle that you managed to catch the ball.

5. Megan knows that your / you’re leaving early.

6. His / He’s not going to go to the theatre as he doesn’t feel very well.

7. Do you know whose / who’s shoe this is?

8. The bird moved its /it’s legs stiffly as it was cold.

Exercise 2 – Correct the unclear pronouns in this passage.

In the afternoon, Tina and Kerry went to the aquarium to see Echo the dolphin. After they walked into the dolphin room, she walked up to the glass to peer into the water. It swam up to her and opened its mouth as if it was speaking to her. She took a picture of Tina and Echo because it looked as if they were having a conversation.

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Exercise 3

David look’s at the large clock on the wall. It is nearly home-time and he can feel the itch of freedom running through his body. He sees he’s friends thinking the same thing. The bell rings. Everyone scrambles for their bag’s and David goes with his friends to pick up their’s. Freds’ bag is nearest so David chucks it over to him.

Error Correction

There was a dark line on the horizon. He could see it as he gazed out across the ocean.

Mostly the sky was a clear blue, but there, in the distance, it became an unhealthy purple darkness, like an old bruise. Imran would have assumed that it was land, except that it was off to the west of the ship. The only land nearby was to the east – the southernmost tip of africa.

Imran shook his head and got back to the mopping. He was the least experienced sailor on board. It was’nt his job to bring things to the attention of others. They didn’t like it.

He dipped his mop into his bucket and swabbed a patch of deck where one of the sailors had bled earlier that morning the man had caught his little finger in a coil of rope which had been suddenly whipped away by a movement of sails, taking his finger with it.

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Lesson 42: Writing a satisfying story Title: “The Comeuppance”

Echo

Tina Kerry

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Part four:

Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have included speech in the I have included both his I have used both its and it's present tense and used the and he's and used them and used them correctly. correct verb form. correctly. Crafting check: I have written a love/ action/ fantasy/ horror story (select one) with:  A clear, four part structure  Poetic justice All information prepared and resolved

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Lesson 43

Do Now: Correct the sentences. 1. My PE teacher said, “Heres my hat. Your very pale. The athlete’s are sitting in full sun today.”

2. His also pale, and he’s head is bald.

3. During the day, we watch as Mr Jone’s head get’s pinker and pinker.

4. He apply’s sun cream to his face and his leg’s.

5. He make’s sure that all his student’s are wearing sun protection.

6. Someone tell’s me that its extremely dangerous to get sunburnt, and then I feel concerned.

7. He worry’s when I tell him what has happened.

8. The students laughter hurt’s his feeling’s.

Exercise 1- Correct the following sentences: 1. I like watching programmes about how to survive in the wild, it’s good to feel prepared. 2. Even though life is easier indoors. 3. I went Camping with School and the instructors said, “always Be Prepared!” 4. Torch’s should have batterys and tin can’s need tin opener’s. 5. Dont just rely on your familys common sense. 6. I like to say expect the unexpected

Exercise 2 – Correct the errors in the following paragraph: Im afraid that I find dinosaur’s very difficult to believe in. I cant imagine how anything could get that big. I suspect that Hollywood just put a lot of different shaped rock’s together and

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made up some story’s to sell film’s. Take the skeleton in this picture, for example. Surely its far too big to do anything?

For example, its all very well being able to reach the leaves at the top of tree’s, but why would you need to when you have probably knocked them all down already?

Error Correction

What would you do if you saw fairy’s in the back garden? Thats what happened to Elsie and

Frances. They’re photographs appeared in a magazine in 1920, and seemed to prove that fairies existed.

The childrens pictures became very famous. Sixty years later, Elsie said, “Its not true! We made it up!” However, France’s view was very different. She still claimed that the photograph’s were real until the day that she died.

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Lesson 43: Writing a satisfying story Title: “A Matter of Life and Death”

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Part four:

Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any fragments. I have avoided comma I have put apostrophes in splices. the correct places and not used any incorrectly. Crafting check: I have written a love/ action/ fantasy/ horror story (select one) with:  A clear, four part structure  Poetic justice All information prepared and resolved

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Lesson 44

Do Now: Correct the sentences. 1. I wasn’t keen on dressing as a bear in the school play, the costume was too scratchy.

2. Because the costume was so convincing.

3. The Bear was required to chase one of the Actors off the Stage and Kill him.

4. The costumes’ inside was smelly and hot.

5. It didnt help that I had eaten garlic for dinner.

6. Just before I fainted, I shouted help me, and fell off the stage.

Exercise 1 – Correct the errors in the following paragraph: Isnt it funny how black and white films are so much more boring than films in colour? Childrens television is entirely in colour these days, thank goodness. Programme’s today are so much more interesting although my grandma’s film collection is the stuff of nightmares. Shes got so many black and white films and she watch’s them every Sunday. Its awful.

Its not that I have anything against people who lived a very, very long time ago. I just dont want to watch their movies. Thats all I have to say about that and my grandmother is fine with it.

Error Correction

All I want in life is to be the person who clash’s the cymbals at the end of a piece of music. If there isnt somebody waiting to clash the cymbal’s at the end of the music then how will the audience know when to clap? I said to my music teacher sir, how do I become the person who bring’s the music to a close with a clash of the cymbals? He turned to me and said you have talked when you were not supposed to and now I have to give you a detention, after school. I said sir, you are forgetting that we have an orchestra rehearsal then. He said you wanted a big clash and now you’ve got one.

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Lesson 44: Writing a satisfying story Title: “The Choice”

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Part four:

Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any fragments. I have avoided comma I have put apostrophes in splices. the correct places and not used any incorrectly. Crafting check: I have written a love/ action/ fantasy/ horror story (select one) with:  A clear, four part structure  Poetic justice All information prepared and resolved

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Lesson 45

Do Now: Correct the sentences. 1. Theres a new young peoples centre in my village, they let you borrow bikes.

2. When I first went there, I asked how much are your bikes?

3. There Free, they said.

4. Even though I heard them say very clearly that they were free.

5. Its such a brilliant idea that I told my best friend.

6. Shes never been on a bike, now I can teach her.

7. There so easy to ride. Their just Perfect for teaching.

Error Correction

Strawberry’s are my favourite fruit. Theyre so juicy and delicious. I wish that we could eat them all year long. If we get on the bus for half an hour we get to a strawberry farm. They let you pick tub’s of strawberries, my friends mum pay’s for them at the desk.

One summer, we picked so many strawberries that my friends mum could not afford to pay for all the fruits.

How could you do this to me? she cried.

We apologised.

I feel so embarrassed she sobbed.

The farmer said to my friend don’t worry. I like making jam and can use the extra fruit. If you’re mum pay’s for what she would like then I will use the rest in my jam.”

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Lesson 45: Writing a satisfying story

Title: “Poetic Justice”

Part one: Opening Part two: Choice

Part three: Part four:

Mastery Checks Mastery Check 1 Mastery Check 2 Mastery Check 3 I have not used any fragments. I have avoided comma I have put apostrophes in splices. the correct places and not used any incorrectly. Crafting check: I have written a love/ action/ fantasy/ horror story (select one) with:  A clear, four part structure  Poetic justice All information prepared and resolved

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