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Subject Reference: English 2.2

Internal assessment resource reference number: Eng/2/2_D6

Everyone is a critic

Supports internal assessment for:

Achievement Standard 90376 v2 Produce crafted and developed formal transactional writing

Credits: 3

Date version published: February 2009

Ministry of Education For use in internal assessment quality assurance status: from 2009

Teacher Guidelines: The following guidelines are supplied to enable teachers to carry out valid and consistent assessment using this internal assessment resource.

Context/setting: This resource may be used as part of a writing unit or as part of a film study. Students will write and develop a film review suitable for publication in a school newspaper read by Year 12 students. The review must be based on a film studied in class.

Conditions: Teachers should be aware that there are many reviews on popular films available via the internet. This activity should be worked on in class under teacher supervision to ensure authenticity. Teachers may guide students through the initial tasks, helping them to make suitable language choices. Teachers may demonstrate how the techniques/language choices used in the samples in the activity can be applied to the students’ own writing. As students develop their final drafts, teachers can offer appropriate guidance that writing may need further work on ideas, language, structure or accuracy in spelling, punctuation or paragraphing. Teachers may not correct errors, rewrite sentences or suggest specific ideas. Students should have access to dictionaries to check their writing. Word processing is acceptable providing it is done under teacher supervision.

Teachers are directed to Explanatory Notes 10 -12 in the achievement standard.

Resource requirements: Access to film reviews of films other than the one being studied. Access to dictionaries and computers as appropriate.

Internal Assessment Resource

Subject Reference: English 2.2

Internal assessment resource reference number: Eng/2/2_D6

Everyone is a critic

Supports internal assessment for: Achievement Standard 90376 v2 Produce crafted and developed formal transactional writing Credits: 3

Student Instructions Sheet

In this activity you will write a film review of at least 500 words on a film studied in class. The review will be suitable for publication in a school newspaper, with a readership of Year 12 students and your teacher.

Before you begin writing you will work through some introductory activities to prepare you to write your review.

You will be assessed on how well you:  express, develop and support your opinions about the film  your ability to use a writing style suitable to the task and audience  how well you organise your material  your accuracy in spelling, punctuation, grammar, syntax, paragraphing.

Introduction Going to the movies, buying a book, renting a DVD, buying a CD or computer game all cost time and money. The number of choices you are presented with as a consumer is staggering. A good review can help people make an informed decision that will reduce the amount of time and money they waste on products that turn out to be less than satisfying.

Task 1: Reviewing what you already know a) As a class discuss these questions about receiving opinions and making decisions:

 How do you usually decide which films or videos you want to see?  Whose opinion would you trust if they recommended a film or video? Why?  Whose opinion would you not trust at all? Why not?  What would convince you to trust the judgement of someone you didn’t know who recommended a film?  Do you ever read, listen to, or look at reviews? Are there any reviewers whose opinion you particularly trust? Which TV shows, radio stations, internet sites, newspapers or magazines have reviews that you would trust? Why?

Task 2: Giving an informal spoken film review a) Give an informal spoken review of a film to a partner. Think of a film you know well. Without revealing the name of the film, or giving really obvious hints such as the name of characters or actors:

 Briefly explain the genre of the film, the overall intentions of the director, and a brief plot summary.  Choose three particular aspects of the film such as special effects, acting, camera work, scariness, and evaluate how effective each aspect was, by referring to specific examples.  Give your partner a clear recommendation as to whether he or she should view it or not. b) Your partner will now ‘review’ your oral review by discussing each of the following aspects with you:

 How clear was the speaker’s opinion?  Did he/she give you an overview of the film so that the comments and examples made sense?  Did the speaker give away too much information about the film? (for example by revealing surprises in the plot, or how the film ended?)  How well did the speaker support his or her opinion with specific examples from the film?

