Comment form for 2nd Review Phase of the Deliverable 3a) Thematic assessment of pollinators, pollination and food production Reviewer Ch Pg st Line st Pg end Line Reviewer Comment Author response end Serena Heckler 5 0 0 0 0 The chapter offers many potential approaches to improved NRM based on The text has been revised to incorporate this ILK. It would be good to see this more emphasised in the executive suggestion, both in chapter 5 and in chapter 6 summary, as this is what the policy-makers will be most interested in. I also believe that the authors of Chapter 6 should pick up on these ideas and integrate them more convincingly into their chapter, which frames its whole presentation on a model of industrial agriculture and western-style land management. The lessons that may be derived from small-scale, traditional forestry, agriculture and land management are completely absent from Chapter 6. Richard Corlett Genera 0 0 0 0 This is an excellent SOD. Congratulations to the author team. Positive feedback is appreciated l Liliana Bravo 5 0 0 0 0 General comments We agree that community dialogues would be helpful · My acknowledgement for the invaluable compilation of experiences which but time and budget do not allow. We have give voice to local incorporated your suggestions about more illustrative communities on different places. material · In accordance with time and budge, chapter might be supplemented with more inputs from community dialogues conducted on different locations around the globe e.g. farmers/peasants, afro-descendents communities, local or indigenous peoles who inhabit key/representative landscapes at global and regional scales. · It might be also useful to include photos of (i) workshops with indigenous and local communities; (ii) evidence of local knowledge related to how different communities tackle difficult situations related to pollination services and food security/sovereignty. · In addition to Figure 5 (Page 33), it might be also helpful to include more illustrations related to local names of pollinators, plants, (agroe)cosystems, habitats, etc. · Regarding methodological issues presented in the chapter (2.1 Diversity of sociocultural methods for eliciting values; 2.1.1 context and aims; 2.1.2 socio-cultural valuation methods), it might be practical to include that information on a type of appendix at the end of the report. Natasha Fijn 5 0 0 0 0 Overall a thorough overview of the literature. Positive feedback is appreciated Serena Heckler 5 0 0 0 0 This chapter is infinitely improved from the first order draft. There is no Positive feedback is appreciated comparison. It is an interesting, comprehensive analysis of a diverse literature which, to my knowledge, has never been synthesised before. In general, my comments are minor, referring to small points. There are minor copy-editing errors throughout, but I have only commented when they might make a substantive difference to the text. Simone Athayde 5 0 0 0 0 Overall comment: Excellent chapter, very comprehensive and well-written. Positive feedback is appreciated The authors did really a great job on synthesizing and summarizing relevant information on this complex topic. Congratulations, and I look forward to the next draft! Patricia Balvanera 5 General 0 0 0 I would like to congratulate the lead and contributing authors of this Positive feedback is appreciated chapter for the wonderful work they have done. The new version is comme extremely relevant and well written. It will certainly be a very high nt benchmark for the following assessments on top of being an extremely important contribution to the issue of pollinators Geoff Hicks 5 0 0 0 0 General comment - It is good to see the valuable contribution that this ILK We have incorporated your suggestion and added a chapter brings to the whole discourse. We note however that despite the bat and a possum case example, and made reference chapter having a number of references to bats as pollinators, there is to a lizard. limited analysis of their loss due to disease or habitat loss/conversion. There is also limited if any reference to reptiles and small mammals, which is likely not to have been a high priority when searching databases or questioning of ILK holders. A couple of case studies on these species would be useful. Simone Athayde 5 0 0 0 0 Additional comment: I think that the authors forgot to include relevant ok aspects of the legal mechanisms protecting indigenous peoples knowledge about biodiversity, specifically the Convention on Biological Diversity (CBD). E. Miriam 5 General 0 0 0 I would highly recommend a map of the locations of all the human groups Essential Aldasoro Maya mentioned in the chapter. comme nts: E. Miriam 5 General 0 0 0 Its a shame that in the key words included for the review, the