AP Persuasive Timed Writings & Self-Assessment How to LINE Your Essay; It S Not Fun, But

AP Persuasive Timed Writings & Self-Assessment How to LINE your essay; It’s not fun, but it works!

1. LINING – In order to see what you have written, one of the best techniques is to LINE your essay. This means that you rewrite your essay (or type) in the following format: After each piece of punctuation, you start a new line. Thus, your entire essay will be written in a sort of column. Once you have finished this, you need to annotate your findings. This means you read over what you have written and now what needs to be fixed. Finally, you write a new draft. In our case, we can also compare our lines to the HIGH scoring Anchor Essay. Here is what it should look like, roughly…

Part of the PART 1: Your Line PART 2: Your Annotation PART 3: Repair Work essay Introduction I think that it is very important  Get rid of “I think that” Who wants some new classes next Paragraph to add classes to schhol because  First line lacks interest year? (Hook) o many of the classes we have  Check spelling hear are dumb and if people  Check grammar usage As stated in source A, schools need to don’t like school they won’t go  This is a huge run-on; take a fresh approach to learning in the st and then the dropout rate will separate ideas 21 century. (quote) go up and that’s why no one  Off topic likes to go here.  I have no thesis By including new courses such as Film,  No Hook line or Repetition or Graphic Design, Video Marketing, and Quote Video Game Creation, more students will want to attend school. (Parallelism)

It is very, very important for our school to change with the times. (Repetition) NEED NEW THESIS STATEMENT With these new courses, our school will become a prestigious place to learn and will become a top Missouri school. First reason – You should get us some classes  Who is referred to as “you”? What are the new careers students 2nd paragraph we would like to take.  Who is us? A small group of need to prepare for? (Rhetorical students? Question) Like, a movie class.  Fragmented sentence As technology advances, so do the  Unnecessary comma demands for more rigorous courses in high school (topic Sent.)  Need a quote from source Source D agrees with this idea and states that “classes once reserved for college level students are now being modified to fit the traditional high school student’s learning needs.” Everybody would like this class.  Why would they like it? My sister is now in college studying Expand and give personal graphic design. She has often said that examples a similar type of class in high school would have better prepared her for her major. Such a class would have allowed her to skip three pre-requisite courses saving her over $2,100.00 in college expenses.  Need a rhetorical question to Where do high school’s begin with so be answered as topic sent. In many budget cuts? next paragraph  This process really makes you look at what you have written in a completely new way. You will see the good, the bad, and the ugly like you never have before. USE THE LANGUAGE OF THE AP & COMMON CORE SORING GUIDES IN PART 2!!

Other Areas to Edit:

 Eliminate mundane “To Be Verbs” and replace with Vibrant Verbs: (is, am, are, was, were, be, being, been, have, had, has)

 Get rid of the following words and replace with concrete diction: “Things/Stuff/A lot/This/That/These/Those”

 NO YOU – get rid of second person –ALWAYS!!!

 Elevate wimpy diction choices

 Do you have a title? Or does your work need to be in letter format?

 Strunk & White Rules 4 & 5 – comma & conjunctions; or a semi-colon; or divide in two for 2 Independent Clauses

 Don’t start sentences with a Conjunction: “FANBOYS” – for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so

 Don’t end a sentence with a preposition

PART 4: Self-Reflection and comparison to the Anchor Essay

 Write it all out or make a bulleted list. Either way, show your reflection on how you have done. Fill out the AP self-reflection scoring guide.

1. Read the Anchor essay in the Yellow booklet Mrs. Bryan has for you.

2. How do you know the anchor is a good product for comparison? 3. Is your position clear? What about the anchor? Explain how this is done. 4. What have you done well? What has the anchor done well?

5. Where are you struggling? What do you still need help with?

6. How will this revision process help improve your work on the next Synthesis Essay?