Things to look for: Comma: Whitney, a sailor, His friend, Rainsford,

No comma before AND

CAPITALIZE: proper nouns (names of people, places) Paris, Madame Loisel, Monsieur Loisel

WOMAN= 1 WOMEN = more than 1

Would be = is An example of Madame Loisel’s greed would be . . . An example of Madame Loisel’s greed is . . . POQ: punctuation outside quotes= NO NO “XXX”, YES: “XXX,” Punctuation goes INSIDE quotation marks.

IT- must replace something!!! NO: “suspense is created because it makes the reader wonder what will happen.

YES: The use of words like “jagged” and “snarled” to describe the island makes the reader wonder if evil exists in this place.

Set up: Don’t say, the story describes or the author says, or the narrator says Tell me who is speaking or doing something/ what happened in the story directly before this event. Monsieur Loisel hands wife an invitation to a fancy party, but she “scornfully tossed the invitation on the table” (de Maupassant 226).

USE KEY WORDS IN YOUR EXPLANATION OF QUOTE

Avoid informal/slang words: get, gonna, “some stuff, “creeped out,” contractions, abbreviations