Chapter 3, Activity 5, pages 115–116

Statements that Build and Protect Goodwill

Revise the following sentences to eliminate a tone that will damage human relations. Identify the specific weakness in each sentence. a Management expresses appreciation for all the maintenance engineers. Revision: b The senator’s vote for the bill containing revenue enhancements does not violate her campaign pledge. Revision: c An ambulance chaser arrived at the scene moments after the crash. Revision: d As leader of this work team, I suggest we change our meeting time to 9 a.m. Revision: e The corporate watchdogs are planning a visit next week. Revision: f A presenter should never be surprised by the reaction of his audience. Revision: g Cheryl Wasson, a lady doctor, recently joined the staff at Forrest General. Revision: h Our quadriplegic first-shift supervisor moves around the plant in a motorized wheelchair. Revision: i Obviously we had reached a Mexican standoff with the negotiations. Revision: j Josh Williams was recognized for his efforts. Revision:

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