Revising Your Memoir

Writer’s name:______Title of his/her memoir:______Editor’s name:______Per. #____

Memoir Revision Checklist for the Writer As the editor… 1. Read a classmate’s memoir once through without making any marks 2. Then, read over multiple times while fully completing this checklist for your classmate’s memoir 3. Make any/all revision or editing suggestions as you read through – do not limit yourself to this checklist. * After receiving the completed checklist & your rough draft back from the editor, bring it to class when you turn in your Final Draft.

 Does the memoir describe a clear setting? Highlight areas of improvement needed in YELLOW. Include a note next to these areas on what exactly he/she needs to improve.

 Does the memoir clearly reflect an overall mood? Yes / No What is/are the mood(s)?

 Is the message/theme/lesson clearly stated in the memoir? Yes / No What do you think is the message/theme/lesson?

 Is there a clear, effective structure – paragraphs & progression of events? Yes / No Is the dialogue all punctuated and structured correctly? Yes / No / Not always Highlight or circle areas to improve in ORANGE.

 Does the memoir eliminate unnecessary or weak words and use precise and powerful verbs? Highlight words to revise in RED.

 Does the memoir appeal to a variety of senses? (sight, smell, touch, taste, hear) Highlight all the fantastic imagery in GREEN. Which senses are not included the memoir?

 Is the imagery detailed and evocative? Can the reader picture ideas clearly? Yes / No / Average Write notes on the actual memoir for all places where the writer is just telling, not showing.

 Does the memoir use literary features effectively (simile, metaphor, personification, etc.)? Yes / No

 Does the memoir’s structure reflect that of Ung’s work, including… -- sensory imagery / descriptions of SHOW-not-tell thoughts and emotions? Yes / No / Average -- interesting and relevant dialogue? Yes / No / Average -- body language indicators and voice clues with the dialogue? Yes / No / Average -- conflict(s)? Internal conflict(s):______External conflict(s):______   Notes for Compliments & Suggestions

YOU MUST MAKE COMMENTS HERE!  Focus on what the writer did well & what you enjoyed and/or appreciated  Offer constructive ideas for improvement  Be detailed and focused in your feedback…make it worth your time and worth the author’s time. What could really help to make the author’s writing even stronger?