Student: ______Hour: 2-3 5-6 8-9 6 5 4 3 2 1 Superior Strong Good Okay Poor Incomplete On balance, the Need for revision Shows control and A bare beginning; Has a complete strengths Strengths and the outweighs skill in the main writer not yet grasp of the outweigh the need for revision strengths; needs requirements for showing any qualities; no weaknesses; a are about equal; a lot of work to this trait; many control or visible errors small amount of about half-way meet the strengths are mastery of this are present. revision is home. expectations for present. trait. needed. this trait.

Read each section below and pay attention to what is expected. Check box 1 when you have addressed and shown evidence for the expectation. When your writing is finished, put a score in the Student Score column. Score yourself a 6 if this is a Superior part and a 3 if that section is just ok. If you score yourself a 2 or 1, go back and correct what you see as missing. 1

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P   Corrected errors grade   Double Spaced e l

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S   Packet is organized & paperclipped(top to bottom) rubric, final, rough draft)

Why is it important to read your writing out  loud before you finalize it?

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Why is it important to use transition words  when you write?

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