 Did the speaker evaluate the film in relation to the intentions of the director? For example it might be unfair to criticise a romance film for not having exciting special effects, or a science fiction film for not being realistic.  Did the speaker give you a clear enough idea about the film for you to make a reasonable decision whether or not you would enjoy it?

Task 3: Judging a film on its own merits a) Write down three different genres of films that you are particularly familiar with, such as action, romance, period drama, art house, horror. b) For each genre draw a large circle. Arrange the circles so that they all intersect. c) Brainstorm at least five qualities that you think a successful film in that genre should have. In the intersecting parts of the circles record the aspects that are common to all films.

It is important when you review a film that you evaluate it in relation to its genre and the intentions of its director. It would be unfair to criticise a romantic comedy such as Sleepless in Seattle because it did not have enough action or special effects, but it would be reasonable to criticise it if the two lead actors did not make you care whether they got together or not.

Task 4: Building a vocabulary ‘toolbox’

a) Read at least three film reviews. Your teacher will provide some examples, or give you some suggestions where you might find some. As you read you will develop a vocabulary toolbox of typical words and phrases that describe different aspects of films by adding them to the table below.

b) Share the vocabulary you find as a class. Add new terms to your own toolbox.

Film Review Vocabulary Toolbox

Camera work Lighting Special Effects Acting and Casting visually stunning sumptuous over-the-top wooden technically superb evocative stunning convincing dull atmospheric budget believable state-of-the-art accomplished inspired

Costume Plot Dialogue Pace award-winning predictable leaden drawn-out period original stilted bum-numbing stylish muddled realistic tightly-scripted climax contrived fast moving

Task 5: Planning your review a) Record important details about the film your class has viewed such as: the title, director, genre, date of production, country of origin, and names of main actors. Record notes on these questions:  what is the director’s main aim?  what type of film is it supposed to be?  who is the target audience?  how is the film intended to make them feel or think? b) Decide whether your review will be positive, negative, or mixed. c) Read the table below showing how one student evaluated different aspects of the film Dracula to prepare for his film review.

Aspect Director’s Intention Supporting explanation and examples intention achieved? Acting For Dracula to be Yes Oldman is such a good actor that you really scary and repulsive, believe in his love for his dead wife. When he but somehow first sees the photo of Mina his eyes look sad sympathetic at the and gentle even though the rest of him is so same time. grotesque.

For Keanu Reeves No His performance is stilted. When he gets to seem like an married to Mina it looks like he is reading his innocent hero. lines off an autocue. Next to Oldman and Anthony Hopkins he just looks useless.

Wynona Ryder is No She’s just like Keanu. You don’t ever believe supposed to be the that she’s English. Even when she is woman that Dracula supposed to be feeling passionate (like when gave up his immortal she got married to Jonathon and when she soul for. started getting attracted to Dracula) she’s no different. Atmosphere To use colour and Sort of Beginning is excellent – the blood-washed lighting to create the screen when he stabs the crucifix, the way horror mood. the sky changed from blue to red when Jonathon left London and arrived in Transylvania, the screen is tinted red every time Dracula is around to create a mood of horror. It gets boring because he doesn’t use any different techniques after the first half hour. Pace To keep us No It’s too slow and repetitive. It lasts for 130 interested and to get minutes but it seems even longer. us on the edge of our seats – will Dracula steal Mina’s soul forever?

d) Choose the three or four aspects of the film for review that you feel contribute most to its overall success or failure of the film. Make up and complete a chart using the same four headings from task 5(c):

Aspect Director’s Intention Supporting explanation and intention achieved? examples

Task 6: Reading a student’s review Read the following review that one student wrote about the film Bram Stoker’s Dracula directed by Francis Ford Coppola. Also read the annotations about structure and language and answer the questions.