word These topics are discussed in sections 2.1 and 2.4.2 Aldasoro Maya ethnoentomology was not considered, if there is still some time it would be comme very good to find more information for example on the socio-cultural value nts: of beetles and otehr insects besides bees and butterflies. Sandra Diaz 5 6 1 6 1 Some of the key messages of this chapter are not mentioend explicitly The perspective has been incorporated and all the enough, or sharply enough in the SPM of the whole Assesment: Chapter 5 evidence about nature's benefits brought together in shows highly conviincing evidence that pollinators are a source of multiple a key message for the SPM benefits to people, well beyond the direct or indirect provision of food. This is not hihglighted explicilty enough in the key messages, especially in the case of non-indigenous societies. Sandra Diaz 5 6 1 6 1 Another key message that should be mentioned more explicilty in the SPM ok of the whole Assement: the fact that ILK about pollinators and their benefits and values is important to maintain their diversity, and the fact that ILK, in co-production with science, can be a source of solutions for the present challenges, does not appear with shapr enough focus at the level of the key messages. I suggest makiing an extra distillation effort to bring more specificity to the way pollinator-relevant ILK is reflected in the key messages. Liliana Bravo 5 6 2 6 2 Regarding the Executive Summary: The suggestion has been incorporated in the first key It might be helpful to include an introductory paragraph message describing/presenting the common thread running through the chapter. Canadian 5 6 3 6 3 Insert “Western” before “science” on this line, since ILK also includes The text has been revised and this sentence is no Government science, it’s just a different form longer included. Denise Matias 5 6 3 6 4 I'm not exactly sure whether "science" and "ILK" can be pit against each The text has been revised so that "science" and "ilk" other. There may be instances when "ILK" can be explained by "science" are no longer pitted against each other and may just be a matter of further research. It may be good to qualify "science" here using additional words. Top off my head, "hard science" Sandra Diaz 5 6 3 7 42 All the headline sentences of these paragraphs are good and relevant. ok However, there is too much on examples and detalis for an executive summary; e.g. lines 18-29 of page 6 do not need to be in such detail here; same with most of the text in lines 35-42 of page 7. UK Government 5 6 3 6 4 This comment applies throughout the chapter and not only to the page and Your suggestion has been incorporated and other lines specified. The chapter discusses 'diverse knowledge systems, including knowledge systems recognised in section 5.1.1 and a those of science and of indigenous and local peoples'. These knowledge justification for the focus on science and ILK presented systems are crucial, but discussion seems to neglect lay knowledge in in 1.2 developed countries, and non-indigenous knowledge in developing countries Catherine 5 6 4 6 4 Pollinators could be usefully defined in first sentence with particular Your suggestion has been incorporated and other Robinson reference to unique and comparable foci of ILK and science contributions to knowledge systems recognised in section 5.1.1 and a the understanding and management of pollinators globally. For example - justification for the focus on science and ILK presented "Pollination describes the processes that enable fertilization and in 1.2 reproduction which have understood and managed across the globe using contributions from ILK and science. While science has focused on the agency of insects, animals and wind as pollinators, ILK has also considered the spiritual relationships and agency of people, the species and the country that gives and received life'. Catherine 5 6 4 6 4 Not convinced contribution of diverse knowledge systems is 'very well The text has been revised so that the statement is Robinson established'. I suggest 'established, but incomplete' because, as this chapter now somewhat different and the confidence now highlights, there are still gaps in knowledge systems built between ILK and assigned to well established science to understand and manage pollinators and the pollination process Serena Heckler 5 6 5 6 6 Should be "socio-ecological knowledge" The more widely-accepted term in the scientific literature is social-ecological, so we have used this throughout. Samson Gwali 5 6 7 6 13 Try to avoid beginning a new sentence with an abbreviation! The text has been revised to correct this. Brondizio 5 12 12 the term "fuzzy logic" is not clear here and not fully explained elsewhere in The term is now described in section 5.1.5 the text.