Structure Language

Introduction Deadly Dull Dracula In the Review of Bram Stoker’s Dracula directed by introduction, find  background Francis Ford Coppola an example of: information I am the Count and I luvvvve to count. Anyone who has  a pun  genre taken on the huge job of counting all the Dracula and  director  a rhetorical  writer’s vampire stories which have been made now has one question opinion of more to add to their list – Bram Stoker’s Dracula  listing. film. directed by Francis Ford Coppola. We all know how it goes: nocturnal, neck-biting, blood-sucking, castles, Why has the writer used these coffins, garlic, stakes through the heart. We already techniques? know every Dracula cliché there is. We’ve seen Buffy. And Sesame Street. Do we really need another vampire film? Does it add anything? Does it really, count? I don’t think so.

Plot Overview The story begins in 1462. On finding his wife has been tricked into killing herself, Vlad takes his revenge on the Summarises the world by turning himself into the blood-sucking vampire film to give Dracula (Gary Oldman). 400 years later Jonathon reader a general (Keanu Reeves, a real estate agent, visits his castle. idea of what the film is about Dracula sees a photo of Keanu’s fiancée, Mina, without ‘ruining’ it (Winona Ryder) who looks just like his dead wife, and by giving away decides to travel to London to see if they can patch any surprises. things up.

Acting There are some strong performances, and some which really need to be laid to rest - preferably six feet under. Gives two brief Gary Oldman is excellent as Dracula. He is totally contrasting believable as a handsome young hero at the beginning evaluations with and as a love-sick vampire later. When his wife dies supporting details from the film. and he goes into a rage and stabs the cross I felt sorry for him and shocked that he could do such a terrible, blasphemous thing.

© Crown 2009 8 Internal assessment resource reference number Eng/2/2_D6 PAGE FOR STUDENT USE Atmosphere When he sees the photo of Mina I felt scared for her In the body of the review, find an Discusses and Jonathon. His love for her, even though perverted example of: atmosphere by and murderous, was believable. On the other hand  simile focusing Keanu Reeves is as wooden as one of Dracula’s  metaphor particularly on coffins, and it is hardly believable that anyone would  a pun one aspect. give up their immortal soul for someone as inexpressive and irritating as Wynona Ryder. Why has the writer Opinion is used each supported with technique? specific Coppola creates a strong vampirish atmosphere, but to examples. the point of overkill. Take his use of colour. As you might expect there is quite a bit of red and black in the Concludes this section by film. When he stabs the cross, blood pours not just from making a strong the cross itself but from the sides and top of the screen statement of the to show the extent to which he had turned on God. writer’s opinion. When Jonathon leaves London the sky is bright blue but as he approaches Transylvania the sky is awash with Pace red. Whenever Dracula is in the frame everything is tinted with red to create a real sense of blood and Note how the danger. This had me fascinated at first but unfortunately writer has Coppola uses this one technique so much that you are organised the aspects in soon longing to see a few other colours as well, and you reverse order of begin to see it as an unoriginal and annoying gimmick. effectiveness. Statements The biggest fault in this film is the pace. The first half about acting are hour is great. I found the elaborate period costumes, the reasonably positive, set design, and the excellent camera work all riveting. It atmosphere less was different from any film I had ever seen before. positive, and Unfortunately the film keeps on going, very, very slowly pace negative. for another 100 tedious minutes. The pace was so slow Why is the that it gave me too much time to think, and what I began review organised in this way? to think was boring, boring, boring!

Conclusion Bram Stoker’s Dracula is based on a famous novel, made by a famous director, and stars famous actors. Restates writer’s opinion and There are aspects of the film that are very good when finishes review you think about them by themselves. Unfortunately, with a strong when you put them all together, you’ve got a film that statement. deserves a stake through its heart.

Task 7: Writing your first draft a) Write a catchy title for your review. b) Write an introduction that grabs the reader’s attention and clearly states:  the title of the film, director, principal actors  the genre and the director’s intention  your opinion of the film. c) Write a short paragraph giving an entertaining overview of the film. d) Write one paragraph for each aspect that you have chosen to evaluate, developing details from the table you completed in Task 5. e) Write a concluding paragraph that restates your opinion of the film and ends your review strongly.

Task 8: Craft your writing a) Read over your writing and then edit it by using the techniques mentioned in the student review of Bram Stoker’s Dracula in Task 6 as a checklist. b) Check all your spelling, punctuation, grammar, syntax and paragraphing. c) Before you develop your draft to its finished state, read the exemplars on pages 11 to 16. Talk about the strengths and the areas they could be improved. You may not use any of this material in your own review. d) Your finished review will be at least 500 words long. It will:  develop and support your opinions about the film  use language appropriate for an review and for a readership of Year 12 students and your teacher  follow a suitable review structure  use writing conventions accurately (spelling, punctuation, grammar, syntax, paragraphing).

Deeper Exemplar A: Not Achieved Surface features: features: achievement achievement criteria criteria assessing: assessing:  ideas BILLY ELLIOT Film Review conventions.  crafting  structure. Set in a small British town called Durham the story of a young boy Billy Elliot is told in the year of 1984 where a small community has been taken over by a Minors Strike. Writing is not crafted: Billy Elliot has a fresh, new angle to it and is a story well told  awkward which is proven by all of the awards this movie has won. expression in Writing several places. conventions are  incorrect/ The director Stephen Daldrey, a new comer to films has done not used inappropriate a realistic movie which people can relate to and emphisise with accurately word choices the characters – Imagine a small working clas family who are throughout: getting no income due to a minors strike for a whole year and  intrusive errors that same family dealing with the loss of a reasontely passed in mother and one word springs to mind, tension.  syntax  spelling  and The acting in this film Billy Elliot is inspiring and believeable paragraphing from the very start. throughout.

The pace was tightly scripted as viewers sat glued to there Titles not seats hoping for Billys Ballet future and sympathizing for the underlined. NB: a few Nana who was told to be quiet time and time again by Jackie random errors, or Elliot (Gary Lewis). minor editing Ideas are not lapses, are developed: Billy is an eleven year old boy who while boxing comes across acceptable.) muddled commentary on a group of young girls doing Ballet who are sharing the same the film. hall due to the minors strike and becomes rather intreiged by what he witnesses and before you know it Billy is a regular Some limited Ballet dancer. In the film there is a good use of contrast with supporting the Ballet lessons and the Minors yelling at the “scabs” in one detail. scene, also there is as good use of camera shots where Billy finds his freedom for example and runs along the road with a view of the ocean behind him.

Billy Elliot is an inspiration for the way he can break out of the expectations and traditions that surround him, as he was expected to become a Minor like his father and older brother and stay in his home town for his life where as Billy has greater and higher accomplishments on his mind and works hard at his goal with help from Mrs Wilkinson (Julie Walters) the Ballet instructor who takes Billy under her wing and becomes like mother figure to Billy and treats him as an adult. Julie Walters performance in this film is incredible which is backed up by the awards she has won from this feature.

Billy played by Jamie Bell also puts up an overall excellent performance with his package of good acting and dancing the provides a fresh exciting new feel to this movie and also has

© Crown 2009 11 Internal assessment resource reference number Eng/2/2_D6 PAGE FOR STUDENT USE Writing has some overall won individual awards. The character Billy shows structure, but responsibility from the very beginning as he prepares breakfast with weaknesses: for his Nana and then chases after her through a nearby field  jumbled as poor old Nan likes to wander. He is also a very caring boy introduction who is kind and happy. Billy shows his happiness in the  attempt made opening scene where he bounces on his bed to one of his to express brothers records which shows his energy and keenness to life. points in paragraphs, Paragraphs not The beauty of this film is the characters who touch Billys life well linked. like Mrs Wilkinson the Ballet instructor and when Jackie Elliot  weak finally realizes Billys talent. This movie is really good for all conclusion: ages and although a drama has also a lot of comedy details of throughout it. characterisation inappropriate at this point. Minimal overview / summation.

Exemplar B: Achievement Deeper features: Surface features: achievement achievement criteria criteria assessing: GREAT EFFECTS, BUT…. assessing:  ideas Bram Stoker’s Dracula  conventions.  crafting  structure. “One blood is the life and it shall be mine”. Yes there was plenty of blood and plenty of great effects in Francis Ford Coppola’s new film ‘Bram Stoker’s Dracula.’ A movie needs more than effects though. Dracula was a bit boring with the Writing Writing is drawn out story. The cast didn’t act to their full potential and conventions crafted: were dull, but Coppola made up for this by using great special are used reasonably clear effects, costume, lighting and make-up. accurately expression and throughout: appropriate titles language use. The film did an excellent job in the special effects department. underlined, Lacks degree of When Vlad the Impaler stabbed the cross after finding out that correct syntax, control needed his wife had committed suicide, blood poured out everywhere paragraphing, for merit. Some until the whole screen was flowing with blood. This was great punctuation and spelling. variety of syntax because it was so unexpected and it showed what a terrible and diction, (NB: a few although thing he had done. All that blood was a great introduction to his random errors, repetitive in new life as a vampire and got us in the mood for a good or minor editing places (eg vampire movie. lapses, are “great”). acceptable.) Coppola also used lighting cleverly. When Dracula or any of the other vampires were around, the lighting would turn red to show that there was danger. When there were no vampires it would turn blue to give a sense of safety. For example when Jonathon (Keanu Reeves) was leaving London the sky was blue because he was safe, but as he entered Transylvannia the background turned red because he was entering dangerous vampire country.

Costuming showed me the time the film was set in and this also was a technique that Coppola used well. One way it was good was because the costumes’ colour showed what was going on. Mina always wore blue because she was a nice, safe, quiet girl, but her friend Lucy always wore red because she was wild and outgoing.

Ideas are A technique that won Coppola an Academy Award was make- developed and up. Dracula’s physical shape changed almost all the time, from supported: A number of a handsome young man to a wrinkly, 400 year old vampire and straighforward then back again, into a bat and a posse of rats. The make-up points made about was so well done that you really believed that he could change the film, supported like this and helped show how powerful he was. with relevant examples. The problem was that the film is long and confusing. After 135 minutes it really did lose the plot. Part of the problem was that there were too many stories happening at the same time: Dracula in London trying to seduce Mina, Van Helsing trying to track down Dracula, Lucy getting used to being a vampire… Scenes seemed to jump from one to another and by the time

© Crown 2009 13 Internal assessment resource reference number Eng/2/2_D6 PAGE FOR STUDENT USE Writing is structured: the stories connected and began to make sense, it was too  an introduction late.  several points expressed in The best things about the film were all the techniques that paragraphs Coppola used and it was also good to find out about the  a conclusion which sums original Dracula story. The worst parts are that the film was too up the writer’s long and slow moving and the acting was dull, but this was overall opinion made up for by the makeup, costume, lighting and special of the film. effects. It was a movie that was enjoyable to watch if you are in the right mood -and if you have plenty of time.

Exemplar C: Merit Deeper features: Surface features: achievement DANCING TOWARDS YOUR HEART criteria assessing: achievement criteria Billy Elliot assessing:  ideas  conventions.  crafting  structure. “Just because I like ballet doesn’t mean I’m a poof”. An eleven year old boy wanting to do ballet, surrounded by a macho mining community. Sound a bit unbalanced? This must see movie directed by Stephen Daldry really pin-points the fact that not all male ballet dancers are ‘poofs’. With the superb storyline, outstanding acting and creative cinematography it isn’t any wonder why this film has been nominated for so many awards. Ideas are Writing conventions are developed and Set in Durham, North East England, Billy Elliot is the story of supported used accurately convincingly: an eleven year old boy who is lost in the muddle of a family throughout: but not grieving and the historical 1984 miners’ strike. Jackie Elliot titles underlined, convincingly (Gary Lewis) and Tony Elliot (Jamie Draven), are both miners correct syntax, (required for paragraphing, that are struggling to cope with the pressures of a mainly punctuation and excellence). mining community in strife. To carry on the family tradition Discussion is too spelling. plottish in parts. Jackie makes his son Billy, (Jamie Bell) take boxing lessons. (NB: a few This is so he can be just as tough as his older brother Tony, all random errors, or ready for a tough life in the mining industy. It just so happens minor editing lapses, are that Billy stumbles across a ballet class after one of his boxing acceptable.) Ideas are lessons, and decides to give it a go. Soon realizing that this is developed and his way of expressing himself, he starts attending ballet supported classes during his boxing lessons. Billy’s dance teacher, Mrs convincingly: Some thoughtful Wilkinson (Julie Walters) soon notices his incredible rhythm comments and expression. It is not until Billy gets caught going to ballet made. lessons by Jackie that the true beauty of the film begins to develop. As with all male ballet dancers Billy is immediately given the stereotypical label of being gay and his determination Writing is to prove to his father and brother that he is not is truly inspiring. crafted and He doesn’t get off to a good start however. Telling his father controlled, despite some that lots of men do ballet was fine, but then Billy mentions fluency lapses. Wayne Sleep. Not a good example, (but a very humourous Writing is clearly Does not one) for a boy accused of being gay to use. structured: ‘command  a challenging attention’ With spell bounding performances from Jamie Bell, (Billy Elliot) introduction (needed for  paragraphed excellence). and Gary Lewis, (Jackie Elliot), the reality of the fresh original discussion of storyline is easy to see. By casting Jamie Bell as the sincere storyline, Billy Elliot his previous ‘inexistence’ as an actor means there acting, are no images of him from previous movies. His long history in cinematograp dance is evident in the film as he shows so much enthusiasm hy  a conclusion and energy just like Billy. The tough look of Gary Lewis that echoes (Jackie Elliot) really makes you sympathize Billy and his the troubles with his father. One particular scene when Billy is introduction. caught doing ballet by Jackie, the harsh look on Gary Lewis’s face really emphasizes the angry person within.

Special mention must be made to Brian Tufano for his Ideas are outstanding achievements in the area of cinematography. The developed but not contrasting camera shots, lighting and scenery all change integrated tremendously throughout the film which will leave you (required for understanding poor Billy’s struggle between what he loves and excellence). what he fears. Whenever Billy is dancing to tranquil music, he Some is surrounded by giggling girls in white tutu’s. This image is generalisations and superficiality consistently contrasted to the violent, dark riot scenes. The detract. effect of this is really a must-see. It is both stunning to the heart and eye. Writing is crafted and controlled: With a running time of 110 minutes this captivating movie Reasonable range contains scenes for all viewers. There’s comedy, drama, of vocabulary and dance, history, the list is endless. sentence structures, but clichés detract. Does not command So if you are waiting for the next best thing since sliced bread attention (needed for be sure to dance your way into the inspiring tale of a young excellence). boy’s love for dance.

Exemplar D: Excellence Surface features: achievement criteria Deeper features: assessing: achievement Deadly Dull Dracula  conventions. criteria assessing: Review of Bram Stoker’s Dracula directed by Francis Ford  ideas Coppola  crafting  structure. I am the Count and I luvvvve to count. Anyone who has taken on the huge job of counting all the Dracula and vampire stories Writing is clearly and which have been made now has one more to add to their list – effectively Bram Stoker’s Dracula directed by Francis Ford Coppola. We all structured: know how it goes: nocturnal, neck-biting, blood-sucking, castles, introduction indicates the Writing is coffins, garlic, stakes through the heart. We already know every tone of the crafted, Dracula cliché there is. We’ve seen Buffy. And Sesame Street. review. controlled and Do we really need another vampire film? Does it add anything? commands Does it really, count? I don’t think so. attention: effective varying of sentence The story begins in 1462. On finding his wife has been tricked lengths for into killing herself, Vlad takes his revenge on the world by emphasis. turning himself into the blood-sucking vampire Dracula (Gary Sustained use of Oldman). 400 years later Jonathon (Keanu Reeves, a real humour / puns estate agent, visits his castle. Dracula sees a photo of Keanu’s Writing throughout. conventions fiancée, Mina, (Winona Ryder) who looks just like his dead wife, are used and decides to travel to London to see if they can patch things accurately up. throughout: titles underlined, There are some strong performances, and some which really correct syntax, paragraphing, need to be laid to rest - preferably six feet under. Gary Oldman punctuation and is excellent as Dracula. He is totally believable as a handsome spelling. young hero at the beginning and as a love-sick vampire later. (NB: a few When his wife dies and he goes into a rage and stabs the cross random errors, I felt sorry for him and shocked that he could do such a terrible, or minor editing lapses, are blasphemous thing. When he sees the photo of Mina I felt acceptable) scared for her and Jonathon. His love for her, even though perverted and murderous, was believable. On the other hand Keanu Reeves is as wooden as one of Dracula’s coffins, and it is hardly believable that anyone would give up their immortal soul for someone as inexpressive and irritating as Wynona Ryder.

Coppola creates a strong vampirish atmosphere, but to the point Ideas are of overkill. Take his use of colour. As you might expect there is developed and integrated quite a bit of red and black in the film. When he stabs the cross, convincingly: blood pours not just from the cross itself but from the sides and balances top of the screen to show the extent to which he had turned on positive aspects God. When Jonathon leaves London the sky is bright blue but with criticisms. as he approaches Transylvania the sky is awash with red. Whenever Dracula is in the frame everything is tinted with red to create a real sense of blood and danger. This had me fascinated at first but unfortunately Coppola uses this one technique so much that you are soon longing to see a few other

colours as well, and you begin to see it as an unoriginal and Writing is crafted, annoying gimmick. controlled and commands The biggest fault in this film is the pace. The first half hour is attention: great. I found the elaborate period costumes, the set design, effectively and the excellent camera work all riveting. It was different from combines sophisticated any film I had ever seen before. Unfortunately the film keeps on diction with going, very, very slowly for another 100 tedious minutes. The informal register. pace was so slow that it gave me too much time to think, and Writing is clearly and Skilfully what I began to think was boring, boring, boring! integrates effectively humour. structured: Sustains a real Bram Stoker’s Dracula is based on a famous novel, made by a purposefully sense of famous director, and stars famous actors. There are aspects of builds argument audience. the film that are very good when you think about them by throughout, reinforced by themselves. Unfortunately, when you put them all together, conclusion. you’ve got a film that deserves a stake through its heart.

Assessment Schedule: Eng/2/2_D6 - Produce crafted and developed formal transactional writing

Descriptor Example Achievement Develop and support ideas in a piece of Refer to annotated formal transactional writing. achievement exemplar B on page 12. Craft writing to create effects which are appropriate to audience, purpose and text type.

Structure material in a way that is appropriate to audience, purpose and text type.

Use writing conventions accurately.

Achievement Develop and support ideas Refer to annotated merit with Merit convincingly in a piece of formal exemplar C on page 14. transactional writing.

Craft controlled writing to create effects which are appropriate to audience, purpose and text type.

Structure material clearly in a way that is appropriate to audience, purpose and text type.

Achievement Develop, support, and integrate ideas Refer to annotated with Excellence convincingly, in a piece of formal excellence exemplar D transactional writing. on page 15.

Craft controlled writing to create effects which are appropriate to audience, purpose and text type, and which commands attention.

Structure material clearly and effectively in a way that is appropriate to audience, purpose and text type.